纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary (e.g., 'fold' or 'make' instead of 'food'), and avoid repetition. Use one or two supporting details with a linking word to make it coherent. Also correct grammar (tense and prepositions) and possessive forms.

範例: Yes. When I was a child I learned to make paper animals like cats and birds from my teacher. Because the process required following several precise steps, I found it both challenging and creative, and I still fold simple figures for my friends' children occasionally.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and explain with specific details in correct grammar. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') to connect reasons and results. Correct noun-verb agreement and tense, and avoid unrelated information. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: As a child I loved making paper aeroplanes with my sister because we would compete to see whose plane flew the farthest. If my plane flew far, we would celebrate, especially during winter when we spent more time playing indoors.

建議: Be concise and avoid hesitations. Use a clear topic sentence, correct pronouns and phrasing (e.g., 'I write cards to my husband'), and provide one or two precise reasons using linking words. Remove repeated words and filler sounds.

範例: Yes, I still write physical cards to my husband, especially on our anniversary and his birthday, because a handwritten card feels more personal and thoughtful. He keeps them as mementos, which makes the gesture meaningful.

建議: Organize your answer: state your opinion, then give a reason and a personal contrast using linking words like 'however' or 'but'. Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'mementos', 'keep handwritten letters'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'take photos and then shoot'—say 'take photos instead'.

範例: I believe some people still keep handwritten letters because they are meaningful reminders of memories. However, I usually take photos of letters or cards instead, so I can preserve them digitally.

建議: Good basic response—focus on clarity and reduce hesitations. Start with a direct topic sentence, then use linking words to add reasons and examples. Correct small repetition and phrasing ('fill out a form', 'sign documents'), and keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

範例: Yes, I always carry a pen and a small notepad in my bag in case I need to fill out a form or sign documents at places like the bank or post office. I also jot down important phone numbers or addresses when I need to remember them quickly.

× Yes, when I was a kid my teacher showed us how to food animals like cats and birds and I find it interesting and creative because you had to remember each step carefully.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid my teacher showed us how to fold animals like cats and birds, and I found it interesting and creative because we had to remember each step carefully.

The main error is a wrong verb choice: 'food' should be 'fold' (spelling/word choice). Also tense consistency: the student is describing a past habit so 'find' should be 'found' and 'you had to' is better as 'we had to' to match the subject; use of commas improves clarity. Suggestion: use past tense consistently when describing past events and choose the correct verb 'fold' for paper figures.

× And sometimes I still fold some figures to my friend's children.

✓ And sometimes I still fold some figures for my friends' children.

The preposition 'to' is inappropriate here; use 'for' to indicate doing something on behalf of or as a gift. Also possessive placement: if referring to children of multiple friends, use 'friends''; if a single friend, use 'my friend's children'. Suggestion: choose 'for' to indicate purpose/recipient and correct possessive form.

× I remember when I was younger I liked doing paper airplane with my sister because we completed it and if the airplane fly a far away that was winter and I like the game.

✓ I remember when I was younger I liked making paper airplanes with my sister because we completed them, and when the airplane flew far away in winter, I enjoyed the game.

Multiple issues: 'doing paper airplane' should be 'making paper airplanes' (use gerund with correct noun and plural). 'We completed it' is awkward; 'we completed them' refers to airplanes. Tense and subject-verb agreement: 'if the airplane fly a far away' should be 'when the airplane flew far away'. Maintain past tense throughout: 'I like the game' -> 'I enjoyed the game'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for repeated activities, maintain past tense and correct verb forms.

× Yes I do, I always write him a card for my husband especially on our anniversary or his birthday because I think uh handwritten card can show umm can show the thoughtful and and he can keep as a memento.

✓ Yes I do. I always write my husband a card, especially on our anniversary or his birthday, because I think a handwritten card can show thoughtfulness and he can keep it as a memento.

Pronoun and article errors: 'write him a card for my husband' is redundant and uses indirect object awkwardly; use 'write my husband a card' or 'write a card for my husband'. 'the thoughtful' is incorrect; use the noun 'thoughtfulness'. Missing object pronoun: 'he can keep as a memento' needs 'it'. Also add the article 'a' before 'handwritten card'. Suggestion: simplify structure, use correct object pronouns and nouns, and include necessary articles.

× Yes, I do believe some people still keep having written letters because uh, because they are have memories and they need to keep them as a momento.

✓ Yes, I do believe some people still keep written letters because they have memories attached to them and need to keep them as mementos.

Phrase 'keep having written letters' is ungrammatical; use 'keep written letters' or 'keep letters'. 'They are have memories' mixes auxiliary verbs; correct is 'they have memories attached to them'. Spelling: 'momento' should be 'memento'; plural agreement: 'mementos' if referring to multiple letters. Suggestion: use simple verb constructions and correct verb forms, and watch spelling.

× But I personally uh, take photos and then shoot.

✓ But I personally take photos to preserve them.

'Take photos and then shoot' is redundant and unclear; 'shoot' is a synonym for 'take photos' and makes the sentence repetitive. Also tense and purpose unclear. Suggestion: express purpose clearly (e.g., 'take photos to preserve them') and avoid redundant verbs.

× Yes, I always carry a pen and a notepad in my bag in case I need to fill a a form or document any, umm or sign in documents when I'm out, for example uh, bank or the post office.

✓ Yes, I always carry a pen and a notepad in my bag in case I need to fill out a form or sign documents when I'm out, for example at the bank or the post office.

Several article and preposition issues: double 'a a' should be single 'a'. 'Fill a form' is incorrect in many varieties of English; use 'fill out a form'. 'Document any' is unclear and unnecessary; 'sign documents' is correct. Missing preposition: 'for example bank' needs 'at the bank'. Suggestion: use correct phrasal verbs ('fill out'), remove redundancies, and include appropriate prepositions.

× I also jot down some important numbers when I need to go back immediately.

✓ I also jot down important numbers so I can refer to them later.

'When I need to go back immediately' is odd and unclear in context; likely intended meaning is to refer back later. Use 'so I can refer to them later' which clarifies purpose. Suggestion: ensure prepositional phrases convey the intended meaning; replace vague time phrase with clear purpose phrase.