礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, fix verb forms and word choice, and give a clear specific example. Use one or two linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas. Aim for 2–4 sentences and avoid unclear phrases like "when I was sued."

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. For example, my mother always reminded me to say "thank you" and "sorry," and my teacher would gently correct me when I used rude words, which helped me form good habits.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, remove filler words, and be more specific with reasons and examples. Use cohesive devices such as "because" or "so" to link cause and effect. Replace vague phrases like "other people" with precise terms (e.g., colleagues, customers). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, being polite is very important because it shows you respect other people's feelings and improves teamwork. For instance, at work I always thank my colleagues and apologize when I make a mistake, which makes collaboration smoother.

建議: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Begin with a general statement, then give specific occasions. Avoid incorrect or confusing phrases (e.g., "properly transposed"). Use linking words such as "especially" and "for example" correctly. Keep answers brief and specific.

範例: We should be polite in many situations, especially in formal settings such as job interviews and business meetings. For example, it is polite to thank participants after a meeting and to say "excuse me" when interrupting someone.

建議: Answer with a clear past-tense topic sentence, remove hesitations, and give a concise specific example of behavior. Correct small errors (e.g., "greet everyone," "people you do or don't know"). Use one linking phrase like "for example" or "for instance."

範例: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting everyone to show respect. For example, my parents encouraged me to say "hello" to people I knew and even to strangers, which taught me to be friendly and considerate.

× Well, I learned many from my parents and my teachers who umm, always encouraged me to be polite and behave respectfully.

✓ Well, I learned many things from my parents and my teachers, who always encouraged me to be polite and to behave respectfully.

The sentence uses 'many' without a noun; 'many' requires a countable noun like 'things'. Also add 'to' before 'behave' for parallel infinitive structure. Suggestion: use 'many things' and maintain parallelism with 'to be' and 'to behave'.

× For example, my mother always remind me to say thank you or sorry and my teacher correct me uh gently when I was sued.

✓ For example, my mother always reminded me to say 'thank you' or 'sorry', and my teacher corrected me gently when I was a child.

Subject-verb agreement: with singular subjects 'mother' and 'teacher' in past context, verbs should be 'reminded' and 'corrected'. Also 'when I was sued' is incorrect—likely intended 'when I was small/young/a child'. Use 'a child' for clarity. Remove filler sounds and fix punctuation.

× Yes, definitely being polite is an important thing because it shows, uh, you value other people's feelings and it helps you build relationship with the other people.

✓ Yes, definitely being polite is important because it shows you value other people's feelings and it helps you build relationships with other people.

Remove unnecessary article 'an' before 'important' (we often say 'is important' not 'is an important thing'). Use plural 'relationships' and remove redundant 'the' before 'other people'. Also keep verb forms consistent; 'shows you value' is correct without comma. Clean up fillers.

× For example, at work I always say thank you and oh sorry because it helps teamwork.

✓ For example, at work I always say 'thank you' or 'sorry' because it helps teamwork.

Use 'or' instead of 'and oh' for clarity; enclose phrases in quotes is optional but shown here. The pronoun usage is fine, but the original had filler 'oh' which disrupts meaning. 'Helps teamwork' is acceptable, but could be 'helps team work together' for clarity.

× There were many situations we should be polite, especially in the formal situations like of interview or a meeting.

✓ There are many situations when we should be polite, especially in formal situations like an interview or a meeting.

Tense: use present 'are' because this is a general statement. Replace 'like of interview' with 'like an interview'. Use 'when' after 'situations' for correctness and remove redundant 'the'.

× Uh, for example, uh, we should say thank you after a meeting and excuse me, on a properly transposed to show respect.

✓ For example, we should say 'thank you' after a meeting and 'excuse me' at the proper time to show respect.

Incorrect phrase 'on a properly transposed' is nonsensical; likely meant 'at the proper time'. Use articles correctly: 'a meeting' is fine; use 'the proper time' or 'at the proper moment'. Also place phrases in appropriate order.

× The most impressive thing is my parents always, uh, taught us to greet to everyone to show respect, uh, because it it's a kind respect to say hello no matter you know, the people or don't recognize them.

✓ The most impressive thing is that my parents always taught us to greet everyone to show respect, because it is kind to say hello whether you know the people or not.

Remove extra 'to' after 'greet' ('greet everyone' is correct). Use 'that' to introduce the clause. Fix contraction 'it it's' to 'it is'. Use 'whether... or not' instead of 'no matter... or don't recognize them'. Ensure verb tense 'taught' remains past. Clarify 'kind to say hello' wording.