礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 주제에 바로 답하고 명확한 문장 구조를 사용하세요. 현재 답변은 문법적 오류(시제, 대명사, 어순)와 중복이 많습니다. 답변은 주제 문장(How I learned) → 구체적 방법(가족, 학교, 모방 등) → 간단한 예시로 구성하세요. 연결어(for example, because, when)를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어주고 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 유지하세요.

範例: I learned to be polite mostly from my family. For example, my parents always taught me to say "hello" and "please" when meeting people. I also copied older relatives and teachers, who corrected me gently when I was rude.

建議: 답을 더 명확하고 간결하게 만드세요. 이유를 구체적으로 제시하고 연결어(because, so, therefore)를 사용하여 논리를 전개하세요. 현재 문장은 의미 전달이 불명확하고 단어 반복이 있음. 한두 가지 이유(첫인상 형성, 인간관계 유지)를 제시하고 간단한 예시를 덧붙이세요.

範例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it creates a good first impression. For instance, greeting someone politely can make them feel respected and more willing to talk to you. This helps both in work and everyday life.

建議: 구체적인 경우들을 나열하고 각각에 대해 간단한 설명을 덧붙이세요. 현재 문장은 불완전하고 일반적이어서 설득력이 부족합니다. 공식적인 자리(회사, 면접), 어른이나 손님을 만날 때 등 상황을 분류하고 연결어(for example, especially)를 사용하세요.

範例: We should be polite in formal situations, such as at work or during an interview. Also, we should show politeness when meeting elders or guests, because it shows respect. In casual settings with close friends, we can be more relaxed but still courteous.

建議: 구체적인 행동과 그 이유를 명확히 설명하세요. 현재 답변은 문장이 끊기고 이해하기 어렵습니다. 어린 시절의 구체적 행동(인사하기, 도움 주기, 경청하기)을 2~3문장으로 정리하고, 왜 그렇게 했는지 또는 그로 인해 어떤 반응을 얻었는지를 덧붙이세요.

範例: As a child, I usually greeted people by saying "hello" and "how are you?" and I tried to help adults when I could. For example, I would carry small items for my grandparents. Those actions made adults praise me and taught me why politeness matters.

× As a child I learned about say hello When I met someone I helped you I must do politely to say hello.

✓ As a child I learned to say hello. When I met someone, I learned I must say hello politely.

The original sentence misuses base verb forms and has awkward structure. 'Learn about say hello' is incorrect; use 'learn to say hello' (verb + infinitive). Also separate ideas into two sentences and use 'say hello politely' for correct adverb placement. Suggestion: use 'learn to + verb' for new skills and place adverbs (politely) after the verb phrase. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Yes I think it's very important because when we met the first time exist person person they think we are face to face.

✓ Yes, I think it's very important because when we meet someone for the first time, they think we are face to face.

The sentence mixes past tense 'met' with general statement; use simple present 'meet' for habitual/general situations. Remove duplicated words and reorder phrase to 'meet someone for the first time'. Suggestion: use present tense for general truths and check word order. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× If we met boss or the person or the people, We have to do politely like

✓ If we meet a boss or other people, we have to behave politely.

Use 'meet' (present) for general advice and correct preposition/article usage: 'a boss' not 'boss', and 'behave politely' is the correct collocation rather than 'do politely'. Suggestion: use 'behave politely' or 'act politely' and include articles for singular countable nouns. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I just show for someone to say hello and how are you? Just smarto And then that cost thing for me think me like oh that's

✓ I would just greet someone by saying 'Hello' and 'How are you?' I thought it was smart, and then that made me think, 'Oh, that's...'.

The original mixes present and incorrect constructions. For talking about past habits as a child, use 'would' or 'used to' or simple past. 'Show for someone to say' is incorrect; use 'greet someone by saying'. 'That cost thing for me think me' is unintelligible; interpret as 'that made me think'. Suggestion: use clear verbs for habits (would/used to) and link clauses with 'and' or 'made me' for cause. Grammar problem type ID: 5