礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example of what your parents did using linking words. Avoid redundancy and correct verb forms (e.g., "instilled" not "instill").

範例: My parents instilled politeness in me from a young age. For example, they always reminded me to say "please" and "thank you" and demonstrated respectful behaviour when speaking to others, so I learned by watching and copying them.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and then support it with a specific reason and brief example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like "social attitudes."

範例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it helps people cooperate and reduces conflicts. For instance, saying sorry or listening attentively can calm tense situations and make daily interactions smoother.

建議: Keep the direct answer and add a couple of specific occasions with linking words to make it natural. Use correct phrases (e.g., "staff" not "staffs") and be concise.

範例: We should be polite in everyday situations, such as at work, in shops, or when using public transport. For example, when a cashier helps you, you can say "thank you," and when a colleague assists you, you can offer to return the favour.

建議: Correct grammar and be specific about the gesture and when you used it. Start with a topic sentence, then give a brief example and explain its cultural meaning. Avoid vague phrasing like "people at the same age."

範例: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting people and saying "thank you," often using a traditional Thai wai gesture to show respect. For instance, I would wai my teachers and neighbours when I met them, which signalled courtesy and appreciation.

× I would say my parents they instill politeness and mannerism since I was a child so they always be a good model for me to act better and be a good citizen in society.

✓ I would say my parents instilled politeness and manners since I was a child, so they were always a good model for me to behave better and be a good citizen in society.

Problems: redundant pronoun 'they' after 'my parents' (incorrect use of pronouns) and several other grammar issues covered below. Correction details: remove redundant 'they'; change 'instill' to past tense 'instilled' to match 'since I was a child' (past time frame) (Past tense issue ID 5); change 'mannerism' to plural 'manners' (word choice); change 'so they always be' to 'so they were always' for past habitual meaning (third person/past tense and subject-verb agreement). Suggestion: avoid repeating subjects, match verb tense to time expressions, and use 'manners' for polite behavior.

× I would say my parents they instill politeness and mannerism since I was a child so they always be a good model for me to act better and be a good citizen in society.

✓ I would say my parents instilled politeness and manners since I was a child, so they were always a good model for me to behave better and be a good citizen in society.

Reason: 'since I was a child' indicates a past starting point; present simple 'instill' and 'be' are inconsistent. Use past/past habitual forms 'instilled' and 'were'. Suggestion: align verb tenses with time markers like 'since I was a child' by using past or present perfect as appropriate.

× I would say my parents they instill politeness and mannerism since I was a child so they always be a good model for me to act better and be a good citizen in society.

✓ I would say my parents instilled politeness and manners since I was a child, so they were always a good model for me to behave better and be a good citizen in society.

Problem: 'mannerism' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'manners' to refer to polite behavior. Also 'act better' is awkward; 'behave better' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'manners' and 'behave'.

× Definitely. I think being polite is one of the social attitudes that everyone should apply in their lives in order to create a better or peaceful society.

✓ Definitely. I think being polite is one of the social attitudes that everyone should apply in their lives in order to create a better, more peaceful society.

Problem: wording and adjective combination; 'better or peaceful' is incorrect adjective coordination. Use 'better, more peaceful' to modify 'society' correctly. Suggestion: use parallel and comparative structures when combining adjectives.

× I think people can be polite in every occasion in their daily lives.

✓ I think people can be polite on every occasion in their daily lives.

Problem: incorrect preposition 'in every occasion'. The correct preposition is 'on every occasion'. This is classified as incorrect use of quantifiers/prepositions (11/14); here treated as quantifier/preposition issue. Suggestion: collocate 'on every occasion' or say 'on every occasion' or 'in all occasions'.

× For example, if they receive some treatments or services from certain staffs, they can simply say thank you to show appreciation for their hard work.

✓ For example, if they receive treatment or services from certain staff, they can simply say 'thank you' to show appreciation for their hard work.

Problems: 'some treatments' is odd contextually; 'treatment' (uncountable) or 'services' are fine. 'Staffs' is incorrect plural; 'staff' as a collective noun is correct. Also add quotes around the phrase thank you (kept as text here). Suggestion: use 'treatment' or 'services' and 'staff' as collective noun.

× I usually say hello and thank you by using a gesture called Y in Tai to show some respects not only to adults but also people at the same age.

✓ I usually say hello and thank you by using a gesture called the Y in Thai to show respect not only to adults but also to people of the same age.

Problems: 'a gesture called Y in Tai' has spelling and article issues — correct to 'the Y in Thai'. 'some respects' should be 'respect' (uncountable). Also add 'to' before 'people of the same age' for parallelism. Suggestion: use correct country/language spelling 'Thai', use 'the' for a specific named gesture, use 'respect' (uncountable), and 'people of the same age' for natural phrasing.