纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 「made crafted airplanes」は不自然なので、「made paper airplanes」または「crafted paper airplanes」と言いましょう。また、「my mother bought to eat to me」は質問への回答と関係が不明確です。理由を一つ述べた後、「It was enjoyable because...」のように具体的な感想を加え、同じ語の繰り返しや文法上の誤りを避けてください。

範例: Yes, I made paper airplanes when I was a child. I enjoyed making them because I liked creating things with my own hands. I was really proud when one of them flew well.

建議: 「paper craft」はこの文脈では「paper crafts」または「things out of paper」が自然です。「because I unlike I love mechanics」は意味が不明確なので、「because I was interested in how things worked」のように言い換えましょう。また、自分で作ったことと、母親が買ってくれたことが矛盾しているため、内容を整理して直接答えてください。

範例: As a child, I liked making paper airplanes and simple origami animals. I was interested in how things worked, so I enjoyed folding paper into different shapes. Paper airplanes were my favorite because I could test how far they would fly.

建議: 「light」はこの文脈では「write」の誤りだと思われます。「write physical letters」を繰り返さず、「Writing by hand gives me more time to think」のように表現を変えてください。手紙を書く理由を、メールとの比較や感情を込めやすい点など、明確で自然な文法で説明しましょう。

範例: Yes, I occasionally write physical letters, especially to close friends. Writing by hand gives me more time to think carefully about my feelings. It also feels more personal than sending a quick text message.

建議: 最初の「It depends on person to person」は「It depends on the person」または「It varies from person to person」と言いましょう。「light visculators」「tourist thought」「featuring letters」は意味が伝わらないため、質問に合う「handwritten letters」「personal feelings」「keep them as memories」などの語彙を使ってください。まず「Yes, many people do, although...」のように直接答え、その理由や具体例を一つ加えると効果的です。

範例: Yes, I think many people still keep handwritten letters, especially letters from family members. They take time to write, so they often contain more personal feelings than text messages. People may keep them as meaningful memories.

建議: 「bring memo」は「carry a notepad」または「bring some paper」と表現すると自然です。「lighting by myself」は「writing by hand」の誤りだと思われます。紙とペンを持ち歩く理由を、すぐにメモできることやスマートフォンとの使い分けとして、接続語を使って明確に説明してください。

範例: Yes, I usually carry a small notepad and a pen with me. I also use my smartphone for notes, but writing by hand is sometimes quicker and more convenient. For example, I can jot down an idea immediately when I am traveling.

× Yes, when I was a child I made crafted airplanes because I loved making something by myself and my mother bought to eat to me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I made paper airplanes because I loved making things by myself, and my mother bought me something to eat.

The original sentence contains an incorrect verb and object structure. Use made + noun, and use bought me something to eat instead of bought to eat to me. Add a comma after the introductory time clause and before the second independent clause.

× I loved to make paper craft when I was a child.

✓ I loved making paper crafts when I was a child.

Paper crafts refers to crafts in general, so the plural noun crafts is more appropriate. Also, after loved, the -ing form making is natural when describing a regular past activity.

× For example, I made paper airplane because I unlike I love mechanics, my mother always bought them to me.

✓ For example, I made a paper airplane because I liked mechanics, and my mother always bought them for me.

A singular countable noun such as paper airplane needs an article, so use a paper airplane. The phrase unlike I love mechanics is incorrectly formed; because I liked mechanics correctly expresses the reason. Use for me, not to me, after bought when describing the person who receives something.

× For example, I made paper airplane because I unlike I love mechanics, my mother always bought them to me.

✓ For example, I made a paper airplane because I liked mechanics, and my mother always bought them for me.

Unlike is a preposition or conjunction used to show contrast, but it cannot be used before I love mechanics to give a reason. Because is the correct conjunction for introducing a reason.

× For example, I made paper airplane because I unlike I love mechanics, my mother always bought them to me.

✓ For example, I made a paper airplane because I liked mechanics, and my mother always bought them for me.

When buy is followed by the person who receives something, use buy + person + object or buy + object + for + person. Therefore, bought them for me is correct, whereas bought them to me is incorrect in this context.

× It depends on person to person.

✓ It depends from person to person.

The fixed expression is depend from person to person, meaning that the answer varies among individuals. The preposition on is not used in this expression.

× But basically I love light visculators because it can take time so I can think about the contents deeply.

✓ But basically, I love writing because it can take time, so I can think deeply about the contents.

The pronoun it should refer clearly to the activity of writing. The corrected sentence makes the antecedent clear and places deeply naturally before the phrase it modifies, think.

× I think we can express our tourist thought by featuring letters.

✓ I think we can express our thoughts through handwritten letters.

When referring to ideas or feelings in general, use the plural noun thoughts. The singular form thought is not appropriate here. Also, handwritten letters is the natural plural expression for letters written by hand.

× Yes, I always bring memo to write something.

✓ Yes, I always bring a memo pad to write something down.

Memo is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article such as a. Memo pad is the more appropriate noun for something used for writing notes.

× So I also use smartphone to memo.

✓ I also use my smartphone to take notes.

Smartphone is a singular countable noun and needs a determiner, such as my. Take notes is the standard verb phrase; memo is not normally used as a verb in this sentence.