礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar slips (e.g., "part of my family values", "really important"). Aim for no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They regularly reminded me to say "please" and "thank you," and they modelled polite behaviour themselves, which made politeness a core family value. As a result, good manners became second nature to me.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words to connect reasons. Provide one specific example or brief explanation of how politeness helps. Fix grammar: use singular/plural correctly ("good relationships"), and finish sentences clearly.

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build good relationships and shows respect. For example, using polite phrases at work or when meeting elders can create trust and smoother communication. In Chinese culture, politeness is especially valued, so it often guides social interactions.

× It is mainly from my parents and they also reminded me to say thank you, to say please to others and also they set a good example for me themselves.

✓ It was mainly from my parents; they reminded me to say 'thank you' and 'please' to others, and they set a good example for me.

The sentence mixes pronoun references and tense. 'It is mainly from my parents' should match past context ('It was mainly from my parents'). Redundant pronouns and reflexive wording ('for me themselves') are incorrect; use 'they set a good example for me.' Also use semicolon or shorter sentences to improve clarity. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense, remove redundant pronouns, and separate ideas with appropriate punctuation.

× And the politeness is a big part for of my family values and it it has become my second nature.

✓ Politeness is a big part of my family values, and it has become my second nature.

The phrase 'a big part for of' contains an incorrect preposition and extra word ('for'). 'The politeness' is unnatural; use 'Politeness.' Also there is a duplicated word 'it it.' Use consistent noun phrase and remove duplication. Suggestion: use 'part of' and avoid redundant articles and repeated words.

× So this is real important in my childhood.

✓ So this was really important in my childhood.

The time frame 'in my childhood' requires past tense ('was' not 'is') and 'real' should be the adverb 'really.' Use past tense to match the time reference and correct adverb form.

× Yes, absolutely. It's really important it is it is beneficial to set set good relation with others and show respect to others.

✓ Yes, absolutely. It's really important; it is beneficial to build good relationships with others and to show respect.

The original contains repetition ('it is it is', 'set set'), incorrect verb 'set' for 'build,' and 'relation' should be plural 'relationships.' Use semicolon or conjunction to link clauses. Suggestion: remove repeated words, use correct verbs and plural nouns where appropriate.

× And also it can help you to build a more solid relation with others.

✓ It can also help you build more solid relationships with others.

Use 'also' position before the verb for natural flow and 'relation' should be plural 'relationships.' 'To build' can be simplified to 'build.' The article 'a' is unnecessary with plural 'relationships.' Suggestion: prefer plural and natural adverb placement.

× And in Chinese culture, politeness is highly valued. So we take it into.

✓ In Chinese culture, politeness is highly valued, so we take it into account.

The phrase 'take it into' is incomplete; the correct expression is 'take it into account.' Also starting with 'And' is informal; combine sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use full idiomatic phrase 'take it into account' and merge sentences or use a conjunction.