纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples and a brief reason. Reduce fillers (uh, also) and correct grammar (e.g., 'when I am stressed or tired'). Use linking words like 'so' or 'because' to connect ideas.

範例: Yes. I enjoy making paper crafts, especially simple toys and origami animals. I often make them when I am stressed or tired because the activity helps me relax and keeps my hands busy.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, then one specific example and a short supporting detail. Fix tense and repetition (e.g., 'I used to make'). Use linking words like 'and' or 'also' appropriately.

範例: As a child I used to make simple toys and paper jewelry with my friends. For example, we folded paper bracelets and made small dolls, which we would trade at school.

建議: Answer directly and clearly. If you rarely write letters, say so and give a specific exception. Avoid long unclear clauses and fillers. Use correct conditional phrasing (e.g., 'If someone gave me flowers, I would appreciate a handwritten note').

範例: No, I rarely write physical letters these days. However, if someone gave me flowers, I would really appreciate a short handwritten note because it feels more personal than a message.

建議: Start with a clear opinion (yes/no/maybe), then explain with one or two specific reasons. Avoid word repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to make logic clear.

範例: People sometimes keep handwritten letters, but it is less common now because most communication is digital. Still, handwritten letters are considered special and meaningful, so many people keep them as souvenirs.

建議: Give a direct answer, then a concise reason and one specific exception if needed. Remove repetitions and incorrect words (e.g., 'caravan'). Use linking words like 'but' or 'because' correctly.

範例: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens because I prefer to travel light and avoid bags. However, I sometimes bring a small notebook when I expect to record ideas or special moments.

× Uh yes, I love this activity and and when I stressed anxiety also tired and I decided to make a craft also other like toys with paper because paper I think paper is useful for making something also get rid of stress.

✓ Uh yes, I love this activity. When I feel stressed or tired, I decide to make crafts or simple toys from paper because paper is useful for making things and helps me relieve stress.

The original sentence has run-on structure, repeated words, incorrect verb forms, and unclear connectors. It requires breaking into shorter sentences, using correct verbs and conjunctions, and proper word order. Suggestion: separate ideas into sentences, use present simple for habitual statements ('I love', 'I decide') and use 'feel stressed or tired', 'relieve stress'.

× In my childhood I used to I get used to make other jewelries and the simple toys with my friends.

✓ In my childhood I used to make jewelry and simple toys with my friends.

Errors include redundant phrases and incorrect noun form. 'Used to' already indicates past habit; 'get used to' is unnecessary. 'Jewelries' is incorrect plural form; the correct uncountable noun is 'jewelry'. Suggestion: use 'used to' + base verb and use 'jewelry' or 'pieces of jewelry'.

× Also my my one friend interest in was interested in making jewelries also crafts.

✓ Also, one of my friends was interested in making jewelry and crafts.

The original repeats words and misorders pronoun phrases. 'My one friend interest in was interested' is ungrammatical. Use 'one of my friends' to indicate a single friend and 'was interested in' + gerund. Use 'jewelry' (uncountable). Suggestion: simplify to 'one of my friends was interested in making...'.

× Uh, no, actually no nowadays because, but I love this, uh, situation also when I, uh, got flowers from when I get flowers from someone and who I want, who is, uh, show who should write the letter for me and the physical letter with his hand.

✓ Uh, no, not nowadays. But I love this idea when I receive flowers from someone; I would like that person to write a physical handwritten letter for me.

Tense and sentence structure are mixed and confusing. Use present simple for general habits ('not nowadays') and present/past simple consistently ('receive' instead of 'got' in this general context). 'Physical letter with his hand' is unnatural; use 'physical handwritten letter'. Suggestion: restructure into clear clauses and use correct verbs.

× Today hand handwriting letters is comfortable also unusual scene and then other online version of the computer version this this this is admirable also special for someone if someone write one hand by themselves.

✓ Today, handwritten letters are uncommon but meaningful. Compared with online messages, a handwritten letter is special and admirable if someone writes it by hand.

The original has incorrect word order, repetition, and wrong verb forms ('hand handwriting letters', 'if someone write'). Use plural agreement 'letters are' and 'writes' for third person singular. Clarify contrast between handwritten and online messages. Suggestion: use 'handwritten' adjective, 'uncommon', and correct verb agreement.

× No, because I don't like carry paper pens or something.

✓ No, because I don't like carrying paper, pens, or similar things.

Missing gerund after 'like' when expressing preference for actions: 'like carrying'. Also need commas and plural consistency. Suggestion: use 'carrying' and list items with commas.

× I I don't like caravan not only paper pen, I don't like to carry bags, small bags.

✓ I don't like to carry anything, not just paper or pens; I also don't like carrying small bags.

'Caravan' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'carry'. Pronoun and article usage is confused. Use 'carry anything' and parallel structure 'not just X; I also don't like...'. Suggestion: use correct verb 'carry' and maintain parallelism.

× But it it was it is useful for noting and writing special moments.

✓ But it is useful for noting down and recording special moments.

Tense mixed ('was it is') and incorrect verb 'noting' without particle; 'noting down' or 'taking notes' is more natural. Use present tense 'is' for general truth. Suggestion: choose one tense and use natural collocations like 'noting down' or 'recording'.