礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify and correct vocabulary and grammar, be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct errors (‘trial’ -> ‘child’, ‘those habit’ -> ‘those habits’) and avoid redundancy. Add one specific brief example and use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: I learned to be polite from my parents when I was a child. For example, they always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and they spoke respectfully to family and neighbors, so I picked up those habits by watching them.

建議: Good response: clear topic sentence, reasons and example. To improve, use a wider range of vocabulary and a linking phrase to structure reasons more neatly (e.g., “Firstly,” “Moreover”). Also shorten slightly to stay within 4–5 sentences and avoid repetitive words like ‘polite’ too often.

範例: Yes, absolutely. Being polite is highly valued in my culture because it reflects good upbringing and respect for others. Moreover, it facilitates smoother interactions and, for instance, can prevent misunderstandings in everyday conversations.

建議: Provide clearer, grammatically correct reasons and more precise phrasing. Fix errors (‘to self respect’ unclear) and use linking words like ‘first’ and ‘second’ properly. Give specific occasions (e.g., at work, with elders) and keep answers concise.

範例: We should be polite in many situations. First, when meeting people or greeting elders—use polite language and say “please” or “thank you.” Second, when asking for help at work or school, being courteous makes others more willing to assist.

建議: Rewrite to correct serious grammar and meaning errors and be specific. Remove confusing phrases (‘read people bullying’, ‘made difficult people’). Use past tense consistently and give concrete examples of actions you took as a child, linking them with conjunctions for clarity.

範例: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting my teachers and neighbors and always saying “please” and “thank you.” I also tried to stay calm and patient with difficult people, and I would apologize if I accidentally upset someone.

× Well, when I was a trial, my parents taught me to be polite by reminding me to say please and thank you.

✓ Well, when I was a child, my parents taught me to be polite by reminding me to say please and thank you.

The word 'trial' is incorrect in context; the intended noun is 'child' to match the past time reference. This is a vocabulary/word choice error that affects meaning. Replace 'trial' with 'child' to convey the intended idea. Suggestion: Use 'child' for referring to your younger years and ensure noun choice matches context.

× So I learned those habit by watching them.

✓ So I learned those habits by watching them.

'Habit' should be plural 'habits' because 'those' indicates multiple items. This is a singular/plural agreement error. Change the noun to plural to match the demonstrative determiner. Suggestion: Match nouns to demonstratives: 'those' + plural noun.

× Being polite is one of the most important qualities in my culture because it shows good upbringing and respect for others.

✓ Being polite is one of the most important qualities in my culture because it shows a good upbringing and respect for others.

The phrase 'good upbringing' here needs the indefinite article 'a' to refer to a general quality possessed by a person. Omitting the article makes the noun phrase ungrammatical. Add 'a' before 'good upbringing'. Suggestion: Use 'a' with singular, countable, abstract noun phrases when speaking generally about an individual's quality.

× For example, polite behavior can prevent misunderstanding and make daily conversation more pleasant.

✓ For example, polite behavior can prevent misunderstandings and make daily conversation more pleasant.

'Misunderstanding' here should be plural 'misunderstandings' because the sentence refers to misunderstandings in general. This is a preposition/word-choice related pluralization issue. Use plural to indicate general occurrences. Suggestion: Use plural when referring to general, countable occurrences: 'prevent misunderstandings'.

× First, when meeting or speaking with others, we should use polite language and say please or thank you to self respect.

✓ First, when meeting or speaking with others, we should use polite language and say please or thank you to show self-respect.

The phrase 'to self respect' incorrectly uses pronouns/word order and lacks the verb 'show' and the hyphen in 'self-respect'. This is an incorrect use of a pronoun/phrase. Correct phrasing is 'to show self-respect.' Suggestion: Use 'show self-respect' or 'to respect oneself' for clarity and correct structure.

× Second, when we ask someone for help, being polite makes them more willing to assist so we get a better response.

✓ Second, when we ask someone for help, being polite makes them more willing to assist, so we get a better response.

The original sentence is understandable but needs a comma before 'so' to correctly join the clauses; this is a sentence structure/punctuation issue affecting readability. Add a comma to separate the result clause. Suggestion: Use a comma before coordinating conjunctions that connect independent clauses, e.g., ', so'.

× When I was a child, my parents always reminded me to read people bullying, like saying hello and thank you to my teacher and neighbors.

✓ When I was a child, my parents always reminded me to greet people politely, like saying hello and thank you to my teachers and neighbors.

The phrase 'to read people bullying' is incorrect and likely a wrong word choice. 'Greet people politely' fits the intended meaning. Also 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match general reference. This is a past-tense/contextual vocabulary and pluralization correction. Suggestion: Use 'greet people politely' and pluralize professions when speaking generally ('teachers').

× I will also talk to stay calm and be patient when I made difficult people and to apologize if I upset anyone.

✓ I would also try to stay calm and be patient when I met difficult people, and apologize if I upset anyone.

Tense and modal issues: the original mixes future 'I will' with past 'made' and awkward phrasing 'talk to stay calm.' For describing habitual past behavior, use past-tense modal 'would' or 'used to' and past 'met.' Change to 'I would also try to stay calm and be patient when I met difficult people, and apologize if I upset anyone.' This fixes tense consistency and verb choice. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent when describing past habits (use 'would' or 'used to' + base verb) and use 'met' for encountering people.