礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答较自然且具体，但存在语法与用词小错误（例如动词形式和冠词），句子有些冗长。建议：1) 注意动词时态和单复数（learned, behaviors -> behaviour 或 behavior; come -> came; let me to greet -> let me greet）；2) 拆分长句为两到三句以提高清晰度；3) 加入连接词使表达更流畅，例如 “for example” 后可用具体时间词或短语衔接。练习时可反复改写并朗读。

範例: I learned to be polite mainly by watching my parents. They taught me practical manners, too. For example, when my uncle visited, my mother would ask me to stand at the door and greet him politely.

建議: 回答直接且观点清晰，但有一些语法和搭配问题（everyone in the society -> everyone in society; help -> helps; between each other -> between people / with one another）。建议：1) 改正主谓一致和固定搭配；2) 使用一两个具体例子或结果以丰富内容；3) 句子尽量控制在三句内，避免重复同义表达。

範例: Yes, I think it's very important. Being polite helps people show respect and can build trust with others. For example, polite behavior at work or school often leads to better cooperation and stronger relationships.

建議: 回答方向正确但表达不够地道，有语法和搭配问题（fundamental basis -> fundamental basis/ foundation; people build -> people to build 或 for building; at the first time -> for the first time; providing a big smile -> giving a big smile / smiling warmly）。建议：1) 用更自然的短语替换生硬表达；2) 合理使用连接词并合并短句；3) 提供一两个具体场景说明，如 job interview 或 family gatherings。

範例: I think we should be polite in almost all situations, especially when meeting someone for the first time. Politeness — such as smiling warmly and greeting people respectfully — helps create a positive first impression at events like job interviews or family gatherings.

建議: 内容具体且有举例，但出现重复词（I I）和不太地道表达（said some greeting words; express my welcome）。建议：1) 修正重复和常见搭配，使用更自然表达如 “greeted my relatives” or “welcomed my relatives”；2) 把例子用连接词组织成两到三句，避免冗长；3) 可补充一小句说明原因或感受，使回答更完整。

範例: As a child I showed politeness in several simple ways. I would greet relatives warmly when they visited, share my snacks with classmates, and sometimes give small gifts to teachers to show my appreciation.

× When I was a child, I learned to be polite while observing my parents behaviors and they also taught me in a practical way.

✓ When I was a child, I learned to be polite while observing my parents' behavior, and they also taught me in practical ways.

原句中“parents behaviors”复数与名词搭配错误。应使用所有格“parents'”并将“behavior”作不可数名词或用单数形式。另外“in a practical way”改为复数或更自然的短语“in practical ways”。建议：遇到表示所属关系时用所有格或使用复数/不可数名词的正确形式。

× For example, when my uncle come to visit us, my mum would let me to greet my uncle in the front of the door of our house.

✓ For example, when my uncle came to visit us, my mum would let me greet him at the front door of our house.

原句有多处问题：动词时态和主谓一致“come”应为过去式“came”（与前文过去时匹配）；“would let me to greet”中“let”后接动词不带“to”，所以改为“let me greet”；“in the front of the door”搭配不自然，应为“at the front door”。建议：注意时态一致、固定搭配和不定式用法。

× Yes, it's very important. Everyone in the society hopes to be respected by others, so being polite is a good way to show your kindness.

✓ Yes, it's very important. Everyone in society hopes to be respected by others, so being polite is a good way to show kindness.

“in the society”中定冠词不必要，通常说“in society”。此外“show your kindness”中“your”显得多余，改为一般性的“show kindness”更自然。建议：英语中某些抽象名词前不加冠词，避免不必要的人称代词。

× In addition, being polite to others also help people to build trust between each other, which is crucial for our social connection.

✓ In addition, being polite to others also helps people build trust in each other, which is crucial for our social connections.

主语“being polite to others”或“being polite”是第三人称单数结构，谓语应为“helps”而非“help”。“build trust between each other”应为更自然的“build trust in each other”；“social connection”应为复数“social connections”或改为不可数“social connection”视语境。建议：注意主语形式与动词单三一致，固定搭配用法要准确。

× I would say almost all the occasions. Being polite is a fundamental basis for people build relationships.

✓ I would say almost all occasions. Being polite is a fundamental basis for people to build relationships.

原句“for people build relationships”缺少不定式“to”或动名词形式，使句子缺乏连贯结构。应为“for people to build”或“for people building”。建议：在表示目的或结果时注意使用不定式或正确的动名词结构。

× Especially when you meet someone at the first time.

✓ Especially when you meet someone for the first time.

固定短语为“for the first time”，而不是“at the first time”。注意介词搭配。建议：记忆常见时间短语的固定搭配。

× Providing a big smile can show your warm heart and build mutual trust between each other, which is quite essential for some social events.

✓ Giving a big smile can show your warmth and build mutual trust with others, which is quite essential for some social events.

“Providing a big smile”不自然，用“giving a big smile”或“smiling”更自然；“show your warm heart”中“warm heart”用法不当，改为“show your warmth”；“build mutual trust between each other”冗余，改为“build mutual trust with others”。建议：选择自然的动词搭配和避免冗余结构。

× When I was a child, I I showed my kindness by quite different ways.

✓ When I was a child, I showed my kindness in quite different ways.

原句多了一个“I”重复，并且搭配“by quite different ways”不自然，应为“in quite different ways”或“by quite different means”。建议：避免代词重复，注意介词短语搭配。

× For example, I said some greeting words to express my welcome when my relatives came to visit.

✓ For example, I said some greetings to express my welcome when my relatives came to visit.

“greeting words”较少用，常用复数名词“greetings”。“express my welcome”用法生硬，但可接受；可改为“express my welcome”或更自然的“welcome them”。建议：使用常见搭配如“say greetings”或“welcome someone”。

× In school, I shared my snacks with my classmates and gave small gifts to teachers to show my appreciation for them.

✓ In school, I shared my snacks with my classmates and gave small gifts to my teachers to show my appreciation for them.

“gave small gifts to teachers”缺少所有格“my”，在特定语境下需指明对象。建议：当谈到特定人群（如自己的老师）时，使用所有格或限定词以明确指代。