礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 句子不够连贯且有语法错误与重复词（如“grade”用法不当、过多填充词“uh/umm”）。回答未直接以主题句开头，信息含混。建议：1）开头用一句清晰的主题句直接回答问题；2）用正确动词（例如“address”或“call”而非“grade”）；3）减少填充词，控制在最多3-4句话内；4）补充具体例子（谁教的、什么时候、怎么做）并使用连接词如“for example”、“also”。示例句子展示正确语法、连贯衔接和具体细节。

範例: I learned politeness mainly from my parents. They taught me to address older people respectfully, for example calling a family friend “aunt” or “uncle” even if we are not related. At school, teachers also reminded us to use polite language and say “please” and “thank you,” which helped me form good habits.

建議: 回答表达观点明确但句子结构和用词有重复与不自然（如“which should people should”结构错误，词汇搭配可改进）。建议：1）用一句主题句直接回答（例如“Yes, it’s very important”）；2）用连词解释原因（because, so that）；3）给出具体结果或例子说明重要性；4）避免重复词，换用更自然词组如“social skills”或“build relationships”。示例句子展示清晰的结构与具体说明。

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect and makes social interactions smoother. For example, greeting someone politely can help you make friends and create positive first impressions, which is useful in both personal life and work.

× Well, my parents always taught me uh, I should grade the, the people who older than me, I will call them aunt or or uncle uh, to be in a polite way, umm and uh, when I in the school they will tell me to umm grade the teachers also.

✓ Well, my parents always taught me that I should address people who are older than me as "aunt" or "uncle" to be polite, and when I was at school they told me to address teachers respectfully too.

存在代词和从句结构问题：“taught me I should” 应改为 “taught me that I should” 或使用从句，保证句子完整；“the people who older than me” 缺少系动词，应为 “people who are older than me”；“I will call them aunt or uncle” 在表达过去习惯时态不恰当，改为一般现在/过去习惯时用 “should address… as” 或在叙述过去经历时用过去时 “they told me”；此外，重复词（"the, the"、"or or"）和口语填充词应去掉。建议：注意使用正确的从属连词（that）、补齐系动词（be 动词）、保持时态一致并去除多余重复词。

× Definitely, I believe it's a kind of civilized manner which should people should greet one another as an important way to make friends and build your interpersonal relationship.

✓ Definitely, I believe it's a civilized manner that people should use: greeting one another is an important way to make friends and build interpersonal relationships.

句子存在代词和从句结构问题以及单复数和搭配问题：原句中 “which should people should” 结构重复且错误，正确应使用关系代词引导的定语从句或将句子拆分为两部分，例如使用 “that people should use” 或直接用冒号；“build your interpersonal relationship” 中“relationship” 应用复数或去掉 your，使表述更自然为 “build interpersonal relationships”；此外，将动名词短语用作主语补语时，更清晰的结构是 “Greeting one another is...”。建议：避免从句内部的重复助动词，注意主谓一致与名词单复数搭配，并将句子分为更清晰的两部分。