纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答基本切题，也提供了学习建筑设计的背景，但句子之间缺少标点和连接，导致表达不够自然。“in the college”应改为“in college”，“on the paper”应改为“on paper”。“delighted”通常形容人的感受，这里应使用“interesting”或“enjoyable”。建议先直接回答，再说明具体做过什么以及自己的感受。

範例: Yes, I have. I studied architectural design in college, so I often made paper models and sketches for my assignments. I found the process quite enjoyable because it allowed me to turn my ideas into something visual.

建議: 回答内容相关，并解释了童年时参加绘画班的经历。不过，“paint some pencils”搭配错误，应改为“draw pictures with pencils”或“make pencil sketches”；“color paintings”不自然，可改为“colourful paintings”。注意时态：问题询问过去，后文应使用“painted”或“used to paint”。

範例: When I was a child, I used to attend a painting class after school. I enjoyed drawing pencil sketches and colourful pictures on paper. It was a relaxing hobby, and my mother was very supportive of it.

建議: 回答结构清楚，也给出了原因和例子，但“federal letters”用词错误，应为“formal letters”或更自然的“handwritten letters”。“one's birthdays”与“their graduations”指代不一致，建议改为“my friends’ birthdays or graduations”。“real emotions”可以替换为更自然的“genuine feelings”，并避免重复使用“some”。

範例: Yes, I do. I think handwritten letters are a meaningful way to express my genuine feelings to my friends. I usually write them on special occasions, such as my friends’ birthdays or graduations, because they feel more personal than text messages.

建議: 回答表达了明确观点，但句子结构和多个词语使用错误，影响理解。“keep hundreds”应改为“keep many handwritten letters”，“it is not covered in people”不符合英语表达，可改为“it is no longer common”。建议使用清晰的对比结构：虽然大多数人使用手机发消息，但有些人仍会保存重要信件。

範例: I think most people do not keep many handwritten letters nowadays because messaging apps are much more convenient. However, some people still save letters from family members or close friends because these letters have sentimental value.

建議: 回答有直接观点、原因和结果，但“pests”应为“pens”，“papers”在这里更自然的说法是“a notebook and a pen”。“this year”与上下文不太匹配，可以删除；“during the trial”很可能想表达“during travel”，应改为“when I travel”。“keep my real emotions and memories”应改为“record my thoughts and preserve my memories”。

範例: Yes, I do. I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out, especially when I travel. I like writing down quick notes because it helps me record my thoughts and preserve interesting memories.

× Yes I have I learnt architectural design in the college so I usually do some design homework on the paper and I think it is a little delighted.

✓ Yes, I have. I learned architectural design in college, so I usually do some design homework on paper, and I think it is a little delightful.

“Delighted”通常描述人的感受，表示“感到高兴的”；“delightful”描述事物，表示“令人愉快的”。这里的“it”指代设计作业或这种活动，因此应使用“delightful”。另外，“in college”和“on paper”是更自然的固定表达。

× Yes I have I learnt architectural design in the college so I usually do some design homework on the paper and I think it is a little delighted.

✓ Yes, I have. I learned architectural design in college, so I usually do some design homework on paper, and I think it is a little delightful.

原句把多个完整句子直接连接在一起，缺少句号和逗号，造成长句和句子边界不清。回答“Have you...?”后应先用“Yes, I have.”完整回答，再开始说明原因。

× Yes I have I learnt architectural design in the college so I usually do some design homework on the paper and I think it is a little delighted.

✓ Yes, I have. I learned architectural design in college, so I usually do some design homework on paper, and I think it is a little delightful.

“college”表示一般的大学学习经历时，通常不加定冠词，使用“in college”。“paper”表示纸这种材料时也通常不加“the”，所以说“on paper”。

× Actually I think people do not keep hundreds today because it is not covered in people now usually send messages by their smart phones to others.

✓ Actually, I think people do not keep handwritten letters today because they are no longer common. People now usually send messages to others using their smartphones.

原句包含多个意思，但没有正确分句，导致结构混乱。“because”引导原因从句后，应结束一个完整句子，再用新句子表达另一个观点。“people”是复数，因此指代它时使用“they”，不能使用“it”。

× Actually I think people do not keep hundreds today because it is not covered in people now usually send messages by their smart phones to others.

✓ Actually, I think people do not keep handwritten letters today because they are no longer common. People now usually send messages to others using their smartphones.

“handwritten letters”是复数名词，所以后面应使用复数代词“they”，而不是单数代词“it”。此外，代词应清楚指代前面的名词。

× So I usually write some federal letters on some special occasions such as one's birthdays or their graduations.

✓ So I usually write some federal letters on special occasions such as people's birthdays or graduations.

原句中的“one's”和“their”指代不一致。“one's”是泛指单数形式，而“their”是复数或性别中性的形式。为了保持一致，可以改为“people's birthdays or graduations”。

× I carry papers and pests with me this year because I picked up a habit to write some notes during the trial.

✓ I carry papers and pests with me this year because I picked up the habit of writing some notes during the trial.

固定搭配是“pick up the habit of doing something”，其中介词“of”后面要接动名词，因此“to write”应改为“writing”。

× I think it can keep my real emotions and memories.

✓ I think they can preserve my real emotions and memories.

前文的“papers and pests”是复数，因此后面不能用单数代词“it”，应使用复数代词“they”。