礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答基本切题，但第一句表达不自然，应该说“我主要是从父母和老师那里学会礼貌”。“Learning Pro Night”应改为“Learning to be polite”；“personal behavior”在这里不准确，可以用“polite behavior”或“good manners”。建议先直接回答，再补充父母和老师如何教你，例如教你问候别人、说“please”和“thank you”。

範例: I mainly learned to be polite from my parents and teachers. They taught me to greet people properly and to use words like “please” and “thank you.” For example, my parents reminded me to say hello whenever I visited someone’s home.

建議: 观点明确，但“when we have a greeting”不自然，应改为“when we greet someone”；“good mornings”应为“good morning”；“have a good impression to others”应为“make a good impression on others”。建议说明礼貌的重要性，例如它能体现尊重、帮助建立良好关系，并使用更自然的连接词。

範例: Absolutely. Being polite is very important because it shows respect and helps people feel comfortable. For example, saying “hello” and “thank you” can make a good impression and help us build positive relationships with others.

建議: 回答没有清楚列出具体场合，句子结构也不自然。“Each of the greetings and have our introductions”应改为“when greeting people or introducing ourselves”；“bring the first impressions”应改为“make a good first impression”。建议直接回答具体场合，如第一次见面、正式场合、与长辈或陌生人交流时，并补充礼貌的具体表现。

範例: We should be polite whenever we meet someone for the first time, attend a formal event, or speak to older people. In these situations, we should greet others, introduce ourselves clearly, and use polite expressions. This helps us make a good first impression.

建議: 内容相关，但时态错误：问题问过去经历，应使用“I would say”或“I used to say”，而不是“I will say”。“hollowed”应为“hello”；“no matter your parents...”结构不完整，建议改为“whether I was speaking to my parents, teachers, or classmates”。同时避免重复“bring a good impression”，可改为“make a good impression”。

範例: As a child, I would say “hello” or “good morning” to my parents, teachers, and classmates. I also used to say “please” when asking for something and “thank you” when receiving help. These small habits helped me show respect and make a good impression.

× Learning Pro Night is usually from my parents and teachers.

✓ Learning proper manners usually comes from my parents and teachers.

主语“Learning proper manners”是一个动名词短语，整体视为单数，因此谓语应使用单数形式“comes”，不能使用“come”。另外，“comes from”比“is from”更适合表达“学习礼貌来自父母和老师”。

× When we have a greeting we need to say hello or good mornings to people politely.

✓ When we greet people, we need to say hello or good morning politely.

“Good morning”是固定问候语，通常使用单数形式，不能写成“good mornings”。此外，“greet people”比“have a greeting”更自然。

× Besides, it will have a good impression to others.

✓ Besides, it will make a good impression on others.

固定搭配是“make a good impression on somebody”，表示“给某人留下好印象”。因此应使用介词“on”，而不是“to”。

× Each of the greetings and have our introductions being polite is important to bring the first impressions to others.

✓ Being polite when greeting people and introducing ourselves is important for making a good first impression on others.

原句的主语结构混乱，“Each of the greetings and have our introductions”不能构成正确的主语。可以使用动名词短语“Being polite when greeting people and introducing ourselves”作为主语。表达“留下第一印象”时，应使用固定搭配“make a good first impression”。

× Each of the greetings and have our introductions being polite is important to bring the first impressions to others.

✓ Being polite when greeting people and introducing ourselves is important for making a good first impression on others.

介词“for”后面应接动名词，因此使用“for making”，不能使用动词原形“for make”。“introducing ourselves”也与“greeting people”保持平行结构。

× I will say hollowed or good morning in the morning.

✓ I would say hello or good morning in the morning.

问题使用过去时“did you do”，回答童年时期的习惯时，应使用过去形式“would say”，不能使用表示将来或现在意愿的“will say”。问候语应写作“hello”，不是“hollowed”。

× This is a behavior that brings a good impression no matter your parents, teachers or classmates, it will bring good impression.

✓ This was a behavior that made a good impression on my parents, teachers, and classmates.

回答的是童年时期的行为，所以“is”和“brings”应改为过去时“was”和“made”。“will bring”是将来时，也不适合描述过去的习惯。

× This is a behavior that brings a good impression no matter your parents, teachers or classmates, it will bring good impression.

✓ This was a behavior that made a good impression on my parents, teachers, and classmates.

表示“给某人留下好印象”时，应使用“make a good impression on somebody”。因此这里需要使用介词“on”，并且“a good impression”中的冠词“a”不能省略。

× This is a behavior that brings a good impression no matter your parents, teachers or classmates, it will bring good impression.

✓ This was a behavior that made a good impression on my parents, teachers, and classmates.

原句用逗号连接了两个完整句子，形成逗号拼接错误。可以将两个分句合并成一个结构完整的句子，或使用句号、分号或连接词连接。