纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你回答了童年做过纸艺，但“make craft”应改为“make crafts”，“fill those papers into air praying”表达不清。你可能想说“折纸飞机”，可以用“fold paper into paper planes”。最后说明比赛的目的或感受，让回答更完整。

範例: Yes, I used to make paper planes when I was a child. My friends and I would fold sheets of paper and see whose plane could fly the farthest. It was a simple but fun activity.

建議: 先直接说明你喜欢用纸做什么；这里应是“paper planes”，不是“papery print”。注意使用过去时（“liked”“would race”），并避免重复“we both love”。你可以补充比赛的规则或你喜欢它的原因。

範例: As a child, I liked making paper planes with my friends. We used to race them in the playground to see whose plane could fly the farthest. I enjoyed it because we could make each plane differently.

建議: 回答方向明确，但“physical letter”应使用复数“physical letters”，“these times”可改为“these days”。删去含义不清的“for I think it's also for all those teenagers”，直接解释原因，并用连接词“because”或“since”说明电子邮件和手机更方便。

範例: No, I rarely write physical letters these days. I usually send messages or emails instead because they are much quicker and more convenient. I might write a letter for a special occasion, though.

建議: 注意区分“handwritten letters”和“在笔记本上做记录”：爷爷记笔记并不能直接证明人们会保存手写信。先明确回答你认为人们是否还会保存信件，再举一个相关例子。语法上应说“many people”和“my grandpa writes”。

範例: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters, especially if they are meaningful or come from someone close to them. For example, my grandfather keeps old letters and notes because they remind him of important memories.

建議: 回答中有日常情况和长途旅行的对比，这是不错的思路，但“put on”应改为“carry”，“hands”应为“pens”。“in case my phone is at”没有表达完整；可以说明手机没电或无法使用时，纸笔能派上什么用场。

範例: I don't usually carry paper and pens when I go out. However, I take a small notebook and a pen on long trips in case my phone runs out of battery. I can use them to write down directions or important information.

× Yes, I did make craft with paper when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did make crafts with paper when I was a child.

这里泛指做多种手工艺品，craft 应使用复数 crafts。也可以说 make a craft，表示做一件手工艺品。

× I always fill those papers into air praying with my friends and have a race to see who's praying fine.

✓ I always folded paper into paper airplanes with my friends and raced to see whose airplane could fly the farthest.

这句话讲的是小时候经常做的事，应使用过去时。fold 和 race 应分别改为 folded 和 raced；讲过去的能力或可能性时，could 也与过去语境一致。

× I always fill those papers into air praying with my friends and have a race to see who's praying fine.

✓ I always folded paper into paper airplanes with my friends and raced to see whose airplane could fly the farthest.

原句中 fill ... into air praying 的动词搭配和句子结构不完整，后面的 who's praying 也无法清楚表达比赛内容。建议用完整、清楚的结构描述折纸飞机并比赛看谁的飞机飞得最远。

× Me and my friends both love to have a race for the papery print to see whose print can fly for for and we both love those race very much does really exciting competition.

✓ My friends and I both loved racing paper airplanes to see whose airplane could fly the farthest.

句子主语位置应使用主格 I，而不是宾格 me。应说 My friends and I。

× Me and my friends both love to have a race for the papery print to see whose print can fly for for and we both love those race very much does really exciting competition.

✓ My friends and I both loved racing paper airplanes to see whose airplane could fly the farthest.

问题问的是小时候喜欢做什么，因此应使用过去时。love 应改为 loved；表达过去比赛中飞机能够飞多远时，用 could 更符合时态。

× Me and my friends both love to have a race for the papery print to see whose print can fly for for and we both love those race very much does really exciting competition.

✓ My friends and I both loved those races; they were really exciting competitions.

those 后面应接复数名词，因此 race 要改为 races；表达多场比赛时，competition 也应使用复数 competitions。

× Me and my friends both love to have a race for the papery print to see whose print can fly for for and we both love those race very much does really exciting competition.

✓ My friends and I both loved racing paper airplanes to see whose airplane could fly the farthest. We thought those races were really exciting.

原句把多个意思用 and 连在一起，后半部分 does really exciting competition 缺少正确的主语和系动词。可拆成两个完整句子，并用 We thought those races were really exciting 表达“我们觉得那些比赛很刺激”。

× Well, no, I don't write physical letter these times for I think it's also for all those teenagers we both don't write that in now because you know the phones with emails are so convenient

✓ Well, no. I don't write physical letters these days because I think most teenagers don't write them anymore either. Phones and email are so convenient.

physical letter 泛指实体信件时应使用复数 letters。改写后用 them 指代前面的 letters，避免单复数不一致。

× Well, no, I don't write physical letter these times for I think it's also for all those teenagers we both don't write that in now because you know the phones with emails are so convenient

✓ Well, no. I don't write physical letters these days because I think most teenagers don't write them anymore either. Phones and email are so convenient.

原句用 for 连接的内容结构混乱，因果关系也不清楚。这里应直接用 because 引出原因，并把“青少年也不写信”表达为完整从句。

× Well, I don't see too much people still keep him writing letters today, but I will say my grandpa he always note down something on his notebook or even a daily report something

✓ Well, I don't see many people keeping handwritten letters today, but my grandpa always notes things in his notebook, such as entries in a daily journal.

people 是可数名词复数，表示“很多人”应使用 many，而不是修饰不可数名词的 much。

× Well, I don't see too much people still keep him writing letters today, but I will say my grandpa he always note down something on his notebook or even a daily report something

✓ Well, I don't see many people keeping handwritten letters today, but my grandpa always notes things in his notebook, such as entries in a daily journal.

my grandpa 已经是主语，后面不应再重复添加 he。应保留一个主语，例如 my grandpa always notes。

× Well, I don't see too much people still keep him writing letters today, but I will say my grandpa he always note down something on his notebook or even a daily report something

✓ Well, I don't see many people keeping handwritten letters today, but my grandpa always notes things in his notebook, such as entries in a daily journal.

主语 my grandpa 是第三人称单数，且句子使用一般现在时，因此动词 note 应加 -s，改为 notes。

× Well, I don't see too much people still keep him writing letters today, but I will say my grandpa he always note down something on his notebook or even a daily report something

✓ Well, I don't see many people keeping handwritten letters today, but my grandpa always notes things in his notebook, such as entries in a daily journal.

表示把内容记在笔记本里面，通常使用介词 in，而不是 on。因此应说 in his notebook。

× Well, I don't see too much people still keep him writing letters today, but I will say my grandpa he always note down something on his notebook or even a daily report something

✓ Well, I don't see many people keeping handwritten letters today, but my grandpa always notes things in his notebook, such as entries in a daily journal.

原句后半部分 my grandpa he 重复主语，daily report something 也没有组成清楚的句子结构。可以改为 notes things in his notebook, such as entries in a daily journal，使意思完整清晰。

× Well, in normal times I would not put on some papers and pens in my bag but for a long trip where I need to in some special moments I would take some paper and hands in case my phone is at.

✓ Well, normally I wouldn't put paper and pens in my bag, but on a long trip, when I might need them, I would take some in case my phone runs out of battery.

表示把物品放进包里，应使用 put ... in；表示“在一次长途旅行中”，通常说 on a long trip。原句的 put on 不适用于“放进包里”这个意思。

× Well, in normal times I would not put on some papers and pens in my bag but for a long trip where I need to in some special moments I would take some paper and hands in case my phone is at.

✓ Well, normally I wouldn't put paper and pens in my bag, but on a long trip, when I might need them, I would take some in case my phone runs out of battery.

原句中 where I need to 后缺少动词，in some special moments 的位置也使从句不完整；结尾 my phone is at 缺少补足意思的成分。可改为 when I might need them 和 in case my phone runs out of battery，构成完整、清楚的句子。