礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and correct grammar: include articles and commas, and avoid repeating the same phrase. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents, who always emphasized saying 'please', 'thank you' and greeting people. For example, when we met a neighbor for the first time, my parents would remind me to introduce myself and shake hands. As a result, I developed a habit of using polite phrases automatically.

建議: Make sure you answer the question directly using the correct word (polite, not quiet). Use a topic sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words like 'for example' or 'because'. Avoid awkward phrasing.

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps to build strong relationships and shows respect. For example, saying 'thank you' and listening carefully can make conversations smoother and reduce misunderstandings.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming occasions, then give one or two specific occasions with reasons. Use linking words like 'for instance' and keep sentences concise and grammatical.

範例: We should be polite in many situations, especially when meeting someone for the first time and during formal events. For instance, making a good first impression when you meet a colleague can help build trust and make future collaboration easier.

建議: Correct word choice and grammar (not 'pregnaness'). Start with a topic sentence stating what you did, then give a specific example or result. Use linking words like 'also' or 'so' and avoid tense inconsistencies.

範例: As a child, I showed politeness by always saying 'please' and 'thank you', especially when meeting someone new. I also listened carefully to others, so I could respond politely and avoid misunderstandings.

× My parents always reminded me of importance of saying thank you please and hello to someone else.

✓ My parents always reminded me of the importance of saying 'thank you', 'please' and 'hello' to other people.

The definite article 'the' is required before the noun 'importance' to refer to a specific concept. Also 'someone else' is awkward in this context; 'other people' or 'someone' is more natural. Use commas or quotation marks around short phrases like 'thank you' for clarity.

× Especially when we meet someone new, my parents always reminded me to say those things.

✓ Especially when I met someone new, my parents always reminded me to say those things.

The original mixes present 'we meet' with past 'reminded'. To keep tense consistent with 'reminded' (past), change 'we meet' to 'I met'. This fixes tense-pronoun agreement and maintains clarity about the speaker's past experience.

× Being quiet is very important because it helps build good relationships and shows respect for others.

✓ Being polite is very important because it helps build good relationships and shows respect for others.

'Being quiet' and 'being polite' have different meanings; the question asked about politeness, so 'polite' is the correct adjective. This is a word-choice error (adjective misuse) rather than grammar form.

× People, for example, saying thank you and listening carefully can make conversations smoother and prevent misunderstanding.

✓ For example, people saying 'thank you' and listening carefully can make conversations smoother and prevent misunderstandings.

The original sentence has an incorrect placement of the example phrase and a missing gerund connector. Starting with 'For example' and using the gerund phrase 'people saying' clarifies the structure. Also pluralize 'misunderstanding' to 'misunderstandings' for natural collocation.

× I think it is particularly important to meet people for the first time because first impression is very important to build a good relationship afterward and building trust between people.

✓ I think it is particularly important when meeting people for the first time because the first impression is very important for building a good relationship afterward and for building trust between people.

The noun phrase 'first impression' requires the definite article 'the'. Also 'to meet people for the first time' is better expressed as 'when meeting people for the first time' to sound natural. Use parallel 'for building' before both 'a good relationship' and 'building trust' (changed to 'for building trust') to correct structure and maintain parallelism.

× When I was a child, I tried to show my pregnaness by always saying thank you and please especially when I meet someone new.

✓ When I was a child, I tried to show my politeness by always saying 'thank you' and 'please', especially when I met someone new.

The invented word 'pregnaness' is incorrect; the intended word is 'politeness' (adjective 'polite' -> noun 'politeness'). Also maintain past tense consistency: change 'meet' to 'met' to match 'was' and 'tried'. Add commas for clarity.

× I also listened attentively to the people and it helps me to respond appropriately.

✓ I also listened attentively to people and it helped me to respond appropriately.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence starts in past tense ('listened') but then uses present tense 'helps' and 'me'. Change 'helps me' to 'helped me' to keep past-tense consistency. Also 'the people' is unnecessary; 'people' is more natural.