纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 句子不流利且有重复，时态和词序错误较多。回答应直接回应问题并用一至两句补充细节，使用正确时态和更自然表达。例如说明什么时候做、做什么手工、现在是否还做。注意避免重复词语并减少语法错误。

範例: Yes, I used to make paper crafts before I entered university. Now I usually use an iPad and an app called GoodNotes to sketch and design my paper models digitally.

建議: 回答内容较明确但表达混乱、句子结构不完整。应先用主题句说明喜欢做什么，然后用一两句具体举例或描述频率、对象等，并使用连接词使句子流畅。注意名词复数和动词形式。

範例: I liked making paper toys, especially paper airplanes, when I was a child. I often made them with my friends and sometimes we would decorate them with colorful drawings before flying them outside.

建議: 回答有内容但用词不当（"querters"不清楚），表达可更准确。建议先直接回答然后给出具体场景和原因，使用连词连接信息并用更恰当的词汇（e.g., 'handwritten notes', 'lab notebook'）。

範例: Yes. At university some courses require handwritten assignments, and in my lab I usually record my experimental data in a lab notebook to keep a clear paper record.

建議: 想法可以，但逻辑和词汇使用不准确（如'relater'或重复语）。应直接表达观点并给出具体原因或例子，使用连接词如 'because' 或 'however' 来组织句子。避免重复和拼写错误。

範例: Yes, I think handwritten letters are still important because not everyone has access to electronic devices, and some people value the personal touch and sentiment of a handwritten note.

建議: 回答太简短且结尾重复，缺乏具体理由。应先回答然后给出具体原因或例子，使用连词扩展句子并用更自然的表达说明不携带的原因（e.g., 'not convenient', 'I use my phone instead'）。

範例: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens because it's not convenient; I prefer to take notes on my phone or tablet when I'm out.

× I usually did in before I enter in the I entered the university.

✓ I usually did that before I entered the university.

句子中时间参照是过去（在上大学之前），动词时态应为过去式。原句“I usually did in before I enter in the I entered the university.”存在时态混用和多余词。建议把“enter in”改为正确的短语“entered the university”，并删除多余的词。

× After I entered I entered the university I have a new iPad I would use a app called Goo Notes to write my craft.

✓ After I entered the university, I had a new iPad and I would use an app called GoodNotes to write my notes.

句子包含过去发生的事件，主要时态应为过去式，所以“have”要改为过去式“had”。另外有重复短语和冠词错误（“a app”应为“an app”），应用名称拼写应为“GoodNotes”，并将“craft”改为更合适的“notes”。中文建议：保持时态一致，注意冠词和单词拼写。

× I used to use paper to make a paper like paper airplane and playing with my friends or just draw colors I'm there.

✓ I used to use paper to make things like paper airplanes, play with my friends, or just draw and color while I was there.

原句中动词并列时形式不一致（make ... and playing ... or just draw），并且时态需要保持过去习惯（used to），所以应使用不带 -ing 的动词原形并保持一致：“make ... , play ... , or draw ...”。另外将“paper like paper airplane”调整为更自然的表达。中文建议：并列动词要用相同形式，过去习惯用“used to + 动词原形”。

× Yes, in my university some lessons need to use the physical querters.

✓ Yes, at my university some lessons require using physical materials.

介词应使用“at my university”而不是“in my university”。此外“need to use the physical querters”结构不自然且单词“querters”拼写错误，改为“require using physical materials”更合适。中文建议：表示在某个学校时用“at”，并注意单词拼写和更地道的搭配。

× And in my laboratory I would usually record my data with physical letters.

✓ And in my laboratory I usually record my data with physical notebooks/papers.

如果这是现在的常态，应使用一般现在时“usually record”而不是“would usually record”。“physical letters”容易引起歧义，改为“physical notebooks”或“papers”。中文建议：描述现在的习惯用一般现在时，选择准确名词。

× Yes, I think handwriting later still important to people since not all of the people of people have electronic iPad or other laptop.

✓ Yes, I think handwriting is still important to people since not everyone has an iPad or a laptop.

句中缺少动词“is”，并且时态为一般现在时。重复“of the people of people”是冗余且错误，应改为“not everyone has”。注意冠词用法：通常说“an iPad”或“a laptop”。中文建议：现在一般陈述用“is/has”，避免重复短语。

× Do you carry paper and pens with you when you go out? Student: No, I don't since it's some kind of it's it's not convenient

✓ No, I don't, since it's not convenient.

原句中存在重复“it's some kind of it's it's”并且表达不连贯。应删去多余部分，保持主谓一致。中文建议：避免重复和冗余，从句用法用“since it's not convenient”即可。