礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example using linking words. Correct basic grammar (e.g., "When I was a child", "I learned to be polite") and avoid repetition.

範例: When I was a child, I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and my kindergarten teacher. For example, my parents always told me to say "hello" or "good morning" when I met people, and my teacher reminded us to say "please" and "thank you," which helped me form polite habits.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and follow with one or two clear reasons using linking words. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., "polite people" → "a polite person"). Avoid vague phrasing like "might be think."

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it creates a positive first impression. For instance, if you greet someone warmly and speak respectfully, they are more likely to trust you and view you as a friendly person.

建議: Answer directly and give specific occasions as supporting details using linking words. Improve grammar and clarity (e.g., "in every occasion" → "on most occasions" or name specific situations).

範例: We should be polite in most situations, especially at work, in school, and when meeting new people. For example, being polite at work helps maintain good relationships with colleagues, and polite behaviour when meeting someone new makes a positive first impression.

建議: Provide a clear past-tense topic sentence and one concise specific example with linking words. Correct tense and redundancy (e.g., "I would help the teacher borrow books"; avoid repeating words).

範例: As a child, I often showed politeness by helping my teacher carry heavy books from the staff room. For example, when a teacher needed many textbooks, I volunteered to carry a few because it saved time and showed respect.

× When I was child, I learned polite from my parents and my kindergarten teacher.

✓ When I was a child, I learned politeness from my parents and my kindergarten teacher.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' (sentence structure/article). 'Polite' is an adjective; the noun 'politeness' is needed here. Use 'learned politeness' to describe acquiring the trait. Suggestion: include articles where required and use correct noun forms for abstract qualities.

× They, for example, they told told me when you see people, you need to say hello or good morning.

✓ For example, they told me that when you see people you should say 'hello' or 'good morning'.

Redundant pronoun 'they' and duplicated verb 'told told' create errors. Also conversational guidance needs a reporting structure: 'they told me that ...' and modal 'should' is more natural for advice. Remove redundancy and duplicate words; use 'that' to introduce the reported clause and 'should' for polite advice.

× I definitely think that being polite is really important because it is about your first impressions.

✓ I definitely think that being polite is very important because it affects first impressions.

Phrase 'about your first impressions' is awkward; use verb 'affects' with 'first impressions'. 'Really important' is acceptable but 'very important' is slightly more formal. Suggest restructuring to use 'affect' for clarity.

× When you become a polite people, the first impression on other people might be think you are good person.

✓ When you become a polite person, other people's first impression might be that you are a good person.

'People' is plural while 'a' and 'person' are singular; use 'a polite person'. 'The first impression on other people might be think you are' is ungrammatical — use 'other people's first impression might be that you are a good person.' Include article 'a' before 'good person' and use 'that' to introduce the clause.

× I think in every occasion we need to be polite because it is about our personality and when we are the polite person in every occasion it is good for us.

✓ I think on every occasion we need to be polite because it reflects our personality, and being polite on every occasion is good for us.

Use preposition 'on' with 'occasion' not 'in'. 'It is about our personality' is vague; 'reflects our personality' is clearer. Avoid repeating phrases; simplify structure to 'being polite on every occasion'.

× I think the politeness I show in childhood is I will help the teacher borrow the book in the staff room because some of the book is very heavy and the teacher can't borrow all of the classmates.

✓ I think the politeness I showed in childhood was that I would help the teacher borrow books from the staff room because some of the books were very heavy and the teacher couldn't carry them all by herself.

Tense mismatch and article errors: 'the politeness I show in childhood' should be past 'showed' or 'show in childhood' consistent with question about past. Use 'books' plural and 'some of the books' plural. 'Borrow the book in the staff room' is incorrect: teacher borrows books from the staff room, and 'can't borrow all of the classmates' is wrong — teacher can't carry all the books for the classmates. Use past modal 'would' for habitual past action and make objects plural; clarify who 'them' refers to.

× So I will I like to help them.

✓ So I liked to help them.

Confused tense and duplicated words: 'I will I like' is ungrammatical. The context asks about childhood actions, so use past tense 'liked' or 'would' (I would like to help them / I liked helping them). Suggest keeping tense consistent with past context.