礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时要更直接地用了主题句，并纠正语法与用词错误（例如："when I was grow up" → "when I was growing up"，"a better persons" → "a better person"）。控制句子数量（不超过5句），并用一两句具体例子说明父母如何教导，比如通过榜样或规则。可加入连接词使表达更连贯。

範例: My parents taught me to be polite when I was growing up. For example, they always reminded me to say "please" and "thank you," and they set an example by greeting our neighbors politely. Because of this, I learned to treat everyone with respect.

建議: 句子过长且含混，用词不准确（如"force us to contain a better quality"、"no matter is our mentality"）。建议先给出简短明确的观点句，然后用两三句具体原因或例子支持，每点之间用连接词（because, so, for example）。简化措辞，避免绝对化词组如"every single way"。

範例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it improves relationships and shows respect. For example, being polite at work can help you get along with colleagues, and in daily life it makes social interactions smoother.

建議: 回答太笼统且衔接不够（比如中间缺少逗号连接句子）。建议先给出主题句，然后举2–3具体场合并简要说明原因，使用连接词（for example, also, especially）。避免重复同一观点。

範例: We should be polite in almost every situation. For example, at work you should show respect to colleagues and supervisors, and when meeting friends politeness helps avoid conflicts. Being polite is especially important in formal events like interviews or ceremonies.

建議: 表达中有语法及搭配错误（如"did well performance"、"in every occasions"）。建议先用一句话概括做法，再列举具体行为并用连接词衔接，尽量使用自然搭配（speak politely, follow rules）。保持句子简短清晰。

範例: As a child, I showed politeness by speaking politely and following rules. For example, I would speak slowly and respectfully to the elderly, say "thank you" to friends, and always follow classroom rules.

× My father and my mother taught me that when I was grow up.

✓ My father and mother taught me that when I grew up.

句中使用了不正确的动词形式“was grow up”。“grow up”是动词短语，过去时应为“grew up”；不需要在父母前都加定冠词，可简化为“my father and mother”。建议记住不规则动词过去式（grow → grew）。

× It makes us become a better persons.

✓ It makes us become better people.

“persons”用于正式或法律语境，且与单数/复数搭配不当；这里用“people”更自然。此外“a better persons”中“a”与复数不一致，应去掉不定冠词或改为单数形式。建议注意冠词与名词单复数一致性。

× Yes, I think being polite is very important because I think politeness can force us to contain a better quality no matter is our mentality and also our performance, it helps us become a better person in every single way.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because politeness can help us develop better qualities, both in mentality and in performance; it helps us become better people in every way.

原句结构冗长且有多个错误：1) “force us to contain a better quality”搭配错误，正确表达可用“help us develop better qualities”；2) “no matter is our mentality and also our performance”语序错误，应为“both in mentality and in performance”；3) 句子逗号拼接两个独立分句应使用分号或分句连词；4) 最后“a better person”与主语“us”不一致，改为“better people”。建议练习并列结构和常用搭配（help sb do/help sb develop）以及主谓一致。

× On what occasions should we be polite? Student: I think no matter what occasions we should be polite.

✓ I think we should be polite on all occasions.

原句“no matter what occasions we should be polite”语序和介词使用不当，正确表达应为“on all occasions”或“No matter the occasion, we should be polite.” 建议掌握固定搭配“on occasions/on occasion/on all occasions”。

× when we are in the workplace we have to be polite to our colleagues, our supervisors when we are in some occasions with our friends, we have to be polite since politeness is very important.

✓ When we are in the workplace, we have to be polite to our colleagues and supervisors. When we are with friends on other occasions, we should also be polite because politeness is very important.

原句为长句，缺少适当标点且“in some occasions with our friends”介词短语不自然，应拆为两句并调整为“with friends on other occasions”或“on some occasions with friends”。建议注意介词短语位置和句子拆分以避免歧义。

× What did you do to show your politeness as a child? Student: I usually did well performance in every aspect such as speaking slowly and politely to the elderly, to my friends, following the rules and also be polite in every occasions to show my politeness as a child.

✓ I usually performed well in every aspect, such as speaking slowly and politely to the elderly and to my friends, following the rules, and being polite on every occasion to show my politeness as a child.

原句中“did well performance”搭配错误，应为“performed well”；并列结构中动词形式应统一：既有动词-ing短语（speaking, following），最后一项应为“being polite”；“in every occasions”介词和数不正确，应为“on every occasion”或“on all occasions”。建议注意固定搭配（perform well）、并列时保持一致的动词形式以及介词与单复数一致。