纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and use the correct vocabulary: “paper crafts” or “paper clips,” not “claps” or “club.” Use the past tense consistently because you are describing a past experience. Also, explain what you made and how you felt about it in two or three clear sentences. Avoid unclear phrases such as “I make about the postcard.”

範例: Yes, I have. When I was in primary school, my teacher asked us to make paper crafts, such as postcards and paper flowers. I really enjoyed it because it allowed me to be creative.

建議: Use “as a child” or “when I was young,” not “when I was a shy.” Since the question asks about the past, use “loved” and “drawing.” Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific reason or example. Use a linking word such as “because” or “also” to connect your ideas.

範例: When I was a child, I loved drawing on paper, especially pictures of animals and places I wanted to visit. It was fun, and it also helped me develop my imagination.

建議: Give a clear answer first and use the correct terms “physical letters,” “emails,” and “electronic messages,” rather than “electronic fire.” Explain that you rarely write letters because digital communication is faster and more convenient. Avoid repeating “physical letter” and make sure the subject and verb agree.

範例: No, I hardly ever write physical letters nowadays. I usually send emails or instant messages because they are faster and more convenient, especially for work. I only write a letter on special occasions, such as birthdays.

建議: Avoid saying that people do not keep handwritten letters at all, because some people still keep them for sentimental reasons. Use “handwritten letters,” “emails,” and “digital messages” correctly. Improve the grammar in phrases such as “using electronic letters is cheaper than using paper.” Finish your final idea clearly instead of leaving it incomplete.

範例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially letters from family members or close friends. However, most people now prefer emails and digital messages because they are cheaper, faster, and easier to edit. Handwritten letters are usually kept because they have sentimental value.

建議: Your answer is relevant and includes a clear reason, but use a more natural expression such as “take notes” instead of “take a note.” Add a linking word, such as “because,” and organize the sentence into two or three shorter sentences. You could also mention that a tablet replaces both paper and a pen.

範例: No, I usually carry a tablet instead of paper and pens. It is more convenient because I can take notes, store them easily, and share them with other people immediately. I only carry a pen when I need to sign a document.

× Yes, I have made claps with paper when I was shy.

✓ Yes, I made crafts with paper when I was shy.

The plural noun should be crafts, not claps. Also, the sentence refers to a finished activity at a specific time in the past, so the past tense made is more appropriate than the present perfect have made.

× Yes, I have made claps with paper when I was shy.

✓ Yes, I made crafts with paper when I was shy.

When a finished action is connected to a specific past time, such as when I was shy, use the simple past tense: made.

× This is because my teacher ordered me to make club with paper at that time.

✓ This is because my teacher ordered me to make a craft with paper at that time.

A singular countable noun needs an article. Use a before craft: make a craft.

× I make about the postcard so I think it's really nice for me.

✓ I made a postcard, so I think it is really nice.

The activity happened in the past, so use made instead of make. The phrase make about the postcard is not grammatically complete; made a postcard is the correct verb and object structure.

× I make about the postcard so I think it's really nice for me.

✓ I made a postcard, so I think it is really nice.

Postcard is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a postcard when mentioning it for the first time.

× I make about the postcard so I think it's really nice for me.

✓ I made a postcard, so I think it is really nice.

The original sentence contains the incomplete structure make about the postcard. Use the complete structure subject + verb + object: I made a postcard.

× When I was a shy I love draw on paper this is because it's very fun and it helps me to have more imagination.

✓ When I was shy, I loved drawing on paper because it was very fun and helped me use my imagination more.

Shy is an adjective, not a countable noun, so do not use a before it. Also, the past-time expression when I was shy requires past-tense verbs such as loved and was.

× When I was a shy I love draw on paper this is because it's very fun and it helps me to have more imagination.

✓ When I was shy, I loved drawing on paper because it was very fun and helped me use my imagination more.

The answer describes a childhood habit, so use the past tense loved and was. The past tense keeps the sentence consistent with when I was shy.

× When I was a shy I love draw on paper this is because it's very fun and it helps me to have more imagination.

✓ When I was shy, I loved drawing on paper because it was very fun and helped me use my imagination more.

After love, use a gerund or -ing form when describing an activity: loved drawing, not love draw.

× For now I hardly ever write physical letter.

✓ For now, I hardly ever write physical letters.

The phrase refers to letters in general, so the plural form letters is more appropriate. The adverbial phrase For now should also be separated with a comma.

× For now I hardly ever write physical letter.

✓ For now, I hardly ever write physical letters.

A singular countable noun would need an article, such as a physical letter. In this context, the plural form physical letters is more natural because the answer discusses letters in general.

× So I mostly write electronic fire and letters instead of physical letter is very convenient

✓ So I mostly write electronic letters instead of physical letters because this is more convenient.

The plural nouns letters need to be used when speaking generally. The phrase instead of physical letter also needs the plural form physical letters.

× So I mostly write electronic fire and letters instead of physical letter is very convenient

✓ So I mostly write electronic letters instead of physical letters because this is more convenient.

The original sentence incorrectly joins the subject, verb, and phrase is very convenient. Use because to connect the reason to the main sentence: I write electronic letters because this is more convenient.

× No, nowadays people don't give you handwriting letter today.

✓ No, nowadays people do not send handwritten letters.

When speaking about letters in general, use the plural form letters. The adjective handwritten correctly describes letters.

× No, nowadays people don't give you handwriting letter today.

✓ No, nowadays people do not send handwritten letters.

Handwriting is a noun, but handwritten is the adjective needed to describe letters. Use handwritten letters, not handwriting letter.

× This is because use electronic letter is very convenient and cheaper than use paper.

✓ This is because using electronic letters is more convenient and cheaper than using paper.

The sentence needs a subject before is. Gerund phrases can function as subjects, so use Using electronic letters and using paper.

× This is because use electronic letter is very convenient and cheaper than use paper.

✓ This is because using electronic letters is more convenient and cheaper than using paper.

After than, use the parallel gerund form using paper. Using electronic letters is also needed as the subject of the sentence.

× This is because when they would like to revise some things

✓ This is because they can easily revise some things when they use electronic letters.

The original sentence is incomplete because it begins with when but does not provide a complete main clause. Add a main clause and place the when-clause after it.

× This is because when they would like to revise some things

✓ This is because they can easily revise some things when they use electronic letters.

Would like to expresses a hypothetical or polite desire, but this sentence describes a general ability. Use can to express what people are able to do.

× This is because when they would like to revise some things

✓ This is because they can easily revise some things when they use electronic letters.

For a general fact or routine, use the present tense use after when. The clause when they use electronic letters describes a general situation.

× No, actually I carry tablets when I go out this is because it's very convenient when I take a note I can share with other people immediately

✓ No, actually, I carry a tablet when I go out because it is very convenient. When I take notes, I can share them with other people immediately.

Use a tablet if referring to one device. Use the plural form notes for the general activity of writing notes.

× No, actually I carry tablets when I go out this is because it's very convenient when I take a note I can share with other people immediately

✓ No, actually, I carry a tablet when I go out because it is very convenient. When I take notes, I can share them with other people immediately.

A singular countable noun needs an article, so use a tablet. The expression take notes is more natural when referring to note-taking in general.

× No, actually I carry tablets when I go out this is because it's very convenient when I take a note I can share with other people immediately

✓ No, actually, I carry a tablet when I go out because it is very convenient. When I take notes, I can share them with other people immediately.

The pronoun them refers back to the plural noun notes. This makes the reference clear and avoids leaving the object of share unspecified.

× No, actually I carry tablets when I go out this is because it's very convenient when I take a note I can share with other people immediately

✓ No, actually, I carry a tablet when I go out because it is very convenient. When I take notes, I can share them with other people immediately.

The original answer joins several independent clauses without suitable connectors or punctuation. Separate the ideas into two sentences and use because and when to show their relationships.