礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 语法和措辞需要更自然、准确；回答要更直接并补充具体例子且保持不超过5句。注意连词使用和单复数/词序错误，例如“greet with others”应为“greet others”，“salute to elder people”应为“salute/ceremony for elders”或“show respect to elders”。第三句不清晰且有句子结构错误，应改为描述具体礼仪动作。建议先给主题句，再用一两句说明具体做法并举例。

範例: My parents taught me manners from a young age. For instance, they always told me to greet people when I entered a room and to show respect to elders by offering my seat or bowing slightly. We were also taught table manners, such as waiting until the elders start eating before I begin.

建議: 观点表达较清楚但用词和结构可更精炼自然；避免重复（very important/very essential），并用连接词增强逻辑。可以给出更具体后果或例子来支持观点。保持一到三句即可。

範例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it creates a positive impression and can open doors professionally. For example, being courteous in meetings helped a former colleague get a job referral from a senior manager.

建議: 回答结构清晰且有例子，但可更自然地使用连接词并略微压缩句子长度。可以加入更具体的礼貌行为描述（如用语、肢体语言）使细节更具体。

範例: We should be polite in formal settings like interviews and meetings, and also when meeting elders or strangers because it shows respect and smooths communication. For instance, I address my teachers respectfully, speak calmly, and always thank them after a conversation.

建議: 内容具体且有例子，但语法时态和措辞需要修正（如“say”应为“said”或“would say”）。可将句子更连贯地组织为主题句＋细节＋一例，避免重复“taught me to be respectful”。

範例: As a child I showed politeness by saying “thank you” and “sorry” regularly and greeting elders respectfully. I also helped carry things for older relatives; for example, I often helped my grandmother with her shopping bags, which made her very happy.

× They taught me to take initiatives to greet with others and salute to elder people.

✓ They taught me to take the initiative to greet others and salute elderly people.

句中“take initiatives”应为固定搭配“take the initiative”；“greet with others”不符合英语用法，正确是“greet others”；“elder people”用法不地道，常用“elderly people”或“elders”。整体改为自然的名词短语和搭配。建议记住常见搭配如“take the initiative”“greet someone”。

× During mails before elder people touched, the chopsticks, we shouldn't eat anything on the table.

✓ Before the elders touch the chopsticks during a meal, we shouldn't start eating anything on the table.

原句结构混乱，词序错误并且单词使用不当。“During mails”应为“during a meal”或更自然地以时间状语放在前面，“before elder people touched the chopsticks”要用现在时或一般现在式“touches/touch”并使主谓一致，还要把定语位置和逗号调整。改写为清晰的时间状语从句："Before the elders touch the chopsticks during a meal"。建议理清时间状语和主句，注意名词和动词的正确拼写与搭配。

× I think being polite is very essential because if we act rudely, we will leave bad impressions to strangers, especially those leaders who can help us.

✓ I think being polite is very important because if we act rudely, we will leave a bad impression on strangers, especially on leaders who can help us.

“essential”虽然可理解但语境中用“important”更自然；“leave bad impressions to”搭配错误，应为“leave a bad impression on”；“those leaders”冗余且“on leaders”更简洁。中文建议记住固定搭配“leave an impression on someone”。

× Instead, if we act politely, we may get chances from strangers.

✓ Instead, if we act politely, we may get opportunities from strangers.

“get chances from strangers”搭配不地道，应使用“get opportunities”或“get chances”但通常不接“from strangers”这样表来源显得奇怪。改为“get opportunities from strangers”在意思上更清晰。建议学习名词搭配：opportunity 常与 get 连用。

× Well, when I was a child I often say thank you and sorry to show politeness.

✓ Well, when I was a child I often said "thank you" and "sorry" to show politeness.

这个句子谈过去的习惯，主句使用过去时，动词“say”应改为过去式“said”以保持时态一致。建议注意叙述过去事件时整个句子使用过去时。

× My parents taught me how to be polite when I was very young.

✓ My parents taught me how to be polite when I was very young.

该句原本语法正确，无需修改。这里只列出以确认无错误。

× During mails before elder people touched, the chopsticks, we shouldn't eat anything on the table.

✓ Before the elders touch the chopsticks during a meal, we shouldn't start eating anything on the table.

在从句中主语“elders”是复数，动词“touch”应与其一致使用一般现在时“touch”表示习俗或规则；若用“touched”则是过去式或过去分词，与语境不符。建议对习俗性描述用一般现在时。

× For example, when I meet my teacher or my boss, I always try to speak calmly and say thank you.

✓ For example, when I meet my teacher or my boss, I always try to speak calmly and say "thank you."

该句基本正确，此处主要加引号标明礼节用语，无代词错误。列出以表示无需修改。

× So I would always greet elders and help them carry things.

✓ So I would always greet elders and help them carry things.

句子使用“would”表达过去习惯是可以的，也可改为“always greeted”表示过去常做，但原句语法上可接受，故保留原句。解释：在描述过去习惯时，使用“would + 动词”或过去式都可。