礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid repetition and unrelated statements (e.g., “I long to be pilot for my grandmother” is unclear). Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood, and include a brief example illustrating what you copied from your grandmother.

範例: I learned to be polite from my grandmother. She always said “sorry” when she made small mistakes and thanked anyone who helped her, so I imitated her behaviour as a child. For example, when a classmate helped me with homework, I would say “thank you” and apologize if I accidentally interrupted them. Because I followed her example, being polite became a natural habit for me.

建議: Make the answer more concise and natural: state your opinion clearly, then give two specific reasons with linking words and a concrete example. Correct common grammar issues (article use, comparative forms) and avoid vague phrases like “more easier.”

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important in daily life. Firstly, politeness helps you build friendships because people appreciate respect and courtesy. Secondly, it improves teamwork at work; for instance, I always speak politely to my supervisor, which makes communication smoother and makes our projects run more efficiently.

× I long to be pilot for my grandmother.

✓ I longed to be a pilot because of my grandmother.

Problems: subject-verb tense and meaning (should use past tense 'longed' to match 'When I was a child'); missing article 'a' before 'pilot'; preposition/phrase clarity ('for my grandmother' is unclear, 'because of my grandmother' likely intended). Suggestion: use past tense for past desire, include the article, and express cause clearly.

× When I was a child my grandmother always say sorry when she made a small mistake so I copied from her and also always say thank you for people who who who help me.

✓ When I was a child, my grandmother always said sorry when she made a small mistake, so I copied her and always said thank you to people who helped me.

Problems: third-person singular/past tense verbs: 'say' should be 'said' to match past reference; 'made' is correct; 'copied from her' is awkward—use 'copied her' or 'learned from her'; 'say thank you for people' should be 'said thank you to people'; repeated 'who' is redundant; 'help' should be past 'helped'. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense and correct preposition 'to' for thanking someone.

× I think the politeness is very important in daily life if you want to make more friends or have a good collaboration.

✓ I think politeness is very important in daily life if you want to make more friends or have good collaboration.

Problems: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'politeness' in general statements; 'a good collaboration' is unnatural—'good collaboration' or 'a good working relationship' is better. Suggestion: remove 'the' and choose a natural noun phrase for collaboration depending on meaning.

× For example, I try to be polite with my supervisor.

✓ For example, I try to be polite to my supervisor.

Problem: preposition choice—'polite to' is the usual collocation in English rather than 'polite with'. Suggestion: use 'polite to' when referring to being polite toward a person.

× It makes our work more easier.

✓ It makes our work easier.

Problems: incorrect comparative structure—'more easier' is redundant because 'easier' already expresses comparative; use either 'more easy' (less common) or 'easier'. Suggestion: remove 'more' and use 'easier'.