礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and shows a clear idea, but it has grammar errors (tense and phrasing), some redundancy, and could be a bit more specific. Keep it to 2–4 concise sentences, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example. Use correct tense and smoother phrasing (e.g., “I learned by watching…”).

範例: I learned to be polite mainly by watching my parents and other elders. For example, they always greeted visitors warmly and used phrases like “please” and “thank you,” so I copied their behavior and practiced those phrases myself.

建議: The idea is good but the response is long, repetitive and has several grammar and coherence problems. Aim for one clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid vague phrases like “upper hand.”

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build good relationships both at work and in private life. For example, polite behavior can make colleagues more willing to cooperate and friends more likely to support you.

建議: This answer is problematic: it contains inappropriate and violent language and unclear phrasing. In IELTS you must avoid advocating violence and speak politely. Give a simple, reasonable stance: say we should be polite in most situations, but set boundaries politely when needed. Use linking words and one clear example.

範例: We should generally be polite in most situations, such as at work, with neighbors, and when meeting new people. However, if someone behaves aggressively, it is better to set boundaries calmly or remove yourself from the situation rather than respond angrily.

建議: Your answer is relevant and contains good examples, but the tense usage and sentence flow need correction and conciseness. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one concrete example, using correct past tense and natural linking words.

範例: When guests came to our house, I always greeted them politely and used phrases like “please” and “thank you.” I also helped by offering tea or snacks to make them feel welcome.

× As a child, I have observed my parents and my elders while they are polite and they talk respectfully with others.

✓ As a child, I observed my parents and my elders being polite and talking respectfully with others.

The original mixes present perfect 'have observed' with a past-time context 'As a child' and uses an awkward clause 'while they are polite'. Use simple past 'observed' for a past habitual action and use the present participle 'being' and 'talking' to describe simultaneous actions. Suggestion: use consistent past tense and verb+ing for actions happening at the same time.

× So as a child I followed them and that's how I learned being polite.

✓ So as a child I followed them, and that's how I learned to be polite.

After 'learned' we normally use the infinitive 'to be' rather than the gerund 'being' to indicate acquiring a skill or habit. Use 'learned to be polite' for correct verb pattern.

× Yeah, certainly I believe that being polite is important as it impacts in our life too in professional and personal life being polite people respects us and they it is always an upper hand as people give priority to us as we are respectful and being polite.

✓ Yes, I certainly believe that being polite is important because it affects our professional and personal lives: polite people respect us, and we often have an advantage because people give priority to those who are respectful and polite.

Multiple problems: 'impacts in our life' is incorrect preposition use and countable noun forms; 'life' should be plural 'lives' when speaking generally; run-on sentence needs splitting and clearer connectors; 'being polite people respects us' has subject-verb agreement and word order issues—use 'polite people respect us'; remove extra words like 'they it is'. Suggestions: use 'affect our lives', pluralize 'lives', split into shorter clauses, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× We should be polite on every occasion unless an alternate someone is crossing the limits and messing things up with you.

✓ We should be polite on every occasion unless someone is crossing the line and mistreating you.

The phrase 'an alternate someone' is ungrammatical; use 'someone' or 'an alternative' depending on meaning. 'Crossing the limits' is unnatural—use 'crossing the line'. 'Messing things up with you' is informal and unclear; replace with 'mistreating you' or 'causing trouble for you'. Keep pronouns consistent.

× If these things happen you can just crawl you can just go down to their level and punch them

✓ If that happens, you should not stoop to their level or resort to violence.

The original contains awkward and conflicting expressions: 'you can just crawl you can just go down to their level and punch them' is ungrammatical and suggests violence. 'Crawl' is inappropriate; 'go down to their level' is idiomatic but needs negation when advising against it. Suggest a clearer, nonviolent recommendation: 'do not stoop to their level' and avoid physical retaliation.

× As a child, when guests arrive in my home, I usually talk to them with great respect and I used to use phrases like please thank you and I offer I used to offer a cup of coffee and snacks to them.

✓ As a child, when guests arrived at my home, I usually spoke to them with great respect and used phrases like 'please' and 'thank you', and I used to offer them a cup of coffee and some snacks.

Tense inconsistency: 'As a child' requires past tense 'arrived' and 'spoke' rather than present 'arrive' and 'talk'. Remove repetition 'I offer I used to offer' and correct preposition 'at my home'. Place 'please' and 'thank you' in commas or quotes for clarity. Use 'offer them a cup of coffee and some snacks' for natural word order.