纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and direct: start with a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting reasons with linking words. Avoid fillers (e.g. "I mean like") and repetition. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. "prefer digital devices").

範例: Not really. I usually prefer using my iPad rather than paper because it is more convenient and always accessible. For example, I can take notes and store them digitally, so I rarely bother with paper.

建議: Give a clear opening sentence and include specific details. Correct grammar (past tense), avoid hesitations like "maybe". Use linking words to add an example or result (e.g. "For example" or "As a result").

範例: As a child I loved drawing, painting and sketching. For example, I often used colored pencils at school and even won an art award, which encouraged me to keep practicing.

建議: State your current habit clearly, then give one or two reasons with correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g. "typing in states"). Use linking words such as "because" or "although" to connect ideas.

範例: Not anymore. I usually send messages or emails because they are faster and easier. Although I learned how to write letters at school, I rarely use that skill today.

建議: Make your viewpoint clear first (yes/no/partly), then support it with specific examples. Use correct terms like "paper documents" and "electronic documents" and avoid irrelevant personal job details unless it supports the point. Use linking words like "for example" and "however".

範例: Partly. While some people still keep handwritten letters for sentimental reasons, most people prefer electronic documents or email at work because they are faster and easier to store. For example, in my company we mainly use email for official communication.

建議: Start with a concise topic sentence (e.g. "It depends on where I'm going."), then give two clear contrasting examples using linking words like "for example" or "but". Improve grammar and word choice ("take a notebook and a pen" not "keep the notes and the pencil").

範例: It depends on where I'm going. For work or meetings I usually take a notebook and a pen because I need to take notes, but when I go shopping I don't bring them since they are unnecessary.

× Maybe I love to drawing, painting and sketching.

✓ Maybe I loved drawing, painting and sketching.

The structure 'love to drawing' is incorrect because after 'love' you should use the base verb (infinitive) 'to draw' or the gerund 'drawing' without 'to'. Also the question asked about childhood, so past tense 'loved' is appropriate. Use either 'loved drawing, painting and sketching' or 'loved to draw, paint and sketch'.

× When I was a child I used to be an artist in the school so I really love to painting by the col collar pencil and sketching and I got an award as well.

✓ When I was a child I used to be an artist at school, so I really loved painting with colored pencils and sketching, and I got an award as well.

Multiple issues: 'in the school' should be 'at school' (preposition). 'I used to be an artist' is OK but 'I really love to painting' mixes present 'love' with past context and wrong verb form; use past 'loved' and either 'to paint' or gerund 'painting' without 'to'. 'col collar pencil' likely means 'colored pencils'—use plural. Commas separate clauses. Overall tense should be past because describing childhood.

× I used to, but nowadays I'm not.

✓ I used to, but nowadays I don't.

The phrase 'I'm not' is incomplete here; the correct negation for habitual action is 'I don't' (do not) followed by the verb if stated, or simply 'I don't' meaning 'I don't anymore'. 'Used to' indicates past habit; contrast with present 'I don't'.

× Whenever I have to send the letters or the mail to other people, I usually prefer typing in states because it's faster and more convenient.

✓ Whenever I have to send letters or mail to other people, I usually prefer typing instead because it's faster and more convenient.

Remove unnecessary articles: 'the letters or the mail' should be 'letters or mail'. 'Typing in states' is incorrect—likely intended 'typing instead'. 'Instead' expresses preference for typing rather than handwriting.

× However, there is just an opportunity that I have to write like when I was in the school they teach me how to write the letter.

✓ However, sometimes I have an opportunity to write; for example, when I was in school they taught me how to write a letter.

The original sentence has unclear structure and tense inconsistencies. Use 'sometimes I have an opportunity' and past tense 'they taught me' for school. Use 'a letter' not 'the letter' when speaking generally. Break into two clauses for clarity.

× Now, definitely, I experience work in the big company located in Bangkok, Thailand.

✓ Now, definitely, I work at a big company located in Bangkok, Thailand.

'Experience work in' is unnatural; use 'work at' or 'work for'. Use 'a big company' rather than 'the big company' unless a specific company was already mentioned. Keep present simple for current job.

× I know there are many people use the document instead of electric document.

✓ I know there are many people who use paper documents instead of electronic documents.

Add relative pronoun 'who' after 'people'. 'Use the document' is vague—use 'use paper documents'. 'Electric document' is incorrect; use 'electronic documents'. Pluralize consistently.

× Whenever they have to send the email, they usually use the Google email instead.

✓ Whenever they have to send an email, they usually use Gmail instead.

Use 'an email' for a general message. 'The Google email' is awkward; 'Gmail' is the correct service name. 'Instead' is fine to show preference.

× If I go to the company and meeting definitely I usually keep the notes and the pencil with me because I need to note.

✓ If I go to the company for a meeting, I usually keep a notebook and a pencil with me because I need to take notes.

'Go to the company and meeting' should be 'go to the company for a meeting' or 'go to a meeting'. Use 'a notebook' rather than 'the notes'. 'Keep the pencil' should be 'a pencil'. 'I need to note' is incorrect; use 'I need to take notes'.

× However, if I talk about I go to the shopping mall or something like that? I don't actually because I don't think it's important.

✓ However, if I go to the shopping mall or somewhere similar, I don't, because I don't think it's important.

The original mixes question form and statement. Remove 'talk about' and restructure: 'if I go to the shopping mall or somewhere similar' is clear. Use 'I don't' to mean 'I don't bring them'. Provide reason clause 'because I don't think it's important'.

× I know there are many people use the document instead of electric document.

✓ I know there are many people who use paper documents instead of electronic documents.

After 'people' the clause requires 'who use' (present simple with plural subject). Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'people use' or 'people who use'. Also corrected noun forms as previously noted.