礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar, use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and fix countable noun forms (parents, younger people).

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. In addition, my primary school teachers reinforced good manners by teaching us to greet adults respectfully and share with younger classmates, so both home and school shaped my behaviour.

建議: Start with a clear opinion, give one strong reason and a brief example. Remove filler words (uh, so) and correct awkward phrasing. Use a linking phrase to present the reason.

範例: Absolutely — being polite is very important because it reflects respect and helps build good relationships. For example, saying ‘please’ and ‘thank you’ at work or school creates a positive atmosphere and makes cooperation easier.

× When I was a child I learned it from my parent to be polite with everyone, and in my school my teachers taught me how to behave with elders and youngers.

✓ When I was a child I learned it from my parents to be polite to everyone, and at my school my teachers taught me how to behave with elders and younger people.

The sentence uses 'parent' (singular) when the context implies both parents, so plural 'parents' is needed (singular and plural issue). 'Be polite with' is less natural than 'be polite to' in this context (preposition choice; but only change where it matches list: primary error is plural). 'In my school' should be 'at my school' (preposition usage). 'Youngers' is not a correct noun; use 'younger people' or 'younger children' (plural formation). Suggestion: use 'parents', 'polite to', 'at my school', and replace 'youngers' with 'younger people' to make the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× I love everyone, so I think my parents and teachers taught me to be polite with everyone.

✓ I love everyone, so I think my parents and teachers taught me to be polite to everyone.

The pronoun usage is acceptable but the preposition 'with' is not the best collocation after 'polite' when indicating the object; 'polite to' is the correct collocation. This falls under incorrect use of pronouns/preposition combination listed as 'Incorrect use of pronouns' in provided list. Suggestion: use 'polite to' when specifying whom someone is polite toward.

× Absolutely. I think being polite is crucial because it shows our ma basic manners, what we learn from our teachers and our parents as our first parent teachers are our parents.

✓ Absolutely. I think being polite is crucial because it shows our basic manners, which we learn from our teachers and our parents, who are our first teachers.

This sentence has several structure problems: 'ma basic manners' appears to be a typo for 'my basic manners'; run-on and confusing clause order ('what we learn...' needs a relative pronoun and clearer punctuation). Also 'our first parent teachers are our parents' is redundant and ungrammatical; rephrase to 'who are our first teachers.' These are sentence structure errors. Suggestions: correct typos, use 'which' to introduce the relative clause, add commas to separate clauses, and rephrase redundant parts for clarity.

× So it it question on their nurture.

✓ So it is a question of their upbringing.

This fragment repeats 'it it' (typo/repetition) and uses awkward phrasing 'question on their nurture.' This is a sentence structure error. Use 'it is a question of' and the more natural noun 'upbringing' instead of 'nurture.' Suggestion: remove duplicated words and use natural collocations like 'a question of their upbringing.'

× So I think, uh, it is very crucial.

✓ So I think it is very important.

While grammatically acceptable, 'crucial' is slightly formal and 'very crucial' is redundant; 'important' is more natural in spoken English. This is a present tense comment but mainly a word choice/present tense style issue. Suggestion: prefer 'very important' or simply 'important' for smoother spoken response.