礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more structured and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details and a linking word. Avoid redundancy and limit to 3–4 short sentences. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., “we were always encouraged to say ‘thank you’ and ‘you’re welcome’” and use past tense consistently).

範例: When I was in primary school I learned good manners from my teacher. She taught us polite phrases and reminded us to say “thank you” and “you’re welcome” when speaking to elders. Because of her guidance, politeness became a habit for me.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and then support it with a clear reason and a specific example. Use linking words (for example, therefore) and avoid repeating words. Correct phrasing (e.g., “Politeness shows respect and affects how others judge you”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it shows respect and influences how others perceive you. For example, greeting colleagues politely at work can create a friendly atmosphere and help build better relationships.

× I learned to be polite as a child when I was still in primary school my teacher used to teach me the right and courteous words to say whenever talking to your elders, we always emphasize to use thank you, welcome. That's it.

✓ I learned to be polite as a child when I was in primary school. My teacher used to teach me the right and courteous words to say when talking to elders; we were always taught to say 'thank you' and 'you're welcome.'

This sentence has multiple issues (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). It is a run-on sentence that lacks necessary punctuation and contains inconsistent verb forms and pronouns. Suggestions: break into separate sentences for clarity; use past habitual 'used to teach' consistently with past passive/active forms; replace 'whenever talking to your elders' with 'when talking to elders' to match subject; change 'we always emphasize to use' (incorrect structure) to 'we were always taught to say' or 'we were always encouraged to say'; add correct phrases 'thank you' and 'you're welcome' and use punctuation around them. These changes correct sentence structure and ensure grammatical agreement and clarity.

× Polite being polite is a good way of way of showing respect to other people.

✓ Being polite is a good way of showing respect to other people.

This sentence repeats words and uses an incorrect word order (Grammar Problem Type ID 12). Remove the duplicated phrase 'Polite being polite' and start with the gerund phrase 'Being polite.' Also remove the extra 'of' in 'way of way of.' The corrected sentence uses the gerund 'being' followed by the adjective 'polite' and the noun phrase 'a good way of showing respect to other people,' which is grammatically correct.

× I think being polite is very important because that's how people assess you.

✓ I think being polite is very important because that is how people judge you.

The original sentence is mostly acceptable but uses the contraction 'that's' and the verb 'assess' which is slightly awkward in spoken context (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Replace 'that's' with 'that is' for formality and use 'judge' or 'evaluate' as a more natural collocation with personal behavior. No tense changes are needed; this preserves present-tense general statement. Suggestions: choose verbs that fit the context and avoid unnecessary contractions in formal responses.