纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly answer first, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitation and correct repetitions. Use a linking phrase to connect your general answer to the cultural example.

範例: Not really. I don't do paper crafts much myself, but paper-cutting is a traditional art in China. For example, people often create intricate red paper designs for festivals, which shows how skilled artisans can be.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific details using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense, articles) and keep sentences compact.

範例: I loved drawing on paper as a child. At school, art lessons taught basic pencil techniques, so I enjoyed sketching simple pictures such as houses and animals. Also, I practiced copying cartoons to improve my lines.

建議: Provide a clear direct answer, then give precise examples and correct sentence fragments. Use linking words and avoid vague phrases like 'maybe'.

範例: Almost never. I send most messages by email or chat on my iPad, and I only write on paper for official documents, such as signing legal forms or sending certified letters.

建議: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary. Say who keeps letters and why, and contrast with modern habits using linking words. Avoid double negatives and filler words.

範例: Some people still keep handwritten letters for sentimental reasons, such as old greeting cards or postcards. However, most people rely on digital communication now, so the habit of writing letters has declined.

建議: Give a direct short answer, then explain with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove fillers like 'uh' and improve grammar (habit of taking → habit of taking paper and pen).

範例: No, I don't. I usually take my smartphone or laptop to jot things down because they are more convenient, so I rarely carry paper and a pen when I go out.

× Actually it's a a traditional culture in my country.

✓ Actually it's a traditional culture in my country.

The sentence contains a duplicated indefinite article 'a a'. Remove the extra 'a' to produce the correct article usage: 'a traditional culture'. Also 'it's' is acceptable as contraction for 'it is.'

× In school we had the art lessons where teacher show us some basic drawing technique with a pencil and enjoying the sketching.

✓ In school we had art lessons where the teacher showed us some basic drawing techniques with a pencil and we enjoyed sketching.

Multiple issues: missing definite article before 'teacher' and incorrect verb tenses/forms. According to the list, fix article errors and verb forms: use 'the teacher' and past tense 'showed' to match 'had'. 'Technique' should be plural 'techniques' to match 'some'. Change 'enjoying the sketching' to 'we enjoyed sketching' for correct sentence structure and verb form.

× Sketching simple picture like house and animals.

✓ I sketched simple pictures like houses and animals.

This fragment lacks a subject and correct verb form. Convert to a complete past-tense sentence to match context: 'I sketched' and use plural 'pictures' and plural 'houses' for natural expression.

× Almost everything is handled through the e-mail and the chat, iPad and some digital documents.

✓ Almost everything is handled through email, chat, my iPad and other digital documents.

Use of definite article 'the e-mail' is unnecessary; 'email' and 'chat' are uncountable here. Capitalize 'iPad' and make ownership clear by adding 'my' if referring to personal device. Also reorder items for natural phrasing.

× The only time I use now.

✓ There is almost no time I use paper now.

Original fragment is incomplete and lacks clarity. Provide a full sentence that expresses intended meaning: 'There is almost no time I use paper now.' This uses 'there is' construction to indicate existence/time.

× Maybe I need to send some official character or maybe some legal fields.

✓ Maybe I need to send some official documents or deal with legal matters.

'Official character' and 'legal fields' are unnatural word choices. Replace with 'official documents' and 'legal matters' to convey intended meaning. This aligns with correct noun usage and collocations.

× Every few people do not accept for some sentimental reason like keeping older greeting card or more postcard.

✓ A few people still keep handwritten items for sentimental reasons, like old greeting cards or postcards.

'Every few people do not accept' is incorrect quantifier usage. Use 'A few people still keep' to indicate some people continue the practice. Adjust nouns to plural and use natural collocations 'for sentimental reasons.'

× I think uh, people rely on the digital tools and umm, we don't have the habit of writing.

✓ I think people rely on digital tools, and we don't have the habit of writing by hand.

Remove unnecessary definite article before 'digital tools' and clarify 'writing' with 'by hand' for precision. Pronoun usage 'we' is acceptable; this correction focuses on article and clarity.

× Uh, Nope. Uh, actually I usually uh, write something with smartphone and laptop and uh, they are very convenient, so I don't have the habit taking with some, uh, paper and pen when I go out.

✓ No. Actually I usually write on my smartphone or laptop because they are very convenient, so I don't have the habit of taking paper and a pen when I go out.

Several pronoun/article errors: use 'No' instead of 'Nope' for formality is optional. Use possessive 'my smartphone' and 'a pen'. Use correct preposition 'write on' and phrase 'the habit of taking' to form a proper gerund construction. Remove filler words for clarity.