纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 先直接回答是否做过纸艺，再说明小时候做过哪些东西，以及你或家人的感受。“made a frequent choice of mine”表达不自然，可以说“often folded paper into”。注意使用过去时，如“pressed/praised”，并避免重复使用“because”。最后的“I didn't as well”意思不完整，应删除或补充完整。回答控制在5句以内。

範例: Yes, I have. When I was a child, I often folded paper into simple things like little boxes and boats. My parents praised me because I was quite good at it.

建議: 题目问的是你小时候喜欢用纸做什么，开头应直接回答“I liked folding paper…”。“them”指代不清，可以明确说“paper”；“tidy bought”以及重复的“impressed”会影响理解。补充一个具体细节，例如做纸船、和朋友玩，或父母如何评价你。注意使用过去时，并避免重复表达原因。

範例: As a child, I liked folding paper into small boats. I sometimes floated them in a bowl of water and pretended they were real ships. My parents thought it was a fun little hobby.

建議: 回答的大意清楚，但“middle classes”与语境不符；如果想表达课业繁忙，可以说“classes”或“coursework”。“I have not much time”应改为“I don’t have much time”，“online letters”可换成更自然的“messages”。先明确说明是否偶尔写实体信，再解释原因并作简短对比。减少“You know”和“some”等填充或多余词。

範例: Not very often. I’m usually busy with my classes, so I don’t have much time to write physical letters. I mostly keep in touch with my friends by sending them messages online.

建議: 先直接回答人们是否还会保存手写信，再用特殊场合的例子支持观点。“in special occasions”应改为“on special occasions”；婚礼和生日卡片可以说“weddings and birthday cards”。“rest on them”不符合此处意思，可用“keep them”或“save them”；“it brings some unforgettable memory”可改为“they create lasting memories”。

範例: Yes, I think many people still keep handwritten letters, especially if they have sentimental value. For example, people might save a wedding card or a birthday card from a close friend. These little messages can bring back happy memories years later.

建議: 观点可以理解：你通常不带纸笔，因为手机或平板更方便。“not a frequent choice of mine”表达生硬，可说“I don’t usually carry them”；“there’s a little strange”可改为“I find it a little inconvenient”。注意主谓一致：“my phone and iPad are convenient”。如果想表达随手记下事情，用“write something down”或“take a note”，而不是“rest out”。

範例: I don’t usually carry paper and pens when I go out. I find my phone much more convenient, so I use it to write down reminders or take quick notes. I might bring a pen if I know I’ll need to fill in a form.

× I remember that when I was a child I made a frequent choice of mine to fold them into some simple types such as small box and and little boats.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, I frequently chose to fold them into some simple types such as a small box and little boats.

“made a frequent choice of mine to fold”结构不自然，不能准确表达“经常选择折纸”。可以用“frequently chose to fold”表示“经常选择折”。

× I remember that when I was a child I made a frequent choice of mine to fold them into some simple types such as small box and and little boats.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, I frequently chose to fold them into some simple types such as a small box and little boats.

“box”是单数可数名词，前面需要冠词。这里应在“small box”前加“a”。

× I remember that when I was a child I made a frequent choice of mine to fold them into some simple types such as small box and and little boats.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, I frequently chose to fold them into some simple types such as a small box and little boats.

“and and”重复使用了连词“and”。连接并列项目时保留一个“and”即可。

× It really impressed me because my parents always press me because I do it well.

✓ It really impressed me because my parents always pressed me because I did it well.

这句话讲的是童年时发生的事情，因此相关动词应使用过去时：“press”改为“pressed”，“do”改为“did”。

× Personally, I would like to write some physical letters in special occasions such as wedding and my parents or my friend's birthday card.

✓ Personally, I would like to write some physical letters on special occasions, such as weddings or the birthdays of my parents or friends.

表示“在特殊场合”时，通常用介词“on”，而不是“in”。可以记住常见搭配“on special occasions”。

× Personally, I would like to write some physical letters in special occasions such as wedding and my parents or my friend's birthday card.

✓ Personally, I would like to write some physical letters on special occasions, such as weddings or the birthdays of my parents or friends.

这里是在举例说明多种特殊场合，因此可数名词“wedding”和“birthday”应使用复数形式“weddings”和“birthdays”。

× I would like to rest on them because I think it brings some unforgettable memory for them.

✓ I would like to rest on them because I think they bring them some unforgettable memories.

“it”指代前面的复数名词“letters”，所以应改为复数代词“they”，谓语也应与之搭配。

× I would like to rest on them because I think it brings some unforgettable memory for them.

✓ I would like to rest on them because I think they bring them some unforgettable memories.

“memory”在这里表示多段难忘的回忆，应使用复数形式“memories”。

× Actually that's not a frequent choice of mine to take them when I go out because I think there's a little strange and you know the iPad and the phone is convenient now.

✓ Actually, that's not a frequent choice of mine when I go out because I think it's a little strange, and the iPad and the phone are convenient now.

“there's a little strange”中的“there”不能充当“strange”的主语。这里应使用代词“it”，说“我觉得这有点奇怪”时用“it's a little strange”。

× Actually that's not a frequent choice of mine to take them when I go out because I think there's a little strange and you know the iPad and the phone is convenient now.

✓ Actually, that's not a frequent choice of mine when I go out because I think it's a little strange, and the iPad and the phone are convenient now.

“the iPad and the phone”由两个并列名词构成复数主语，因此谓语应使用“are”，不能使用“is”。