礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and add one specific example with a linking word. Avoid filler sounds like “Umm.”

範例: My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child. They set an example by always greeting others respectfully and explaining appropriate behavior in different situations. For instance, when meeting elderly people, they showed me to use polite phrases and to listen carefully, which helped me understand why respect matters.

建議: Make a clear topic sentence and support it with two specific reasons linked logically. Fix grammatical errors, use correct word order, and complete the final thought. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it reflects your character and helps build good relationships. For example, polite behaviour encourages others to trust you, which can lead to new friendships and professional opportunities. Therefore, being respectful benefits both personal and social life.

× When I was a child, my parents are my role model to learn how to be polite.

✓ When I was a child, my parents were my role models for learning how to be polite.

Problems: present tense 'are' conflicts with past time phrase 'When I was a child' (tense error, Present tense issue - ID 6) and 'parents' requires plural 'role models' (singular/plural issue - ID 1). Suggestion: use past tense 'were' to match 'When I was a child' and plural 'role models'; change 'to learn' to 'for learning' or 'to teach me how to be polite' for clearer phrasing.

× Umm, they teach me what is appropriate to do in different venues.

✓ They taught me what was appropriate to do in different situations.

Problems: 'teach' is present tense but context is past (Past tense issue - ID 5), and 'venues' is awkward here; 'situations' is more natural (preposition/word choice - ID 11). Suggestion: change to past tense 'taught' and use 'was appropriate' to keep past narrative consistent; replace 'venues' with 'situations' or 'contexts'.

× For example, when I'm talking to elderly or someone who is bigger than me who's older than me, then I have to be polite.

✓ For example, when I'm talking to an elderly person or someone older than me, I have to be polite.

Problems: 'elderly' used without noun is incomplete (pronoun/adjective use - ID 12/13), 'someone who is bigger than me who's older than me' is redundant and awkward (sentence structure issue - ID 26). Suggestion: use 'an elderly person' and 'someone older than me' to be concise; remove unnecessary 'then' and 'who's' repetition.

× I think being polite is the most important thing that we all should have because being polite show what how a person you are and people will respect you if you respect them and this is how you can meet more people and benefits yourself at the.

✓ I think being polite is very important because it shows what kind of person you are, and people will respect you if you respect them; this helps you meet more people and benefits you.

Problems: 'the most important thing that we all should have' is wordy and awkward (sentence structure - ID 26) and 'show' should be 'shows' to agree with singular subject 'being polite' (third person singular issue - ID 2 and subject-verb agreement - ID 27). 'what how a person you are' is ungrammatical (word order/adjective/adverb misuse - ID 13/26). 'benefits yourself at the.' is incomplete and incorrect (preposition/article errors - ID 11/22). Suggestion: simplify to 'very important' or keep 'one of the most important things'; use 'it shows' and 'what kind of person you are'; end with 'benefits you' or 'is beneficial to you'.