纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接，且提供了具体例子，但有几处不自然的表达。建议将“by using colorful papers”改为“using colorful paper”，因为paper通常不可数；“decorated cut papers”可改为“paper cut-outs”；“Star and Heart”应使用小写或更自然地说“stars and hearts”。另外，“which she'll really like”表达的是推测，最好改为“which she really liked”或“and she really liked it”。

範例: Yes, I have. I once made a birthday card for my friend Casey using colorful paper and paper cut-outs in the shape of stars and hearts. She really liked it because it was handmade and personalized.

建議: 回答包含相关内容，但句子结构混乱，缺少清晰的主题句。“As a child because”不能这样连接，且“make some types of papers”不符合语境；可以直接说“we were asked to make paper crafts”。由于问题询问过去的喜好，应使用过去时“preferred”或“liked”。建议说明具体喜欢制作什么，以及原因，并使用“especially”或“because”等连接词。

範例: When I was a child, I liked making paper crafts at kindergarten. Our teacher often asked us to cut out shapes, and I especially enjoyed making stars and hearts. It was fun to create colorful decorations with my classmates.

建議: 回答观点明确，也提供了原因和例子，但句子过长，重复使用“and”，影响流畅度。应说“on their birthdays”而不是“for their birthday”；“some something”是明显的重复错误；“the anime's character”可改为“their favorite anime character”。建议拆成2—3句，并用“also”或“For example”组织细节。

範例: Yes, I still write physical letters to my friends on their birthdays. I do this because handwritten messages feel more sincere and show that I really care about them. For example, if a friend likes anime, I might draw their favorite character on the card.

建議: 回答方向正确，但“although”与“but”不能同时使用；“there are some people still write”应改为“some people still write”；“for to show”应改为“to show”；“sensory”不适合表达“有个人特色”，可使用“personal”或“more meaningful”。此外，题目中的“keep handwritten letters”最好直接回答人们会保存它们，而不仅是写卡片。

範例: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters, even though digital messages are more common. They often save them because handwritten notes feel more personal and meaningful. For instance, people may keep letters from close friends or family members as special memories.

建議: 回答清楚，并给出了原因和替代方案，但有一些搭配和语法问题。“take papers and pens to with me”应改为“take paper and a pen with me”；“take up some place”应改为“take up space”；“something need to note”应改为“something to note down”；“memorandum”在日常口语中不自然，可用“notes”或“reminders”。

範例: I seldom carry paper and a pen with me when I go out because they take up space and are easy to forget. If I need to write something down, I usually use the notes app on my phone instead. It is more convenient and always available.

× Yes, I have made a birthday card for my friend Casey by using colorful papers and some decorated cut papers such as Star and Heart, which she'll really like.

✓ Yes, I have made a birthday card for my friend Casey using colorful paper and some decorated cutouts, such as stars and hearts, which she'll really like.

“Paper”表示纸这种材料时通常是不可数名词，不能随意使用复数形式“papers”。另外，“star”和“heart”在这里表示多个装饰图案，因此应使用复数形式“stars”和“hearts”。

× As a child because our kindergarten teacher told us to make some types of papers so in that time I really prefer to cut with star and heart.

✓ As a child, our kindergarten teacher told us to make different kinds of paper crafts, so at that time I really preferred cutting out stars and hearts.

“As a child”和“told”说明这件事发生在过去，因此“prefer”也应使用过去式“preferred”。描述过去的喜好时，要保持时态一致。

× As a child because our kindergarten teacher told us to make some types of papers so in that time I really prefer to cut with star and heart.

✓ As a child, our kindergarten teacher told us to make different kinds of paper crafts, so at that time I really preferred cutting out stars and hearts.

原句同时使用了“As a child because”和“so”，导致句子结构混乱。“because”和“so”通常不能在同一个因果结构中这样同时使用。可以使用“because”，也可以使用“so”；本句使用“so”连接两个完整的分句更自然。

× Yes, I still write physical letters to my friends for their birthday because I think it can convey my sincerity and show how important their birthday is and sometimes if they have some something they like such as the anime's character, I will write I will draw something.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters to my friends for their birthdays because I think they can convey my sincerity and show how important their birthdays are. Sometimes, if they have something they like, such as an anime character, I will draw it.

“My friends”是复数，因此通常应说“their birthdays”，相应地，后面的“their birthdays”也要搭配复数动词“are”。“Letters”是复数，所以用“they”比“it”更符合前面的名词。

× Yes, I still write physical letters to my friends for their birthday because I think it can convey my sincerity and show how important their birthday is and sometimes if they have some something they like such as the anime's character, I will write I will draw something.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters to my friends for their birthdays because I think they can convey my sincerity and show how important their birthdays are. Sometimes, if they have something they like, such as an anime character, I will draw it.

原句过长，多个意思直接连接在一起；“some something”重复，而且“I will write I will draw”造成动词重复和结构错误。应拆分句子，并使用清晰的条件结构“if ...”表达。

× Yes, although digital messages are more common but there are some people still write handwritten cards for to show more personal and sensory.

✓ Yes, although digital messages are more common, some people still write handwritten cards to express more personal and sincere feelings.

“Although”本身已经表示“虽然”，后面不能再搭配“but”。应删除“but”，并在让步从句后使用逗号。

× Yes, although digital messages are more common but there are some people still write handwritten cards for to show more personal and sensory.

✓ Yes, although digital messages are more common, there are still some people who write handwritten cards to express more personal and sincere feelings.

使用“There are”时，后面的名词“some people”不能直接连接动词“write”。需要使用关系代词“who”连接“people”和“write”，构成“there are some people who write”。

× Yes, although digital messages are more common but there are some people still write handwritten cards for to show more personal and sensory.

✓ Yes, although digital messages are more common, some people still write handwritten cards to express more personal and sincere feelings.

“To show”中的“to”已经是不定式标记，前面不应再加介词“for”。应直接使用“to express”或“to show”。

× Yes, although digital messages are more common but there are some people still write handwritten cards for to show more personal and sensory.

✓ Yes, although digital messages are more common, some people still write handwritten cards to express more personal and sincere feelings.

“Sensory”通常表示“感官的”，不适合描述信件带来的情感表达。这里应使用能表示真诚或个人情感的形容词，如“sincere”或“personal”。

× I seldom take papers and pens to with me when I go out because I think they take up some place and it is not really easy to carry. So if I have something need to note, I will just write down my memorandum on my phone.

✓ I seldom take paper and pens with me when I go out because I think they take up space and are not really easy to carry. So, if I have something to note, I will just write it down on my phone.

固定表达是“take something with me”，不能在“with me”前使用多余的“to”。因此应删除“to”，使用“take paper and pens with me”。

× I seldom take papers and pens to with me when I go out because I think they take up some place and it is not really easy to carry. So if I have something need to note, I will just write down my memorandum on my phone.

✓ I seldom take paper and pens with me when I go out because I think they take up space and are not really easy to carry. So, if I have something to note, I will just write it down on my phone.

“Space”在“占用空间”的意思中通常是不可数名词，因此不能说“some place”。固定表达是“take up space”。

× I seldom take papers and pens to with me when I go out because I think they take up some place and it is not really easy to carry. So if I have something need to note, I will just write down my memorandum on my phone.

✓ I seldom take paper and pens with me when I go out because I think they take up space and are not really easy to carry. So, if I have something to note, I will just write it down on my phone.

前面的主语是“paper and pens”，表示多个物品，所以应继续使用复数代词“they”以及复数谓语“are”，不能改用单数“it is”。

× I seldom take papers and pens to with me when I go out because I think they take up some place and it is not really easy to carry. So if I have something need to note, I will just write down my memorandum on my phone.

✓ I seldom take paper and pens with me when I go out because I think they take up space and are not really easy to carry. So, if I have something to note, I will just write it down on my phone.

“Something need to note”缺少正确的动词结构。可以使用“something to note”，表示“需要记录的事情”，也可以说“something that I need to note”。此外，在“So”后加逗号有助于分隔句子。