纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer more directly and avoid repetition and fillers such as “I did,” “like,” and “you know.” Use the uncountable noun “paper” rather than “papers,” and say “different kinds of displays” instead of “different kind of display.” Organize the answer with a clear main statement followed by one or two specific examples and their purpose.

範例: Yes, I have. When I was younger, I made paper airplanes, small buildings, and simple displays. I sometimes used them to decorate my room or my desk, although making paper airplanes was probably my favorite activity.

建議: Use the past tense consistently because the question asks about childhood: “liked,” “made,” and “competed.” Avoid awkward expressions such as “most of the children, including me” and “manufacture”; “make” or “fold” is more natural. Give a direct answer first, then explain how you used the crafts and why you enjoyed them.

範例: As a child, I liked folding paper airplanes and boats. My friends and I would make them during breaks and then have competitions to see whose airplane could fly the farthest. It was a simple but enjoyable way to spend time together.

建議: The answer is relevant and gives a reason, but it contains repetition and grammatical errors. Say “I don’t write physical letters anymore” and use “email” and “social media,” not “gmails” and “social medias.” Improve the flow by stating your answer clearly, explaining the convenience of digital communication, and mentioning a possible exception if appropriate.

範例: No, I don’t write physical letters anymore. Email and messaging apps are much faster and more convenient, especially when I need to contact my friends or family. However, I might write a letter for a special occasion, such as a birthday or an anniversary.

建議: The main idea is understandable, but several phrases are unnatural or unclear, including “most of the part,” “special occasion occasions,” and “with the couples.” Also, “people still keep this handwritten letters” should be “people still keep these handwritten letters.” Give a balanced answer: handwritten letters are less common nowadays, but people may keep them when they have sentimental value or are connected to important events.

範例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, although they are much less common nowadays. People often save letters from birthdays, anniversaries, or loved ones because they have sentimental value. For example, a person might keep an old letter from a family member as a meaningful memory.

建議: Answer the question directly at the beginning and avoid repeating “we don’t have.” Use “email” rather than “Gmails,” and say “on different occasions” instead of “in different kind of occasions.” Explain that you usually rely on your phone, but add a specific exception, such as carrying a pen for work, study, or emergencies, to make the answer more developed.

範例: No, I usually don’t carry paper and pens when I go out. I normally use my phone to take notes, send messages, or make lists, so carrying stationery feels unnecessary. However, I sometimes keep a pen in my bag in case I need to fill out a form or write down important information.

× Well, yes I did.

✓ Well, yes, I have.

The question uses the present perfect tense, Have you made...? Therefore, the short answer should use have rather than did. Use Yes, I have when answering a present-perfect question.

× Made several kinds of like crafts with papers such as umm, airplanes, small buildings and different kind of display to you know, decorate my room and decorate my place or my table.

✓ I made several kinds of crafts with paper, such as airplanes, small buildings, and different kinds of displays to decorate my room, my home, or my table.

Made is missing a subject and does not form a complete sentence by itself. Add the subject I and the auxiliary structure I made. Also, paper is normally uncountable when referring to the material, and kinds and displays must be plural because they refer to more than one type or item.

× Made several kinds of like crafts with papers such as umm, airplanes, small buildings and different kind of display to you know, decorate my room and decorate my place or my table.

✓ I made several kinds of crafts with paper, such as airplanes, small buildings, and different kinds of displays to decorate my room, my home, or my table.

Paper refers to the material and is generally uncountable in this context, so use paper rather than papers. Because there are several types and displays, use the plural forms kinds and displays.

× Well, I think as a child, most of the children, including me, like to use paper to, uh, build or to manufacture some kind of like Airpl, some paper planes and, or paper boats, for example, just to entertain ourselves and to like compete with our classmates and friends.

✓ Well, I think that, as children, most of us, including me, liked to use paper to build paper planes or paper boats, for example, just to entertain ourselves and compete with our classmates and friends.

The response describes activities during childhood, so the past-tense form liked is needed. Also, the answer refers to children in general, so as children and most of us are more grammatically consistent than as a child and most of the children.

× Well, I think as a child, most of the children, including me, like to use paper to, uh, build or to manufacture some kind of like Airpl, some paper planes and, or paper boats, for example, just to entertain ourselves and to like compete with our classmates and friends.

✓ Well, I think that, as children, most of us, including me, liked to use paper to build paper planes or paper boats, for example, just to entertain ourselves and compete with our classmates and friends.

The phrase as a child shows that the activity happened in the past. Therefore, like should be changed to liked. When describing regular past habits, use the simple past tense consistently.

× some paper planes and, or paper boats

✓ paper planes or paper boats

And and or should not be combined in this phrase. Use or because the speaker is giving two alternative examples. Remove the unnecessary conjunction and comma.

× So I'm really use, uh, physical letters to uh, you know, communicate with my friends or my family.

✓ So I rarely use physical letters to communicate with my friends or family.

I'm use is grammatically incorrect because am must be followed by a present participle, such as using. However, the intended meaning is probably that the speaker does not often use physical letters. The simple present I rarely use correctly describes a current habit.

× Well, unfortunately I don't do this anymore because, uh, nowadays most of the people use gmails or social medias to communicate with each other.

✓ Well, unfortunately, I don't do this anymore because nowadays most people use email or social media to communicate with each other.

Email and social media are generally used as uncountable nouns when referring to communication methods, so use email and social media rather than gmails and social medias. Most people is also the more natural general expression.

× Oh well, you know they will use it in special occasion occasions such as birthday or their anniversary with their with their like cou with the couples.

✓ Well, you know, they use them on special occasions, such as birthdays or anniversaries with their partners.

The nouns must agree with the general meaning: occasions, birthdays, and anniversaries should be plural. Also, letters should be referred to with them rather than it, and partners is the appropriate plural noun in this context.

× Oh well, you know they will use it in special occasion occasions such as birthday or their anniversary with their with their like cou with the couples.

✓ Well, you know, they use them on special occasions, such as birthdays or anniversaries with their partners.

Use the preposition on with occasions: on special occasions. In is not the natural preposition in this expression. Use on when referring to events or particular occasions.

× So yes, I do feel like people still keep this handwritten letters today.

✓ So yes, I do feel that people still keep these handwritten letters today.

These is the plural demonstrative determiner that agrees with the plural noun letters. This is singular and cannot modify letters. Use these with plural nouns and this with singular nouns.

× So yes, I do feel like people still keep this handwritten letters today.

✓ So yes, I do feel that people still keep these handwritten letters today.

Letters is plural, so the sentence should use the plural demonstrative these rather than the singular form this. Matching singular and plural forms improves grammatical agreement.

× We don't have we, we don't have the opportunity to use paper and pen in different kind of occasions.

✓ We do not have many opportunities to use paper and pens on different kinds of occasions.

Pens and kinds should be plural because the sentence refers to more than one item and more than one type of occasion. The phrase many opportunities is also appropriate because the speaker is discussing occasions in general.

× We don't have we, we don't have the opportunity to use paper and pen in different kind of occasions.

✓ We do not have many opportunities to use paper and pens on different kinds of occasions.

The natural preposition used with occasions is on, as in on different occasions. Use on rather than in when referring to events or occasions.

× We don't have we, we don't have the opportunity to use paper and pen in different kind of occasions.

✓ We do not have many opportunities to use paper and pens on different kinds of occasions.

The phrase We don't have we is an incomplete repetition that disrupts the sentence structure. Remove the repeated words and form one clear clause beginning with We do not have.