纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接提到了小时候在美术课上做纸艺，但“crops”应为“crafts”，且句子结构和连接不自然。建议先明确回答“Yes, I have”，再说明具体做过什么，并用“although”解释自己不擅长。注意使用过去时和正确搭配，如“teach us how to make”。

範例: Yes, I have. When I was in primary school, my art teacher taught us how to make paper crafts, such as paper flowers and animals. I enjoyed the activities, although I wasn’t very good at making them.

建議: 内容具体且结构清晰，使用了“because”和“For example”来补充原因和例子，符合自然有效的回答要求。可以改进的是：星期六选择蓝色与心情之间的关系不够明确；另外不要用“And”单独连接最后一句，可用“I still...”或“Interestingly”。

範例: When I was a child, I liked writing a diary on colorful paper because I felt that each color reflected my mood. For example, I used blue paper when I felt calm and yellow paper when I was happy. Interestingly, I still have a few of those notebooks at home.

建議: 回答表达了不再写信的观点，也给出了手机更方便的原因，但存在明显语法问题：应说“after graduating from high school”“my mobile phone makes communication easier”，不能说“more easier”。后两句需要用连接词合并，并避免重复主语。

範例: No, I don’t. I stopped writing physical letters after graduating from high school because mobile phones make communication much easier. I can simply text people online, which is faster and more convenient.

建議: 回答立场明确，但“a handwritten letters”应改为“handwritten letters”或“a handwritten letter”。“such as”后面的例子结构不完整，建议说明人们为什么保存信件，例如因为信件具有纪念意义，并避免重复使用“love”。

範例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially love letters. They may save them because the letters are personal and meaningful. For example, a couple might keep the first letter they wrote to each other as a special memory.

建議: 回答直接，并给出了不携带纸笔的原因，但“a few situation”应改为“few situations”或“few occasions”。“I have few situations to use them”不自然，建议使用“there are few occasions when I need them”，并补充手机可以替代纸笔这一具体细节。

範例: No, I don’t usually carry paper and pens when I go out because I rarely need them. There are only a few occasions when I use them, and I can usually take notes on my phone instead.

× When I was a child in primary school we had art class and teacher taught us how to use paper, make some crops and but I am not good at them.

✓ When I was a child in primary school, we had an art class, and the teacher taught us how to use paper to make some crafts, but I was not good at them.

可数名词单数“class”前通常需要冠词，因此应说“an art class”。“teacher”是特指当时的老师，前面需要使用定冠词“the”。

× When I was a child in primary school we had art class and teacher taught us how to use paper, make some crops and but I am not good at them.

✓ When I was a child in primary school, we had an art class, and the teacher taught us how to use paper to make some crafts, but I was not good at them.

“how to use paper, make...”结构不完整，应使用“use something to do something”，即“use paper to make crafts”。原句中“and”和“but”连接混乱，需要重新组织句子结构。

× When I was a child in primary school we had art class and teacher taught us how to use paper, make some crops and but I am not good at them.

✓ When I was a child in primary school, we had an art class, and the teacher taught us how to use paper to make some crafts, but I was not good at them.

句子描述的是童年时期的经历，因此“am”应改为过去式“was”，与“When I was a child”保持时态一致。

× After I graduated from my high school, I I don't write physical letters because mobile phone make communication more easier. I can text others online it helps me a lot.

✓ After I graduated from high school, I stopped writing physical letters because mobile phones make communication easier. I can text others online, and this helps me a lot.

泛指手机时应使用复数“mobile phones”。复数主语后使用“make”，不能使用“makes”。

× After I graduated from my high school, I I don't write physical letters because mobile phone make communication more easier. I can text others online it helps me a lot.

✓ After I graduated from high school, I stopped writing physical letters because mobile phones make communication easier. I can text others online, and this helps me a lot.

如果使用单数主语“a mobile phone”，动词应为“makes”；本句改为复数“mobile phones”后，动词应使用原形“make”。

× After I graduated from my high school, I I don't write physical letters because mobile phone make communication more easier. I can text others online it helps me a lot.

✓ After I graduated from high school, I stopped writing physical letters because mobile phones make communication easier. I can text others online, and this helps me a lot.

“stop”后面表示停止做某事时，应接动名词“writing”，所以应说“stopped writing”，不能说“stopped write”。

× After I graduated from my high school, I I don't write physical letters because mobile phone make communication more easier. I can text others online it helps me a lot.

✓ After I graduated from high school, I stopped writing physical letters because mobile phones make communication easier. I can text others online, and this helps me a lot.

“easier”本身已经是比较级，不能再与“more”连用。应使用“easier”，而不是“more easier”。

× After I graduated from my high school, I I don't write physical letters because mobile phone make communication more easier. I can text others online it helps me a lot.

✓ After I graduated from high school, I stopped writing physical letters because mobile phones make communication easier. I can text others online, and this helps me a lot.

原句有重复主语“I I”，并且“I can text others online it helps me a lot”是两个完整句子直接连接，形成病句。应使用逗号和连词“and”连接，或拆成两个句子。

× After I graduated from my high school, I I don't write physical letters because mobile phone make communication more easier. I can text others online it helps me a lot.

✓ After I graduated from high school, I stopped writing physical letters because mobile phones make communication easier. I can text others online, and this helps me a lot.

表示完成普通教育阶段时，固定搭配是“graduate from high school”，通常不在“high school”前使用冠词。

× Yes, some people still keep a handwritten letters such as the young people use love letters to show their love and uh. Heart.

✓ Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters. For example, young people use love letters to express their love and feelings.

“letters”是复数，前面不能使用单数冠词“a”。应删除“a”，或者改为“a handwritten letter”。本句使用复数形式“handwritten letters”更符合后文的泛指含义。

× Yes, some people still keep a handwritten letters such as the young people use love letters to show their love and uh. Heart.

✓ Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters. For example, young people use love letters to express their love and feelings.

冠词“a”只能修饰单数可数名词，不能修饰复数名词“letters”。因此应删除“a”。

× Yes, some people still keep a handwritten letters such as the young people use love letters to show their love and uh. Heart.

✓ Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters. For example, young people use love letters to express their love and feelings.

“such as”后面的结构不完整，且“Heart”单独出现，形成不完整句子。可以拆分句子，并使用“For example”引出具体例子，使结构更清晰。

× Yes, some people still keep a handwritten letters such as the young people use love letters to show their love and uh. Heart.

✓ Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters. For example, young people use love letters to express their love and feelings.

“Heart”单独作为句子时没有动词，因此不是完整句子。应将它与前面的意思合并，例如改为“express their love and feelings”。

× No, I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I don't use them very often and uh, I have a few situation to use them.

✓ No, I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I don't use them very often, and I have few situations in which I need to use them.

“a few”后面必须接可数名词复数，因此“situation”应改为“situations”。这里也可以使用“few situations”，表示“几乎没有多少情况”。

× No, I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I don't use them very often and uh, I have a few situation to use them.

✓ No, I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I don't use them very often, and I have few situations in which I need to use them.

“a few”后面需要使用复数可数名词，所以应将“situation”改为“situations”。