纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Correct some grammar and make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the noun 'Orikamese' to 'origami' (if that's what you meant) and avoid redundancy. Add a brief reason or example using a linking word (e.g., 'but' or 'so').

範例: Yes, I used to make paper crafts when I was younger, especially origami and handmade greeting cards for friends. However, I don't have time to do them now because my schedule is very busy, so I mainly use my phone for quick notes instead.

建議: Be more direct and fix small phrasing issues. Use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details with linking words like 'for example' or 'so'. Replace 'back in the days' with 'back then.'

範例: As a child, I loved drawing and coloring on recycled paper from my parents' workplace. For example, my sisters and I would spend afternoons creating pictures and little comic strips together.

建議: Make the response more concise and natural. Start with a direct 'No' and then briefly explain why using linking words like 'because' or 'since.' Avoid awkward phrases like 'the coming of social media.'

範例: No, I rarely write physical letters anymore because social media and instant messaging are much faster and more convenient, whereas letters can take several days to arrive.

建議: Improve grammar and sentence flow. Begin with a clear opinion, use correct verb forms, and avoid repetition. Provide one specific example and a brief reason using linking words like 'for example' and 'because.'

範例: I think only a few people still keep handwritten letters nowadays. For example, my mother often writes to her close friends in other provinces because she prefers the personal touch of a letter.

建議: Make the sentence grammatically complete and more natural. Start with 'No' then give a concise reason and a brief contrast if needed. Replace 'phone applications' with 'phone apps' or 'my phone' and finish the thought.

範例: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens anymore because I use note apps on my phone, which are more convenient and easier to organize and access.

× I usually made a number of crafts when I was younger such as Orikamese or greeting cards for my friends.

✓ I usually made a number of crafts when I was younger, such as origami or greeting cards for my friends.

The sentence uses the past tense 'made' correctly for a past habit, but 'Orikamese' is a misspelling/nonstandard word; 'origami' is the correct noun. Also add a comma after 'younger' before the example. Suggestion: correct the noun to 'origami' and punctuate the list correctly.

× However, I don't have any opportunities to do them these days because my schedule is packed.

✓ However, I don't have any opportunities to do them these days because my schedule is packed.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense; no change needed. Keep present simple 'don't have' to describe current lack of opportunity.

× I remember enjoying drawing and coloring in paper, especially recycled paper from my parents' work.

✓ I remember enjoying drawing and coloring on paper, especially recycled paper from my parents' workplace.

Use 'on paper' rather than 'in paper' to describe drawing surface. 'Parents' work' is vague; 'parents' workplace' is clearer. Tense 'remember enjoying' is fine for past memory.

× So I would do these two activities with my sisters back in the days.

✓ So I used to do these two activities with my sisters back in the day.

For past habitual actions, use 'used to' rather than 'would' when referring to childhood routines in informal speech; 'back in the day' is the idiomatic phrase (not 'back in the days'). Suggestion: use 'used to' and correct idiom.

× No, because the coming of social media plays a major role in texting and messaging people instead of writing physical letters, which requires a couple of days to be sent to the receiver.

✓ No, because the rise of social media has made texting and messaging the main way people communicate instead of writing physical letters, which can take a couple of days to reach the recipient.

'The coming of social media' is awkward; 'the rise of social media' is natural. Use present perfect 'has made' to describe a change that affects the present. 'Texting and messaging people' is wordy; 'texting and messaging' is sufficient. 'Requires a couple of days to be sent to the receiver' is passive and awkward; better: 'can take a couple of days to reach the recipient.' Suggestion: use clearer nouns and appropriate tense for present consequence.

× I think only a few people still reserving the conventional way of communication.

✓ I think only a few people still reserve the conventional way of communication.

The verb form 'reserving' is incorrect after 'people still'; use base verb 'reserve' in present simple to match 'I think' general statement. Alternatively, 'still use the conventional way of communication' would be more natural. Suggestion: use 'reserve' or better 'use' for habitual present.

× For example, my mother she usually write letters to her best friends in other provinces.

✓ For example, my mother usually writes letters to her best friends in other provinces.

The sentence has a redundant subject pronoun 'she' after 'my mother' and a subject-verb agreement error: 'writes' required for third person singular. Remove 'she' and change 'write' to 'writes'. Suggestion: do not repeat subject and ensure verb agrees with third person singular.

× So I think most people don't use handwritten letters

✓ So I think most people don't use handwritten letters.

Add final period. The clause 'don't use handwritten letters' is correct present simple to describe current habit. No further tense change needed.

× No I don't carry paper and pens anymore because I can take notes on my phone applications which are much more convenient and easier to look

✓ No, I don't carry paper and pens anymore because I can take notes on my phone apps, which are much more convenient and easier to view.

Add comma after 'No'. 'Phone applications' is wordy; 'phone apps' is natural. The phrase 'easier to look' is incorrect; use 'easier to view' or 'easier to access.' Tense 'don't carry' and 'can take' are correct for present habit and ability. Suggestion: use natural collocations 'phone apps' and complete the comparative phrase with a proper verb.