礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatical, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Correct grammar (e.g., "putting yourself in others' shoes") and avoid incomplete phrases like "kind of."

範例: My mother taught me to be polite when I was a child. For example, she often told me to put myself in others' shoes, so I would think about how my words and actions affect them. As a result, I learned to speak politely and offer help when someone seemed upset.

建議: Begin with a direct topic sentence, then support it with a specific reason or example using linking words. Fix mixed pronouns ("we need others to help us") and avoid vague statements. Keep the response within 3–4 clear sentences.

範例: Yes, I believe being polite is a foundation of society because it helps people cooperate smoothly. For instance, polite requests and respectful listening make daily interactions more pleasant, so community members are more willing to help each other. Therefore, good manners improve both personal relationships and public life.

× She told me that putting yourself in others shoes will make you have a different perspective on things.

✓ She told me that putting yourself in others' shoes would give you a different perspective on things.

The sentence uses 'will make you have' which is awkward; after a reporting verb in past tense ('told') the following clause should shift to the conditional/past perspective, so 'would' is appropriate. Also 'make you have' is unnatural; 'give you' or 'provide you with' is clearer. Finally, possessive for plural others requires an apostrophe: others' shoes. Suggestion: use 'would give you' and correct the possessive to 'others\' shoes'.

× After that I tried to be kind of.

✓ After that, I tried to be kind.

The phrase 'kind of' is an informal filler that leaves the sentence incomplete. The intended meaning is likely simply 'tried to be kind.' Also add a comma after 'After that' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: remove 'of' and use 'kind' to complete the thought.

× I think being polite is the very foundation of society.

✓ I think being polite is the foundation of society.

'The very foundation' is not strictly a grammar error but is wordy; however sentence is acceptable. To adhere strictly to corrections within the provided list, no change required. If keeping, you may simplify to 'the foundation' for conciseness. No third person singular verb error present; original verb forms are correct.

× We can't live by ourselves, so we need others to help you and we need to help others.

✓ We can't live by ourselves, so we need others to help us, and we need to help others.

The sentence mixes pronouns 'we' and 'you' incorrectly. Maintain consistent person: 'we' should pair with 'us.' Change 'help you' to 'help us.' Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent throughout the sentence.

× Politeness is based on communication.

✓ Politeness is based on good communication.

Original sentence is grammatical, but adding 'good' clarifies meaning. No preposition error; however if aiming to improve clarity, 'based on communication' is acceptable. No mandatory change required.