礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Pronunciation and word choice errors reduce clarity (e.g., 'grate people volatility'). Keep answer concise: give a clear topic sentence, then one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Limit to 2–3 sentences and correct key vocabulary: 'treat people politely' or 'treat others with respect.'

範例: I learned to be polite from my parents. For example, they always told me to treat others with respect and to say 'thank you' whenever someone helped me, which helped me develop good manners.

建議: Reduce repetition and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one reason. Avoid filler words and plural errors (e.g., 'every people', 'must must'). Use a linking word like 'because' once and give a concrete reason.

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build respect between people and makes everyday interactions smoother.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence naming a few occasions, then give one brief example with a linking word. Avoid tense confusion and repeated fragments. Use specific occasions (e.g., hospital, workplace, meeting new people).

範例: We should be polite on many occasions, such as at work, when meeting new people, and in places like hospitals. For instance, in a hospital I speak politely when asking staff for help so they can understand me and respond kindly.

建議: Provide a clear main sentence about one or two actions you took, then expand with a short specific example. Remove repetition and informal fillers like 'That's it.' Use correct verb forms (e.g., 'I said thank you', 'I listened carefully').

範例: I showed politeness by saying 'thank you' whenever someone helped me and by listening carefully when others spoke. For example, when a friend explained a game, I listened respectfully and thanked them afterward.

× My parents taught me to respect everyone and to grate people volatility.

✓ My parents taught me to respect everyone and to greet people politely.

The student used the wrong words: 'grate' should be 'greet' (verb meaning to say hello) and 'volatility' is a noun with unrelated meaning. 'Politely' is the correct adverb to describe how to greet. Suggestion: choose correct words and use the adverb form to modify the verb (greet politely).

× They encouraged me to say thank you whenever someone helps me or does something kind, which helped me develop good manners.

✓ They encouraged me to say thank you whenever someone helped me or did something kind, which helped me develop good manners.

The sentence mixes past and present forms. The main narration is in the past ('They encouraged'), so time-dependent verbs should be past: 'helps' -> 'helped', 'does' -> 'did'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for reported past events.

× Yes, I think being polite is very important these days because Because And everyone must must respect every people and try to show them how I am very, very kind people.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important these days because everyone must respect other people and try to show that they are kind.

Errors: repeated words ('Because And', 'must must'), incorrect pronoun and noun forms ('every people' should be 'other people'), and awkward phrasing 'show them how I am very, very kind people.' The sentence should use 'they' or 'people' consistently and correct verb agreement. Suggestion: remove duplicates, use 'other people', and rephrase to 'show that they are kind' for clarity.

× In several occasions such as when I ever go to the hospital, I had I have to be a polite person because when I ask someone to help me I need to tell them in a polite in a polite side and

✓ On several occasions, such as when I go to the hospital, I have to be polite because when I ask someone to help me I need to speak to them politely.

Preposition and article errors: 'In several occasions' should be 'On several occasions'; 'when I ever go' is unnecessary 'ever' and wrong; 'I had I have' is redundant; 'in a polite side' is incorrect. Also sentence is incomplete. Suggestion: use 'on occasions', remove extra words, and use 'speak to them politely' to express manner.

× To say to say to saying thank you for everyone gives me a help and try to be a kind child listening carefully to anyone speaking with me or asking someone. That's it.

✓ Saying thank you to everyone who helps me and trying to be a kind child by listening carefully when someone speaks to me are the things I did.

The original is repetitive ('To say to say to saying'), ungrammatical ('gives me a help'), and has unclear structure. It needs parallel structure: gerund phrases ('saying... and trying...') as subjects, correct prepositions ('to everyone', 'when someone speaks to me'), and proper verbs. Suggestion: use concise gerund phrases and ensure subject-verb agreement.