礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, use correct verb tenses (past simple/reflection), and avoid unnecessary filler. Add one specific supporting detail and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep answers to no more than five sentences.

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my mother. When I was about ten, she taught me manners and explained why they matter, so I tried to follow her advice. Although I sometimes argued with her, as I grew older I realised she was right, and those lessons shaped my behaviour as an adult.

建議: Make your opinion clear with a concise topic sentence, then provide two specific, well-linked reasons. Use accurate grammar (avoid unnatural phrases like “everyone is reflecting the family he came from”) and choose appropriate vocabulary. Replace vague claims with concrete examples or outcomes and use linking words such as “firstly” and “secondly” correctly with full sentences.

範例: Yes, I think politeness is very important. Firstly, polite behaviour creates a positive impression of your background and makes people more willing to trust you. Secondly, being polite often helps in daily life because people are more likely to help or cooperate with someone who treats them respectfully.

× If you I've learned to be polite as a child.

✓ I learned to be polite as a child.

This sentence has extra and misplaced words and an incorrect conditional 'If you' fragment causing a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove 'If you' and the contraction 'I've' (I have) which is inappropriate here; use simple past 'I learned' to match the time reference 'as a child'. Suggestion: use clear subject + past-tense verb for past life events.

× Since I was 10 years old, my mom was telling me everything about the right thing to do.

✓ Since I was 10 years old, my mom has been telling me everything about the right things to do.

The sentence mixes past simple 'was' with a 'since' time marker; use present perfect continuous ('has been telling') to indicate an action that started in the past and continued to the present (ID 6). Also change 'the right thing' to plural 'right things' for natural collocation. Suggestion: use 'has/have + been + -ing' with 'since' when the action continues to now.

× Sometimes I was arguing with her, but when I grow up, I knew that everything what she was saying to me is right.

✓ Sometimes I argued with her, but when I grew up, I knew that everything she was saying to me was right.

Multiple tense errors: 'was arguing' should be simple past 'argued' for habitual past actions (ID 5). 'When I grow up' is present; change to past 'when I grew up'. 'Everything what she was saying to me is right' mixes tenses and uses incorrect relative word 'what'; use 'everything she was saying to me was right' to keep past tense consistent and remove 'what'. Suggestion: keep all clauses describing past events in past tense and use 'that' or omit relative word with 'everything'.

× Since then, I grew up as an very polite adult.

✓ Since then, I have become a very polite adult.

Using 'Since then' requires present perfect to show change up to now: 'have become' (ID 5). 'Grew up' is past simple and doesn't fit. Also 'an very' is incorrect article before consonant sound: use 'a very'. Suggestion: use 'have become' with 'since then' and 'a' before 'very'.

× Actually yes, because everyone is reflecting the family he came from.

✓ Actually yes, because everyone reflects the family they come from.

Awkward passive 'is reflecting' and gender-specific pronoun 'he' for a general subject; use active simple present 'reflects' and gender-neutral 'they' or rephrase 'people' (ID 12). Also 'came' should be present tense 'come' for general truth. Suggestion: use simple present for general statements and gender-neutral pronouns.

× When you show you are polite, everyone knows that you have a very good mom and dad.

✓ When you show you are polite, people know that you have very good parents.

'Everyone knows' is acceptable but 'people' is more natural; 'mom and dad' is informal but fine—however 'parents' fits better. 'A very good mom and dad' uses article incorrectly with plural idea; use 'very good parents' (ID 13 and 22). Suggestion: use 'parents' for general statements and remove extra article.

× This is firstly, Secondly, that helps you to get whatever you want.

✓ First, being polite helps you get what you want.

The original mixes list markers incorrectly and creates an incomplete sentence fragment: 'This is firstly, Secondly, that helps...' This is a conjunction/structure error (ID 16). Simplify to a clear main clause; remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps' (help + verb base) and replace 'whatever' with 'what' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: present reasons in clear sentences like 'First,... Second,...' with full clauses.