纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 「write some crafts in my paper」は不自然です。紙で何かを作った経験を聞かれているので、「make paper crafts」や具体的な作品名を使いましょう。また、過去の習慣には「usually wrote」または「used to make」を使い、授業中に作った理由や作品の例を1つ加えると、内容がより明確になります。

範例: Yes, I did. When I was in junior high school, I used to make simple paper crafts during art class, such as origami animals and greeting cards. It was a fun way to be creative.

建議: 「write pictures」は「draw pictures」、「in my paper」は「on paper」が自然です。過去の習慣なので「I wrote」または「I used to draw」を一貫して使いましょう。家族の絵を描いて見せたという内容は具体的でよいので、家族の反応や自分の気持ちを加えると、より効果的な回答になります。

範例: When I was a child, I used to draw pictures of my family on paper. I often drew my parents and my brother, and then showed them my drawings. They always praised me, which made me feel proud.

建議: 直接的な答えと理由があり、比較もできているため、構成はよいです。「line」は固有名詞として「LINE」、「our conversation」は複数形の「our conversations」が適切です。また、文末にピリオドを付け、「faster and easier to save our conversations」のように並列関係を明確にしましょう。

範例: No, I hardly ever write physical letters anymore. Online messaging has become more popular and convenient, so I usually use LINE or Instagram to keep in touch with my friends. It is faster, and I can easily save our conversations.

建議: 質問は「手書きの手紙を保管するか」ですが、「underwriting later」は意味が通らないため、「handwritten letters」を使いましょう。「people don't」や「people find online messaging easier」のように文法を修正してください。また、現代の傾向だけでなく、思い出の手紙や特別な機会の手紙は保管されるという例外を述べると、よりバランスのよい回答になります。

範例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially if they are from family members or close friends. However, most people use online messaging for daily communication because it is quicker and more convenient. Handwritten letters are often kept as special memories.

建議: 質問は外出時に紙とペンを持ち歩くかどうかですが、回答は手書きの手紙について述べており、質問に直接答えていません。まず「Yes, I usually do」または「No, I don't」を述べ、その理由や具体例を続けてください。また、回答が途中で終わっているため、2〜4文で完結させましょう。「ride to return」は不自然なので、必要なら「write letters for special occasions」と表現します。

範例: No, I usually don't carry paper and pens when I go out. I can write notes on my phone, which is more convenient and lighter to carry. However, I sometimes take a pen to work or to appointments in case I need to fill out a form.

× Yes, when I was a junior high school student, I usually write some crafts in my paper during the class.

✓ Yes, when I was a junior high school student, I usually wrote some crafts in my paper during the class.

The time expression when I was a junior high school student refers to the past, so write must be changed to its past-tense form, wrote. Keep the verb tense consistent with the past-time context.

× Yes, when I was a junior high school student, I usually write some crafts in my paper during the class.

✓ Yes, when I was a junior high school student, I usually wrote some crafts on paper during the class.

Use the preposition on when referring to writing or drawing on the surface of paper. In paper usually means inside a paper document or container.

× When I was a child I used to write some pictures in my paper and I write my mom, my dad and my brother in the paper and show them this paper.

✓ When I was a child, I used to write some pictures on paper, and I wrote my mom, my dad, and my brother on the paper and showed them the paper.

The sentence describes childhood actions in the past. Therefore, write must become wrote and show must become showed. The verb used to write is already correctly formed because used to is followed by the base form of a verb.

× When I was a child I used to write some pictures in my paper and I write my mom, my dad and my brother in the paper and show them this paper.

✓ When I was a child, I used to write some pictures on paper, and I wrote my mom, my dad, and my brother on the paper and showed them the paper.

Use on rather than in when describing writing or drawing on a sheet of paper.

× I think people doesn't keep underwriting later today because the online messaging is very convenient and easier for people people and you can send messages to your friends very faster.

✓ I think people do not keep handwritten letters nowadays because online messaging is more convenient and faster, and people can send messages to their friends quickly.

People is a plural subject, so it must be followed by do not, not does not. Use do not with plural subjects such as people, they, and many students.

× I think people doesn't keep underwriting later today because the online messaging is very convenient and easier for people people and you can send messages to your friends very faster.

✓ I think people do not keep handwritten letters nowadays because online messaging is more convenient and faster, and people can send messages to their friends quickly.

Very cannot normally modify the comparative adjective faster. Use much faster or replace the comparative phrase with the adverb quickly. Quickly is the correct adverb for describing how people send messages.

× I think people doesn't keep underwriting later today because the online messaging is very convenient and easier for people people and you can send messages to your friends very faster.

✓ I think people do not keep handwritten letters nowadays because online messaging is more convenient and faster. People can send messages to their friends quickly.

The original sentence contains a repeated word, people people, and joins several ideas in an unclear structure. Remove the repetition and separate the ideas into clear clauses or sentences. Avoid joining unrelated clauses with too many ands.

× Although some still ride to return for a special occasion like birthday or

✓ Although some people still write letters for special occasions, such as a birthday,

A singular countable noun such as birthday needs a determiner. Use a birthday when referring to one unspecified birthday. Use birthdays when speaking about birthdays in general.

× Although some still ride to return for a special occasion like birthday or

✓ Although some people still write letters for special occasions, such as birthdays, they are less common than online messages.

The original sentence is incomplete because it begins with the subordinating conjunction Although but does not contain a main clause. An although-clause must be followed by an independent clause to form a complete sentence.