礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and plural/singular agreement, and avoid repetition.

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. For example, they always treated guests with respect and used polite phrases such as "please" and "thank you," so I watched and copied their behaviour.

建議: Be more natural and precise: state your opinion, then give a concise, specific reason with a clear linking phrase. Fix awkward phrasing like "at the first time" and "polite vocabulary that you use."

範例: Yes, I do. Being polite is important in communication because first impressions matter; people notice your tone and word choice when they meet you, which affects how they respond.

建議: Organise into a topic sentence and two specific examples. Use linking words to separate ideas and correct punctuation to avoid run-on sentences. Be specific about contexts.

範例: We should be polite in all situations, but especially when meeting someone for the first time and in professional settings. For instance, at job interviews and when speaking with older colleagues, politeness helps create respect and trust.

建議: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give one or two concrete examples of behaviours you copied. Correct word choice (e.g., "tread" -> "treated").

範例: As a child, I copied my parents' behaviour to show politeness. For example, I greeted guests politely and used phrases like "please" and "thank you" because I saw my parents doing the same.

× In my opinion, every children teach be polite from their parents, so I learned how to be polite from my parents when I was a child.

✓ In my opinion, every child is taught to be polite by their parents, so I learned how to be polite from my parents when I was a child.

'Every' requires a singular noun: 'every child' not 'every children'. Also passive construction and verb forms: 'is taught' (present passive habit) and 'to be polite' (infinitive). Use 'by their parents' for the agent. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× They taught me, by example, I often watch how they treated guests and how they spoke politely to others.

✓ They taught me by example; I often watched how they treated guests and how they spoke politely to others.

Run-on sentence needs a separator; use semicolon or period. The main clause refers to past habitual actions, so use past tense 'watched' not present 'watch'. 'Treated' and 'spoke' are correctly in simple past to match timeframe.

× Yes, I do. I think it's very important especially in communication. For example, when you talk with others at the first time they think and pay attention to your polite vocabulary that you use.

✓ Yes, I do. I think it's very important, especially in communication. For example, when you talk with others for the first time, they notice and pay attention to the polite words you use.

Use 'for the first time' not 'at the first time'. 'They think and pay attention to your polite vocabulary' is awkward: 'notice' fits better. 'Polite vocabulary that you use' can be simplified to 'the polite words you use'. Maintain present simple for general statements.

× In any situation it's very essential to be polite especially when you meet someone for the first time because everyone knows first impressions last, you should also be polite at work toward older people too.

✓ In any situation, it's essential to be polite, especially when you meet someone for the first time, because everyone knows that first impressions last. You should also be polite at work and toward older people.

Run-on sentence; needs separation into two sentences. Add 'that' in 'everyone knows that first impressions last'. 'Very essential' is redundant; 'essential' suffices. Use 'and toward' to list polite behavior targets correctly.

× As I remember when I was a child, I tried to act like my parents I spoke like them and also pay attention to how they tread front of other people and try to mimic them.

✓ As I remember, when I was a child I tried to act like my parents: I spoke like them and also paid attention to how they treated other people and tried to mimic them.

Multiple tense and word choice errors. Use past tense consistently: 'spoke', 'paid attention', 'treated', 'tried'. 'Tread' is wrong; correct verb is 'treated'. Add punctuation to avoid run-on and improve clarity.