礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 总体回答清晰且相关，但可以更自然、更精简并加入连接词与更具体细节。注意避免句子过长或重复（如两次提到“and”开头）。可以用一句主题句开头，再用1-2句具体例子支持，并用连接词（for example, as a result）使逻辑更流畅。

範例: I learned politeness mainly from my parents and my school. For example, my parents always modelled manners by saying “please” and “thank you,” and they gently corrected me when I forgot. At school, teachers reinforced this through role-play activities, which helped me practise polite responses in real situations.

建議: 回答观点明确但表达有语法和用词错误，且句子略显冗长。建议先用一句简短的主题句表明观点，再用一两条具体理由，每条理由之间用连接词（for individuals / for society / therefore）分开，同时修正短语错误（e.g. “leave a good impression”）。

範例: Yes, I think politeness is very important in everyday life. For individuals, simple actions like listening carefully and saying “thank you” help to leave a good impression on others. Moreover, at the societal level, widespread politeness can reduce conflicts and create a more cooperative environment.

× I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and at school.

✓ I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and from school.

句中“from my parents and at school”搭配不平行。前半用介词from，引出来源，后半应与之平行也用from（或把前者改为“by”并调整结构）。建议保持介词一致，改为“from my parents and from school”或“by my parents and at school”。这样句子结构平衡，更符合英语习惯。

× My parents always set an example by saying please and thank you and corrected me when I was rude.

✓ My parents always set an example by saying “please” and “thank you” and corrected me when I was rude.

此句主要是标点和习惯用法问题，引用礼貌用语通常放在引号中以示区分；另外语序和时态无误。虽不属于严格的介词错误，但为了清晰建议加引号。若坚持介词问题，句子本身可接受。

× And at school, teachers encouraged polite behavior through class roles and role play activities.

✓ At school, teachers encouraged polite behavior through class roles and role-play activities.

“role play”作为复合名词常写作“role-play”或“roleplay”。句首不建议使用连词“And”开始正式回答，可直接用“At school,”使表达更正式流畅。此处还涉及复合词连字符用法，属于词形使用建议。

× Yes, I believe being polite is very important in a in everyday life.

✓ Yes, I believe being polite is very important in everyday life.

句中多了一个不必要的介词“a”：短语应为“in everyday life”或“in daily life”。多余的“a”属于词形/冠词误用，应删去以保持短语正确。

× For individuals, polite behavior such as listening carefully and saying thank you helps to live a good impression on others and for society, widespread politeness can reduce conflicts and make the world a better place.

✓ For individuals, polite behavior such as listening carefully and saying “thank you” helps to create a good impression on others. For society, widespread politeness can reduce conflicts and make the world a better place.

原句存在多处问题： 1) “helps to live a good impression” 完全不符合英语习惯，正确表达应为“helps to create a good impression”或“helps one make a good impression”； 2) 原句缺乏连贯性，用逗号连接两部分导致句子过长且结构混乱，应拆成两个句子； 3) 同样建议把“thank you”用引号标出以示为短语。 改正后语义清晰，语法正确。