礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence cohesion. Start with a clear topic sentence, combine short fragments, and use linking words to show cause and effect. Be specific about examples and results. For instance, correct tense and articles, link ideas with words like “so” or “as a result,” and replace vague phrases (e.g. “habit stick”) with clear expressions (e.g. “become a habit”).

範例: My parents taught me good manners from an early age. For example, if I forgot to say “please” or “thank you,” they would gently remind me, and when I behaved respectfully they praised me, so polite behaviour soon became a habit.

建議: Make your response more concise and accurate. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or an example using linking words (e.g. “because,” “therefore,” “for instance”). Avoid filler sounds and repetitive words. Use correct collocations like “polite to others,” “build good relationships,” and ensure subject–verb agreement.

範例: Absolutely — being polite to others is very important because it shows respect and kindness. For instance, polite behaviour helps build good relationships at work or school, which can lead to better cooperation and trust.

× When I was child.

✓ When I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before singular noun 'child'. Use 'a child' to indicate one stage of life. Suggestion: include the appropriate indefinite article with singular countable nouns (When I was a child).

× They would encourage me polite behaviour by praising me when I was respectful to others, which helped me to habit stick.

✓ They would encourage polite behaviour by praising me when I was respectful to others, which helped the habit stick.

Multiple issues: incorrect word order and article use. 'Encourage me polite behaviour' should be 'encourage polite behaviour' or 'encourage me to behave politely'; 'habit stick' is unnatural—use 'the habit stick' or better 'the habit to stick' though 'the habit stuck' or 'the habit to stick' varies. Here 'which helped the habit stick' is correct colloquial phrasing. Suggestion: rephrase to 'They would encourage me to behave politely by praising me when I was respectful to others, which helped the habit stick.'

× Absolutely, being polite towards the others is very important.

✓ Absolutely, being polite towards others is very important.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before 'others' in this general plural sense. Use 'others' without article when referring to people in general. Suggestion: omit 'the' in similar contexts (towards others).

× They show respect and gentle behavior and kindness to the others.

✓ They show respect, gentle behaviour, and kindness to others.

Same issue: 'the others' is incorrect for general reference; also parallel list needs commas and British spelling 'behaviour' or American 'behavior' consistent. Suggestion: remove 'the' and use commas to separate items in a list; maintain consistent spelling.

× If uh, with polite behavior, we can set a good relation relationship with others.

✓ With polite behaviour, we can build good relationships with others.

Awkward structure and redundant words: 'If uh, with polite behavior' is disfluent; 'relation relationship' repeats the same idea; 'set a good relationship' is unnatural. Use 'build good relationships' or 'establish good relationships'. Suggestion: remove fillers, avoid redundancy, and choose natural collocations (build/establish relationships).

× When I was child. If I forgot to say please or thank you, they would gently remind me.

✓ When I was a child, if I forgot to say 'please' or 'thank you', they would gently remind me.

Two issues: missing article as noted earlier and sentence punctuation: 'When I was a child.' is a fragment. Combine clauses into one sentence and add punctuation. Also enclose please/thank you as words. Suggestion: join dependent clause to main clause and ensure proper punctuation and articles.