纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 先直接回答是否做过纸艺，再说明具体做过什么。“models of well wasting paper”表达不清，建议改成“paper models”并举一个具体例子。注意用过去时描述童年经历，删去重复的“So I did this”和口头填充语“you know”。

範例: Yes, I have. I used to make paper models, especially small buildings, because I studied architecture. Making them helped me understand how spaces and structures work.

建議: 回答内容相关，但时态混用（“do not”“prefer”），而且句子过长、最后一句未完成。描述童年习惯时用过去时，如“didn't”“liked”；“paint on the paper”可根据意思改为“draw on paper”，“pick cartoons”可改为“draw cartoons”。补充一个具体例子即可。

範例: As a child, I liked drawing on paper because my mother didn’t let me draw on the walls. I often drew cartoon characters and simple landscapes. It was a fun way to be creative.

建議: 虽然开头回答了“No”，但后面的理由较难理解，也没有清楚解释你是否还写纸质信。可直接说明现在很少写信，并用邮件或工作沟通作为具体理由。注意“have to completed”应改为“have to complete”，“statistic statistic”重复，且“handwriter”不适合表达手写。

範例: No, I rarely write physical letters now. I usually send emails or messages because they’re much quicker and easier to keep track of. I only write by hand for special occasions, such as sending a birthday card.

建議: 回答中的人群和观点不够清楚：“for younger not for the elder”与后文提到不习惯使用电脑的意思矛盾。先明确哪些人会保留手写信，再给出具体原因，例如纪念意义或情感价值。避免重复“they do not”，并使用“older people”“electronic devices”等自然表达。

範例: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters, especially older people. They may value them because the letters feel personal and bring back memories. Some people also keep letters from family members as keepsakes.

建議: 你清楚表达了不常带纸笔，也给出了使用电子设备的理由。建议把“electricity devices”改为“electronic devices”，“note something”改为“take a note”，并简化第二句；“paper and a pen”作主语时谓语应使用复数。可以补充常用的设备或应用，让细节更具体。

範例: No, I usually take my phone instead. If I need to make a note, I can type it into a notes app, which is convenient and easy to search later. I only carry a pen when I know I’ll need to fill in a form.

× Yes, of course I used to make some models of well wasting paper and you know this step is very important for us to understand the special space in architecture.

✓ Yes, of course. I used to make some models from waste paper, and this step is very important for us to understand space in architecture.

“Well”是副词，不能自然地修饰这里的“wasting paper”。如果想表达“用废纸制作模型”，可以说“make models from waste paper”。

× Well when I was a child I do not make so many models but I prefer to paint on the paper since my mother forbidden me to paint this picture on the wall and I like to pick some cartoons, figures and landscape views.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I did not make many models, but I preferred painting on paper because my mother forbade me to paint on the wall, and I liked drawing cartoons, figures, and landscapes.

整段描述的是童年经历，应使用过去时。“do not make”应改为“did not make”，“prefer”和“like”应改为“preferred”和“liked”；“forbidden”是过去分词，此处需要一般过去式“forbade”。描述过去的喜好时，要保持时态一致。

× No, frankly speaking no since I have to completed my works before the computer and did some statistic statistic analysis.

✓ No, frankly speaking, no. I have to complete my work on the computer and do some statistical analysis.

“have to”后面要接动词原形，因此“have to completed”应改为“have to complete”。可以记住结构“have to + 动词原形”。

× No, frankly speaking no since I have to completed my works before the computer and did some statistic statistic analysis.

✓ No, frankly speaking, no. I have to complete my work on the computer and do some statistical analysis.

表示使用电脑完成工作时，通常说“on the computer”，而不是“before the computer”。注意根据表达的具体含义选择合适的介词。

× No, frankly speaking no since I have to completed my works before the computer and did some statistic statistic analysis.

✓ No, frankly speaking, no. I have to complete my work on the computer and do some statistical analysis.

修饰名词“analysis”时需要形容词“statistical”，不能用名词“statistic”直接修饰。应使用“statistical analysis”。

× Nowadays I do not use the paper frequently.

✓ Nowadays, I do not use paper frequently.

这里泛指纸这种材料，通常不加定冠词“the”。谈论泛指的不可数名词时，一般直接使用名词。

× Yes, of course this behaviour must exist but for younger not for the elder is necessary.

✓ Yes, of course, this practice still exists, but it is more necessary for younger people than for older people.

原句中“but for younger not for the elder is necessary”缺少清晰的主语和完整的句子结构。可以使用“It is ... for ...”结构，并补出“people”，让句意和句子成分完整。

× They do not they do not use the to be used to using computers this electric equipment.

✓ They are not used to using computers or other electronic devices.

原句中“do not use the to be used to using”结构混乱，不能组成清楚的句子。若要表达“他们不习惯使用电脑”，可用“be used to + 动名词”，即“are not used to using”。

× No, I frequently take the electricity devices if I have to note something.

✓ No, I frequently take electronic devices with me if I have to note something.

“electricity”是名词，不能在这里自然地修饰“devices”。表示“电子设备”应使用形容词“electronic”。

× The handwriting paper and a pen is not very useful for me.

✓ Paper and a pen are not very useful for me.

主语由“paper”和“a pen”两个部分组成，是并列主语，因此谓语动词要用复数形式“are”，不能用“is”。

× The handwriting paper and a pen is not very useful for me and this electric equipment can help me store this information for a long time.

✓ Paper and a pen are not very useful for me, and this electronic equipment can help me store this information for a long time.

修饰“equipment”表示“电子的”时，应使用形容词“electronic”，而不是“electric”。“Electric”通常表示由电驱动或通电的。