纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 先直接回答做过什么，再按“谁教你—怎么做—结果如何”展开。这里想表达的应该是“纸飞机”，可说“make a paper airplane”；避免重复“make it”，也不要用不自然的“as you remember”。

範例: Yes, I have. When I was little, my dad taught me how to make a paper airplane. I followed his instructions and was thrilled when it actually flew across the yard.

建議: 答案包含手工、画画和写日记，内容充足，但时态不一致（过去经历应使用过去时），且“also”重复较多。建议先概括最喜欢的活动，再用一两个具体细节说明；“paper is my friend as a child”表达不够自然。

範例: As a child, I loved using paper for creative activities. I often drew little sketches and made simple crafts, and I also kept a handwritten diary. It was a nice way to express myself.

建議: 先明确回答“现在不常写”，再补充过去写信的经历。原句中“Not recently, I can”前后矛盾，“write letters each other”应为“write letters to each other”；“meaningful schedule”不符合语境，可改为“a meaningful way to stay in touch”。

範例: Not these days. When I was in high school, though, my friends and I used to write letters to each other. We enjoyed sharing personal news that way, and the letters felt more meaningful than text messages.

建議: 用父母保存信件的例子回答很切题，也表达了信件的情感价值。注意区分“父母收到的信”和“父母恋爱时互相写的信”，避免把两种情况混在一个长句里；“letters”是复数，后面应使用“them”。

範例: Yes, I think many people still keep handwritten letters because they have sentimental value. My parents have kept letters they wrote to each other when they were dating. I find it touching that those letters help preserve memories of their relationship.

建議: 回答有清楚的条件对比，但句子较绕，且“take a paper”通常应说“take some paper”或“bring a notebook”；“go to something”不够具体。建议简洁说明什么情况下会带、什么情况下不会带，并使用“otherwise”连接。

範例: Sometimes, yes. If I’m going to a lecture, I usually bring a notebook and a pen so I can take notes. Otherwise, I just use my phone or laptop, so I don’t need to carry them.

× my dad told me how to make paper playing by paper

✓ my dad taught me how to make a paper plane out of paper

“make paper playing by paper”结构不完整，且无法清楚表达制作的物品。这里按上下文推断你想说“纸飞机”，可以说“make a paper plane out of paper”。

× When I was a child, I still remember I will do some handicraft with paper

✓ When I was a child, I still remember that I would do some handicrafts with paper

这句话描述童年时期的习惯，应用过去习惯表达“would do”，而不是表示将来的“will do”。此外，“some handicrafts”用复数更合适。

× I loved drawing things on the paper and do some sketches

✓ I loved drawing things on paper and doing some sketches

“loved”后面的两个动作应保持平行结构：drawing 和 doing。描述纸这种材料时通常说“on paper”，不需要加“the”。

× I also like to write diaries on paper using my pens every day. So paper is my friend as a child.

✓ I also liked to write diaries on paper using my pens every day. So paper was my friend as a child.

这里谈的是童年时期的习惯和感受，因此“like”和“is”都应改为过去式“liked”和“was”。

× when I was in high school, my friends and I will write physical letters

✓ When I was in high school, my friends and I would write physical letters

“when I was in high school”明确表示过去。描述过去经常发生的事情时，可用“would write”或“used to write”，不能用“will write”。

× my friends and I will write physical letters each other to each other

✓ my friends and I would write physical letters to each other

“write letters”后面表示信件接收对象时用介词“to”。“each other”前只需保留一个“to”，不能重复表达。

× because we can communicate more and I think it's a more meaningful schedule for us

✓ because we could communicate more, and I think it was more meaningful for us

这句话谈的是高中时期的情况，因此“can”和“is”应分别改为过去式“could”和“was”。

× when they were in love they just write some letters to each other

✓ when they were in love, they just wrote letters to each other

“when they were in love”指过去的时间，因此“write”应使用过去式“wrote”。

× they keep it to themselves now

✓ they keep them now

“it”是单数代词，但前文的“letters”是复数，因此应使用“them”。这里的“keep them”表示他们现在仍然保存着这些信。

× has long lasting influence on me too

✓ has a long-lasting influence on me too

“influence”在这里是可数名词单数，前面需要加不定冠词“a”。作复合形容词使用时，“long-lasting”通常加连字符。

× I will take a paper and pens with me

✓ I will take some paper and pens with me

“paper”表示纸这种材料时通常是不可数名词，不能用“a”直接修饰。可以说“some paper”；如果指一张纸，则说“a sheet of paper”。

× if I go to something that I can use my computer to write down something

✓ if I go somewhere where I can use my computer to write something down

这里需要表达“去某个地方”，应使用“somewhere”，而不是指物品的“something”。关系副词“where”可以引出对地点的说明；“write something down”是更合适的语序。