纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and use correct tense and vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (past tense), and finish the idea. Use one or two supporting details connected by linking words.

範例: Yes. When I was young I often made paper aeroplanes by folding and flipping the paper. I enjoyed it because it was simple and fun, and it helped me learn basic folding techniques and patience.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence then specific supporting details. Fix grammar errors and odd phrases (e.g. 'bring my pants out' is unclear). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' correctly.

範例: I enjoyed drawing on paper as a child because I could create pictures with just pencils and crayons. For example, I would draw animals and scenes, and sometimes I took my sketchbook outside when my parents took me to the park.

建議: Complete your sentences and use natural phrases (e.g. 'write letters by hand'). Add a brief reason and an example, using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

範例: Yes, I still write letters by hand sometimes because I find them a more personal and heartfelt way to express my feelings. For example, I wrote a birthday letter to a close friend last month and she said it meant a lot to her.

建議: Good content — tighten grammar and use commas to list examples. Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons with linking words.

範例: Yes, I think many people still keep handwritten letters and cards. For instance, Christmas and birthday cards are often treasured because they feel more personal and meaningful than electronic messages.

建議: Clarify vocabulary (pants → pens, plan → planner) and use consistent tense. Start with a direct answer, then explain briefly with an example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

範例: I rarely carry paper and pens because I usually take notes on my smartphone. However, when I have meetings or fieldwork, I bring a small planner and a pen so I can quickly jot down important points from clients.

× Yes, I when I was young I usually make aerobin with paper by flipping skill.

✓ Yes, when I was young I usually made a paper aeroplane using a folding technique.

The sentence uses present simple 'make' but refers to a habitual action in the past; use past tense 'made'. 'Aerobin' is not standard; 'paper aeroplane' or 'paper airplane' is correct. 'Flipping skill' is awkward; 'folding technique' is a clearer noun phrase.

× I enjoyed the process and very much because it's simple but amusing.

✓ I enjoyed the process very much because it was simple but amusing.

Adverb placement: 'very much' should follow the verb 'enjoyed'. Tense consistency: 'it's' (present) should be 'it was' to match past context.

× It also encouraged me to have

✓ It also encouraged me to be creative.

Sentence is incomplete and lacks an object/complement. Provide a clear result 'to be creative' to complete the meaning.

× I loved drawing on papers when I was a child because without very complicated tools I can also create something that I want and I also can bring my pants out when my parents bring me outside.

✓ I loved drawing on paper when I was a child because without very complicated tools I could create what I wanted, and I could also take my drawings with me when my parents took me outside.

Use uncountable 'paper' not 'papers'. Tense consistency: change 'can' to past 'could' and 'want' to 'wanted'. 'Bring my pants out' is incorrect; likely meant 'take my drawings with me'. 'Bring me outside' should be past 'took me outside'.

× Yes, I sometimes still write letters by myself to my friends to spread the message that I want to say because I consider it a heartwarming way to express my emotion and I feel my friend also enjoy receiving

✓ Yes, I still sometimes write letters to my friends to convey what I want to say because I consider it a heartwarming way to express my emotions, and I feel my friends also enjoy receiving them.

Adverb placement: 'still sometimes' more natural as 'still sometimes' or 'sometimes still' but 'still sometimes' kept. 'By myself' is unnecessary. Use 'convey' instead of 'spread the message'. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. Subject-verb agreement: 'friend' -> 'friends' and 'enjoy' needs object 'them'. Ended sentence incomplete; add 'them'.

× Yes, I think people also value handwriting and like Christmas cards birthday cards they receive from friends because it's more meaningful to receive something personally created, rather than something typed by computer.

✓ Yes, I think people still value handwriting and like the Christmas cards and birthday cards they receive from friends because it's more meaningful to receive something personally created rather than something typed by a computer.

Add articles 'the' before 'Christmas cards' and 'birthday cards'. Add conjunction 'and' between card types. Use 'still' for emphasis. 'Typed by computer' needs article 'a'. Remove unnecessary comma before 'rather'.

× I seldom carry pants and paper when I go out because I usually make notes with my smart phone, but when I need to work I always bring a plan because it allowed me to mark down something in a quicker way that mentioned by my clients.

✓ I seldom carry pens and paper when I go out because I usually take notes with my smartphone, but when I need to work I always bring a planner because it allows me to jot things down more quickly as requested by my clients.

'Pants' is incorrect; should be 'pens'. 'Make notes' -> 'take notes'. 'Smart phone' -> 'smartphone'. 'Plan' unclear; 'planner' fits. Tense consistency: 'allowed' -> present 'allows' to match habitual action. 'Mark down something in a quicker way that mentioned by my clients' is ungrammatical; replace with 'jot things down more quickly as requested by my clients'.