礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答内容相关且有条理，但存在语法和表达冗余的问题，语句有重复（例如“and also another source is was”/“mimicked them, their behaviors”），有停顿和不完整句子。建议：1) 简化并直接回答，先给主题句表明来源（parents and media），然后用1-2个具体支持细节；2) 注意句子完整性与时态一致，避免重复表达；3) 使用衔接词（for example, also）使逻辑更清晰。练习时把答案控制在3-4句内并大声朗读纠正语法错误。

範例: I learned politeness mainly from my parents and, to a lesser extent, from cartoons and videos. For example, my parents showed me how to greet elders and say “please” and “thank you,” which I copied until it became a habit. Also, watching international cartoons introduced me to different polite expressions used in other cultures.

建議: 回答观点明确并有例子，但有词汇和语法小错误（“crucially important”稍显笨重；“someone of for the first time”有多余词；句子未完成“builds trust between”缺宾语）。建议：1) 使用更自然的短语（e.g. very important / essential）；2) 修正不完整句子并补足宾语；3) 用连接词（for example, furthermore）自然衔接例子。将答案控制在3句以内，确保每句完整。

範例: Yes, I think being polite is essential. For example, when applying for a job, polite and professional behaviour helps you make a good impression on HR. Also, when meeting someone for the first time, politeness helps to build trust and a positive relationship.

建議: 观点清晰且包含深入见解（控制礼貌程度），但存在重复、犹豫词（"And we should. But we should"、"uh"）和表述不够精炼。建议：1) 避免口头禅和重复，合并句子以提高流畅度；2) 给出一两个具体场景支持观点（e.g. family gatherings vs formal meetings）；3) 使用自然连接词（however, for close friends）。练习时可先在脑中组织两到三句再回答。

範例: I think we should be polite in most situations, such as at work or when meeting someone new, because it shows respect. However, with close friends and family we can be more relaxed, since too much formality can create distance and feel awkward.

建議: 回答有内容但非常不完整且多次重复（"I would not. I would not."）且有语法错误（"call the my relatives aunt, uncle"，不完整的结尾）。建议：1) 完整描述一两个具体举动并给出结果；2) 修正语法（e.g. call my relatives “aunt” and “uncle”）；3) 控制句子长度，避免反复停顿，确保句子有结尾。可以事先准备并练习1-2个短例子。

範例: As a child, I showed politeness by calling older relatives “aunt” or “uncle,” which my parents insisted on. After repeating it many times, it became a habit, and I always greeted them politely whenever I visited their home.

× You know, kids are very good at imitations.

✓ You know, kids are very good at imitating.

此处应使用现在分词短语作宾语补足或动名词形式表示“擅长做某事”。“good at”后面需接动名词（-ing）而不是名词“imitations”。改为“good at imitating”更符合英语搭配习惯。

× So when I was a kid I just mimicked them, their behaviors.

✓ So when I was a kid I just mimicked their behavior.

原句中“mimicked them, their behaviors”重复且结构不清。“mimic”直接跟宾语即可，且“behavior”在此应为不可数名词，表示一类行为，使用单数更自然。将句子简化为“mimicked their behavior”。（分类遵循修正变化，虽然涉及名词单复数，但主要为过去分词/宾语结构问题。）

× And also another source is was the cartoons and videos.

✓ Another source was cartoons and videos.

原句中存在冗余动词“is was”错误。并且“the cartoons and videos”加定冠词并非必要，通常表述为复数泛指“cartoons and videos”。因此改为“Another source was cartoons and videos.”

× While my parents taught me local customs, the video taught other culture.

✓ While my parents taught me local customs, videos taught me about other cultures.

原句中“the video”与后半句“other culture”搭配不当。若泛指不同文化，应使用复数“videos”或“the videos I watched”并且“other cultures”或“about other cultures”。同时补上“taught me about”以表达“教会我关于……”。因此改为“videos taught me about other cultures.”

× I think being polite is crucially important for everyone.

✓ I think being polite is crucially important to everyone.

形容词短语“important”通常与介词“to”连用表示对某人重要，使用“for”在某些上下文可行但“important to everyone”更自然、常见。

× when you're applying for a job, you should behave politely and professionally in order to leave a good impression on HR.

✓ when you're applying for a job, you should behave politely and professionally in order to leave a good impression on HR.

此句语法正确，无需改动。保留原句。（标注为介词类检查，确认无误。）

× when you meet with someone of for the first time, you should behave politely also because that builds trust between.

✓ when you meet someone for the first time, you should behave politely because that builds trust between you.

原句中“meet with someone of for the first time”有词序和介词选择错误，正确为“meet someone for the first time”。此外短语“builds trust between”后需有双方对象，应补上“you”或“you and them”。因此改为“...builds trust between you.”

× And we should. But we should control the degree of politeness that we show to each other because, uh, excessive politeness will create a sense of distance that will make close friends feel strange.

✓ We should, but we should control the degree of politeness we show to each other because excessive politeness can create a sense of distance that makes close friends feel strange.

原句有不完整句“And we should.”且重复啰嗦。将句子合并为一个完整句更流畅。将“will create...will make”简化为“can create...that makes”更符合表达习惯。去掉填充词“uh”。

× When I was a child I would call the my relatives aunt, uncle and that was what my parents taught me and after several times of repeating it turned into my own habits and whenever I dropped a visit to my relatives home, I would not. I would not.

✓ When I was a child I would call my relatives 'Aunt' and 'Uncle,' which was what my parents taught me. After repeating it several times it became a habit, and whenever I visited my relatives' home, I would do so politely.

原句存在多处问题：多余冠词“the my relatives”、表达混乱“call the my relatives aunt, uncle”、时态与结构杂糅，以及最后不完整的句子“I would not. I would not.”。改为更清晰的句子并修正冠词和所有格（relatives' home）用法，同时把含义补完整为“我会礼貌地探访”。解释与建议：避免重复冠词，注意所有格（relatives' home），将句子拆分成更短的完整句，补全不完整的结尾。