礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve fluency and clarity by reducing hesitations (ums/uhs), using a clear topic sentence, and adding one specific detail about what you did when greeting guests. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child. For example, whenever relatives or guests visited, my mother asked me to stand up, smile and say “Hello, nice to meet you.” This routine helped me become comfortable greeting people politely.

建議: Be more precise with vocabulary and sentence structure; avoid awkward phrases like “reach other people” and reduce hesitations. Provide one clear reason and a concise example using correct expressions.

範例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps build good relationships. For instance, when you greet someone politely and ask how they are, it creates a positive first impression and makes further conversation easier.

建議: Give a clearer answer with specific occasions and clearer linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “lead the good result” and cut filler words. Use 2–3 specific situations and explain briefly why.

範例: We should be polite on many occasions, such as at work, during family gatherings and when meeting strangers. Being polite in these situations helps you make a good impression and encourages respectful, productive interactions.

建議: Be more grammatical and specific: choose correct kinship terms and state the action clearly. Remove repetition and use linking words to show result. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: As a child I made an effort to address relatives correctly; for example, I always called my mother’s brother “uncle” and my aunt “auntie.” Doing this showed respect and usually made them smile.

× My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child.

✓ My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child.

This sentence is correct and uses the simple past tense appropriately to describe a past action, so no change is needed.

× For example, when some stranger or other relatives come to my house, my mother would always, uh, ask me to greet them and, uh, address them.

✓ For example, when strangers or other relatives came to my house, my mother would always ask me to greet them and address them.

Problems: plural/singular and tense consistency. 'some stranger or other relatives' is ungrammatical; use 'strangers or other relatives' (plural). The sentence describes past habitual situations, so use past tense 'came' to match 'would always'. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'and'. Suggestion: keep noun forms parallel and match past tense for consistent time reference.

× Yes, I think it's very important because politeness helps you to reach, uh, other people in a good manner.

✓ Yes, I think it's very important because politeness helps you reach other people in a pleasant way.

Problems: unnecessary 'to' after 'helps you' and awkward phrasing 'reach other people in a good manner'. Use bare infinitive after 'help' (helps you reach). Replace filler 'uh' and use natural collocation 'pleasant way'.

× It helps you to connect with others easier.

✓ It helps you connect with others more easily.

Problems: comparative adverb 'easier' used after verb phrase; use adverb 'more easily' to modify 'connect'. Also omit 'to' after 'helps you' (help + bare infinitive). Suggestion: 'helps you connect' + 'more easily'.

× For example, if you meet someone new, seeing how are you is a great way to know them.

✓ For example, if you meet someone new, asking 'How are you?' is a great way to get to know them.

Problems: word order and verb choice. 'seeing how are you' is ungrammatical — direct question needs quotation or rephrasing. Use 'asking "How are you?"' or 'asking how they are'. Also use 'get to know' for becoming acquainted with someone.

× I think you should be polite whenever the occasion is because politeness always helps you to, uh, make a good impression to others and it helps you to, uh, lead the good result.

✓ I think you should be polite on every occasion because politeness always helps you make a good impression on others and it helps you achieve good results.

Problems: awkward phrase 'whenever the occasion is' → 'on every occasion'. Remove filler 'uh'. 'helps you to, uh, make a good impression to others' — use 'help you make a good impression on others' (preposition 'on' not 'to'). 'lead the good result' is incorrect collocation; use 'achieve good results'. Maintain present simple for general truths.

× As a child, I would learn to address others properly.

✓ As a child, I learned to address others properly.

Problems: tense/modal mismatch. 'would' plus base verb can express habitual past, but here simple past 'learned' is more natural and consistent with other past statements. Using 'would learn' is possible but uncommon for this context; prefer 'learned'.

× For example, I would call my mother's brother, uncle or other or her sister aunts and it will make them happy.

✓ For example, I would call my mother's brother 'uncle' or my mother's sister 'aunt', and it would make them happy.

Problems: incorrect noun phrases and word order: 'my mother's brother, uncle or other or her sister aunts' is confused. Clarify by specifying titles in quotes or using parallel structure: 'call my mother's brother "uncle" or my mother's sister "aunt"'. Also tense consistency: past habit should use 'would' or past simple; use 'would' and 'would make' or rephrase as past simple. Use commas and conjunction correctly for clarity.