纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 在回答中注意语法和句子结构的正确性，避免重复表达，并尽量在一句话中完整回答问题后再补充细节。可以把时态和动词形式改为正确的用法，使用连接词提升连贯性，例如先给出主题句，然后补充频率或感受。

範例: Yes, I used to make paper airplanes when I was a child. They were easy to fold, and I often played with my friends in the neighborhood, which was a lot of fun.

建議: 避免重复前文内容，注意冠词和动词形式（a airplane → a paper airplane; play → played）。先直接回答问题，然后用具体细节（例如频率、情景、感受）丰富内容，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: I liked making paper airplanes as a child. I made them almost every day and raced them with friends in the park, which made our afternoons really enjoyable.

建議: 减少填充词（uh, um），保持简洁完整的句子。直接回答后说明原因并举例，比如频率或场景，结尾要完整。使用连接词如 'because' 或 'so' 来解释原因。

範例: No, I don't write physical letters anymore because I usually send messages or call people on my phone, which is much faster and more convenient.

建議: 回答时要避免语法错误和不完整句（keep to right handwriter letter → keep handwritten letters）。先给简短明确的观点，然后用一到两句具体解释或例子支持观点，结尾要完整。

範例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters because they feel more personal and meaningful than digital messages, especially for special occasions like birthdays or anniversaries.

建議: 注意动词时态和形式（carried → carry），减少重复与停顿。直接回答后说明原因并给出具体例子，使用连接词使句子流畅，例如 'because'、'so'。

範例: No, I usually don't carry paper and pens because I use my phone to take notes or record information, which saves space and is very convenient.

× Yes. When I was a child, I used to making paper airplanes and it's simple to it.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I used to make paper airplanes and it's simple to do.

句中“used to”后面应接动词原形，所以“making”应改为“make”。另外“it's simple to it”中多余“it”，应为“it's simple to do”。改正建议：把“used to making”改为“used to make”，删除多余的“it”。

× It's simple to do that and I play it with my friend in our neighborhood.

✓ It's simple to do, and I played with my friends in our neighborhood.

句中“play it with my friend”用法不自然，动词时态应与“when I was a child”一致（过去时），且复数形式更常见。主语和宾语代词使用错误。建议改为过去时的“played”并使用“friends”。

× As I say, I used paper to make a airplane.

✓ As I said, I used paper to make an airplane.

“As I say”与上下文时态不符，应为过去述说的“As I said”。“a airplane”冠词错误，元音音素前用“an”。建议改为“As I said, I used paper to make an airplane.”

× It's easy to make it, and I often play it with my friend in neighborhood, which was a fun way to spend time together.

✓ It's easy to make, and I often played with my friends in the neighborhood, which was a fun way to spend time together.

“make it”中的“it”多余，可删。“play it with my friend in neighborhood”有多处问题：需过去时“played”，通常用复数“friends”，并且“neighborhood”前需定冠词“the”。建议使用“played with my friends in the neighborhood”。

× Uh, no, not anymore. Uh, I, uh, nowadays I just use, uh, phone to send message online or, uh, call someone.

✓ Uh, no, not anymore. Nowadays I just use my phone to send messages online or call someone.

“nowadays”已经表示现在时，不需要重复“I, uh,”多余语气词删去。名词“phone”前需所有格“my”；“message”应使用复数“messages”或不可数形式。建议精简为“Nowadays I just use my phone to send messages online or call someone.”

× Uh, I think it's very convenient and.

✓ I think it's very convenient.

句子以连词“and”结尾导致句子不完整。应删除结尾“and”或补充内容。建议改为完整句子“I think it's very convenient.”

× Umm, yes, I think there are still some people, uh, keep to uh, right handwriter letter today because it's more personal and meaningful, umm, than the message online.

✓ Umm, yes, I think there are still some people who still keep handwritten letters today because they're more personal and meaningful than online messages.

原句中“keep to right handwriter letter”结构错误。“handwriter”应为形容词“handwritten”；需要关系代词“who”；“message online”应为“online messages”；时态与主谓一致也需调整。建议使用“people who still keep handwritten letters”并把比较对象改为复数“online messages”。

× And they will.

✓ And they will keep them.

原句不完整，“They will”后应接动词或补语以完成意思。根据上下文应为“keep them”或“keep writing them”。建议写成“And they will keep them.”或“And they will keep writing them.”

× No, I, I don't, uh, carried in, uh, when I go out, umm, because I, uh, just use my phone to take notes or, or record information, then that help me, uh, save some space in my bag

✓ No, I don't carry them when I go out, because I just use my phone to take notes or record information; that helps me save some space in my bag.

“don't carried”是错误的助动词+过去分词搭配，正确应为“don't carry”（一般现在时）。“carry in”结构错误，应为“carry them”或“carry a pen and paper”。“then that help me”主语单数，应为“helps”。建议把句子整理为现在时的一致表达。

× And uh, it's uh, you, you mobile phone is very convenient.

✓ And my mobile phone is very convenient.

原句中“you, you mobile phone”错误地用“you”且重复。应使用所有格“my”或“your”根据说话者语境此处为“my”。建议改为“And my mobile phone is very convenient.”