礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and subject, and add one or two specific examples with linking words. Avoid repetition and keep to under five sentences.

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my mother when I was a child. She was strict about manners, so she taught me to use polite words with adults and elderly people. For example, she always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and to greet older relatives respectfully. As a result, politeness became a habit for me.

建議: Focus on clear ideas and correct vocabulary. Use linking words to connect reason and result, correct word choice (polite, not flat), and avoid grammatical errors. Provide one or two specific reasons with examples.

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps you build good relationships. For instance, polite communication at work can make colleagues and customers more willing to cooperate, which can improve your career opportunities.

建議: Complete the answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting detail. Use linking words (for example, especially, such as) and give a concrete example from your experience. Keep sentences grammatically correct and concise.

範例: We should be polite in many situations, especially in customer service roles. For example, when I work at the café, I always greet customers warmly and speak politely because it creates a pleasant atmosphere and encourages them to return.

建議: Clarify meaning and fix unclear vocabulary. Begin with a direct statement and then give specific actions you took as a child. Avoid unintelligible phrases and check word choice. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: As a child, I showed politeness by using polite phrases when speaking to adults. For example, I always said “thank you” and bowed slightly to older people, and I used respectful language when addressing teachers and relatives.

× I learned how to be polite when I was a child told my mother.

✓ I learned how to be polite from my mother when I was a child.

The original sentence has a misplaced phrase 'told my mother' causing sentence structure error: the agent is confused. Use a correct preposition and word order: 'learned from my mother when I was a child' clarifies who taught the speaker and when.

× She was quite strict to be polite to adults.

✓ She was quite strict about being polite to adults.

Use 'strict about' to indicate what someone enforces. Also change 'to be polite' to the gerund 'being polite' after a preposition. This corrects preposition and verb form usage.

× For example, she taught me I have to use polite words to adults and elderly people and I also said I have to say thank you

✓ For example, she taught me that I had to use polite words with adults and elderly people, and I also had to say thank you.

The sentence mixes tenses and incorrect verb forms. Reporting past instruction requires past tense 'had to' not present 'have to'. Use 'that' to introduce the reported clause and the preposition 'with' for interacting with people. Use parallel structure for the second clause.

× Yes, I think being flat is very important this is because if we behave flat way to others it will help me to receive more kindly attention from others.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because if we behave politely toward others it will help us receive kinder attention from them.

'Flat' is the wrong adjective here; context requires 'polite.' 'Behave' needs the adverb 'politely.' Also correct pronoun consistency ('me' to 'us') and comparative form 'kinder' instead of 'more kindly.' Use 'toward' and simplify clauses for clarity.

× It can help our future jobs.

✓ It can help us in our future jobs.

Missing object pronoun and preposition: add 'us' as the beneficiary and 'in' to indicate relation to jobs. This makes the sentence grammatically complete.

× I think especially when we engaging customer service jobs, we should be polite.

✓ I think especially when we are engaging in customer service jobs, we should be polite.

The verb 'engaging' needs an auxiliary 'are' to form the present continuous and the preposition 'in' after 'engaging'. This fixes the present participle usage and preposition.

× I'm working for Cafe Coffee Shop and I think

✓ I'm working at a cafe (a coffee shop), and I think we need to be polite when serving customers.

Original sentence is incomplete (sentence without a verb/completion). Provide a complete thought relevant to the question: mention being polite when serving customers. Also use 'at a cafe' for workplace preposition and include an article.

× When I was a child I used polite phrases to adults and others to show politeness.

✓ When I was a child I used polite phrases with adults and others to show politeness.

Preposition 'to' is awkward for using phrases with people; 'with' is more natural. Past tense 'used' is correct, so adjust only the preposition.

× In Japanese we have applied flavors to our zetes.

✓ In Japanese we have polite expressions for greetings.

Original appears to be incorrect word choice ('applied flavors' and 'zetes' are incorrect). Replace with likely intended meaning: 'polite expressions' and 'greetings'. This fixes incorrect adjective/noun usage to convey intended idea.

× So I fly used those.

✓ So I often used those.

'Fly' is incorrect here; likely intended adverb 'often.' Use simple past 'used' as the action occurred in the past. This corrects the adverb choice and maintains past participle/tense consistency.