礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答内容直接且相关，但表达有语法和词汇不准确（如"phrase"用错、句子结构不够自然），句子较长且有重复。建议：1) 使用正确词汇（reward 而非 phrase）；2) 把信息分成两到三句以提高流畅度；3) 用连接词改进衔接（for example / because / so）。示例任务练习：把原句拆成主题句+细节句，并用更地道的短语表达。

範例: I learned good manners from my mother and my teacher when I was very young. For example, my teacher taught me school rules so I learned right from wrong, and my mother would reward me with a candy when I behaved politely.

建議: 内容观点明确，但语法和用词不够自然（如"contribute to get along"、"find out people"、冗长比较句）。建议：1) 使用更地道的短语（help us get on with others）；2) 简化比较句并避免重复；3) 提供一个具体例子或结果以增强说服力。

範例: Yes, politeness is very important because it helps people get on with each other and promotes self-discipline. For example, polite colleagues usually cooperate better at work, so projects run more smoothly.

建議: 回答有想法但表达混乱，词汇搭配不当（如"informal and vital"、"additional celebrating events"、"advance the hosts"），有语法错误。建议：1) 用更准确的分类（everyday situations and formal occasions）；2) 用常见搭配（weddings, graduations, celebrations）；3) 删除不必要或不清晰的句子，改为具体例子。

範例: I think we should be polite all the time, but it's especially important at formal events like weddings, graduations and big celebrations. For instance, at a wedding I dress appropriately and follow the host's customs so I don't offend anyone.

建議: 内容具体但表达重复且有词汇错误（"phrase"错误使用），句子连贯性差。建议：1) 用自然短句描述行为（say "sorry", "excuse me", "thank you"); 2) 用因果连接词更清晰（so / because）；3) 可加入一两个简单具体例子提高真实感。

範例: My mother taught me to say “sorry” and “excuse me” when I interrupted someone, and to say “thank you” when someone helped me. Because she rewarded me with a candy, I often used these polite expressions.

× I learned to behave well by my mother and my teacher at a very young age.

✓ I learned to behave well from my mother and my teacher at a very young age.

此处应使用介词 "from" 表示“从……那里学到”，而不是 "by"。"by" 常用于被动语态或表示动作的执行者，但在表示从某人处学习时应使用 "learn from"。建议记住固定搭配：learn from sb.（向某人学习）。

× For example, it was by obeying the regulations of school that I could know what was right and wrong and my mother used to phrase me by giving me a candy when I was being polite.

✓ For example, by obeying the school regulations I learned what was right and wrong, and my mother used to praise me by giving me a candy when I was polite.

句中多处介词和词语使用不当： 1) "obeying the regulations of school" 更自然的表达是 "obeying the school regulations"（定语位置调整）； 2) 用 "I learned" 替换 "I could know" 更符合英语习惯，表示通过行为学会了分辨； 3) 单词 "phrase" 用错，应为 "praise"（表扬）； 4) "by giving me a candy when I was being polite" 可以简化为 "by giving me a candy when I was polite"，因为这里描述常态或习惯，使用进行时不必要。建议注意常用搭配：school regulations, praise sb. by doing sth., learn what/that ...。

× Yes, not only does being polite contribute to get along well with others, but it also helps us increase discipline.

✓ Yes, not only does being polite contribute to getting along well with others, but it also helps us increase discipline.

短语 "contribute to" 后应接名词或动名词（-ing 形式），不能直接接动词原形。正确结构是 "contribute to doing sth."。建议记住常见搭配：contribute to + noun/gerund。

× For me, I find out people with good behavior more attractive.

✓ For me, I find people with good behavior more attractive.

这里的动词短语不应使用 "find out"（通常表示发现、查明），应使用 "find" 表示“觉得”。所以应去掉 "out"。建议区分 "find"（感觉）与 "find out"（发现、查明）。

× Furthermore, a person who always treats others politely is more likely to obey rules and regulations than the other, who is rude and aggressive.

✓ Furthermore, a person who always treats others politely is more likely to obey rules and regulations than one who is rude and aggressive.

此处比较时不应使用定冠词 "the other"，而应使用不定代词 "one" 表示“那样的人”。"the other" 常用于两者之间明确对比，这里泛指另一类人应用 "one"。建议在泛指某类人时用 "one" 或重构句子。

× I suppose that we should be polite all the time, particularly informal and vital occasions such as additional celebrating events, commencement ceremony and wedding ceremony.

✓ I suppose that we should be polite all the time, particularly on informal and important occasions such as additional celebration events, commencement ceremonies and wedding ceremonies.

几个问题： 1) 在表示“在某些场合”时要用介词 "on"："on occasions"； 2) 形容词 "vital" 用于这里不自然，通常用 "important"； 3) "celebrating events" 用法不当，改为 "celebration events" 或更自然的 "celebrations"； 4) 可数名词需一致复数形式："commencement ceremonies" 和 "wedding ceremonies"，或改为不加冠词的复数。建议注意介词搭配和名词单复数一致。

× Take me for an example to make sure that I won't advance the hosts and guests on those occasions.

✓ Take me as an example: I make sure that I won't embarrass the hosts or guests on those occasions.

原句结构混乱： 1) 固定表达应为 "take me as an example" 而不是 "for an example"； 2) 动词 "advance" 用错，应为表达“不冒犯/抢风头/打扰”的动词，常用 "embarrass" 或 "upstage"；根据语境选 "embarrass"（不失礼）或 "upstage"（抢风头）； 3) 使用冒号或分句来清楚表达。建议学习固定短语：take sb. as an example; 区分常见动词含义。

× I do dress up and learn the traditions well.

✓ I do dress up and learn the traditions well.

该句本身语法正确，但上下文中 "learn the traditions well" 可接受。这里只作为确认，无需改动。为完整性列出并说明：句子语法正确，保留原句。

× My mother taught me to say sorry or excuse me when interrupting others and say thank you to others when they helped me.

✓ My mother taught me to say "sorry" or "excuse me" when interrupting others and to say "thank you" to others when they helped me.

不定式的并列结构应保持一致：在两个不定式前都使用 "to" 或在第一个出现后省略，但为清晰起见最好重复 "to"。此外，过去时 "helped" 可保留，因为这是过去的教导与行为。建议在并列不定式中保持形式一致。

× She would give a candy to me as a phrase each time I was being polite as a result, I used to say sorry and thank you all the time in order to get candies.

✓ She would give me a candy as praise each time I was polite. As a result, I used to say "sorry" and "thank you" all the time in order to get candies.

句中多处错误： 1) "give a candy to me" 更自然为 "give me a candy"（间接宾语位置更常用）； 2) 单词 "phrase" 用错，应为 "praise"； 3) 原句逗号拼接两个独立分句，需分开为两句或用分号； 4) "when I was being polite" 可简化为 "each time I was polite"。建议注意词汇辨析（phrase vs praise）、语序（give sb sth）及标点使用。