礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更直接、简洁，并注意语法和词汇的准确性。先用一句主题句回答问题（例如“我从父母和学校学会礼貌”），然后用一到两句具体细节支撑。注意动词形式（listen→listening/listen to elders' advice），避免冗长和重复，用连接词如“because”或“so”使句子更连贯。

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. For example, my parents always taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teacher praised students who showed respect in class, which encouraged me to copy their behavior.

建議: 回答同样需要更自然流畅，避免口头语（例如“you know”），并用具体例子或结果说明重要性。先给出明确立场，然后用一到两句具体原因或例子支持，使用恰当词汇（rapport可以，但用 simpler words like trust or good relationships 更自然）。

範例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps build trust and smooth communication. For instance, when I am polite at work or school, people are more willing to help me, which makes everyday tasks easier.

× When I was a child, I learned a variety of etiquette and development manners to be polite.

✓ When I was a child, I learned a variety of etiquette and proper manners to be polite.

句中使用了不自然的搭配 “development manners”。应使用固定搭配 “proper manners” 或 “social manners”。这是词语搭配问题，需用正确的名词或形容词短语来表达“礼貌的行为”。建议背诵并使用常见搭配，如 “etiquette”, “manners”, “proper manners”。

× For instance, listening to the elders words is extremely beneficial for me because doing this kind of thing cannot only make me get experiences, but also can make me realize that what kind of things that I shall do.

✓ For instance, listening to the elders' words was extremely beneficial to me because doing this not only helped me gain experience but also made me realize what kinds of things I should do.

错误点多： 1) “the elders words” 缺少所有格，应该是 “elders' words”。 2) “beneficial for me” 更自然为 “beneficial to me” 或 “beneficial for me” 根据上下文两者可用，但常用 to + person。这里保留为 “beneficial to me”。 3) “cannot only ... , but also ...” 语序错误，应为 “not only ... but also ...”。 4) “make me get experiences” 表达不地道，应为 “helped me gain experience”。 5) “realize that what kind of things that I shall do” 结构混乱，简化为 “realize what kinds of things I should do”。 这些都是介词、连词及从句结构和词序问题。建议：注意所有格（elders'），使用固定搭配（gain experience），使用正确的并列连接结构 “not only ... but also ...”，以及简化从句结构。

× Yes, absolutely, because I think that being more civilized is not only beneficial for you to communicate with others and share the relevant interpersonal skills, but also can make you get more, you know, rapport, which can also facilitate you to deal with the future life.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because I think that being more civilized is not only beneficial for communicating with others and sharing interpersonal skills, but also can help you gain more rapport, which can also help you deal with future life.

问题包括时态和用法： 1) “beneficial for you to communicate” 更自然的表达是动名词结构 “beneficial for communicating” 或 “beneficial to communicating with others” — 这里改为 “beneficial for communicating with others”。 2) “share the relevant interpersonal skills” 改为动名词短语 “sharing interpersonal skills”。 3) “can make you get more... rapport” 不地道，改为 “can help you gain more rapport”。 4) “deal with the future life” 表达不自然，改为 “deal with future life” 或更自然的 “deal with future challenges” 但保持原意为 “deal with future life”。 总的建议：在此类句子中用动名词（-ing）表示目的或一般事实，避免直接用不自然的 “make you get”。