礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural, correct word forms, and add brief specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using correct phrases and linking words. Avoid redundant fillers and grammar mistakes (e.g., say “say thank you” instead of “say thank”). Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

範例: My mother taught me good manners when I was little. For example, she always told me to greet people by saying “hello” and to say “thank you” when someone gave me something. Because of her, I still try to be polite in public and at school.

建議: Answer directly, use accurate vocabulary, reduce hesitation, and organize reasons with linking words. Replace incorrect words (‘plight’, ‘you'll got’) with correct ones (‘politeness’, ‘you'll get’). Provide one clear reason and a short example or result. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words.

範例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps you build good relationships with others. For instance, being polite at work or school makes people more willing to cooperate with you, which makes tasks run more smoothly.

× When I got something from other people, my mom said you should say thank.

✓ When I received something from other people, my mom said you should say thank you.

The original sentence uses 'got' which is informal and 'say thank' which is incomplete. 'Received' is a clearer past form (but 'got' could be acceptable conversationally). The main error is omission of the object 'you' after 'thank'. Use the full phrase 'thank you' to be grammatically correct and polite. Suggestion: say 'thank you' rather than 'say thank'.

× Yes, I think politeness is very important because when you show your plight or uh, courtesy, you'll got good feedback and uh, you will connect the society and other people, uh, very well and uh, umm, uh, do the job of smoothly.

✓ Yes, I think politeness is very important because when you show courtesy, you will get good feedback and connect with society and other people very well and do the job smoothly.

Multiple issues follow the allowed list: 'plight' is the wrong word; 'courtesy' alone is fine. 'You'll got' mixes future contraction with past form; correct is 'you will get' (future tense). 'Connect the society' uses incorrect preposition and article; correct is 'connect with society' or 'connect with other people'. 'Do the job of smoothly' is ungrammatical; use 'do the job smoothly' (adverb placement) and remove unnecessary 'of'. Also remove filled pauses (uh, umm) for clarity. Suggestions: replace 'plight' with 'courtesy' or 'good manners', use 'you will get', use 'connect with', and place adverbs after verb ('do the job smoothly').

× When I was a child, my mom taught me a lot about how to be polite. For example, when I met someone, my mom said you should say hello.

✓ When I was a child, my mom taught me a lot about how to be polite. For example, when I met someone, my mom said you should say hello.

This sentence is grammatically correct regarding third person singular and other categories in the provided list. 'Taught' correctly matches the past tense and 'mom said you should' is acceptable for reported guidance. No correction needed. Note: keep 'say hello' as is; alternatively 'say "hello"' is punctuation guidance but not required.