纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答自然但有些重复与小错误。应更直接用主题句开头，避免口语填充词（like），并把细节压缩为两到三句，使用连接词使表达更连贯。可纠正“origami crepes”应为“origami cranes”。建议在一两句中说明过去常做的和现在偶尔做的，并给出简短原因或感受。

範例: Yes, I have. When I was a child I often made origami cranes and paper balls, and now I sometimes fold small paper stones when I'm bored because it helps me relax.

建議: 回答生动、有意象，但表达有些不清晰（“floating dam”用词不当）。建议改用更准确的词汇并保持两句以内：一句主题句说明喜欢做什么，第二句描述感受或原因，并用连接词衔接。

範例: I loved folding paper boats and sailing them in puddles after the rain, because it felt like sending off little adventures and made playtime more imaginative.

建議: 回答清晰、有感情，但可更具体说明写信的频率或场合以丰富内容。保持简短，使用连接词衔接原因与结果。

範例: Yes, I still write physical letters occasionally, especially for birthdays or thank-you notes, because holding a handwritten letter feels personal and it often makes the recipient very happy.

建議: 内容有意义但句子结构混乱且有词汇错误（如“Handwriter”、“battery wishes”），需要重组句子并使用连接词，提供具体例子说明谁会保存信件和为什么。避免拼写和语法错误。

範例: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters, especially from close friends or family, because these letters have personal meaning and help them remember special moments.

建議: 回答表达明确但有重复与语法问题（“It can't be can't be replaced”）。建议用一到两句直接回应，说明习惯、原因并用连接词。可补充具体场合或例子来丰富内容。

範例: Yes, I usually carry a notebook and a pen when I go out, because when I get an idea I need to write it down to clear my mind, and the physical act of writing helps me organize my thoughts.

× I used to make simple paper crafts with like origami crepes and paper balls when I was a kid, and sometimes I still fold little paper stones now when I'm bored.

✓ I used to make simple paper crafts like origami cranes and paper balls when I was a kid, and sometimes I still fold little paper cranes now when I'm bored.

原句中“origami crepes”拼写和词汇错误，应为“origami cranes”（折纸鹤）。另外“like”与“with like”搭配不当，去掉“with”。句中“paper stones”不自然，推测为“paper cranes”（纸鹤），因此替换为“paper cranes”。这些属于名词使用和冠词/复数的词选择问题，应使用正确单词以表达意图。建议多核对常见折纸名称并注意搭配用法。

× When I was a kid, I loved folding paper boats and the floating dam in the small puddles after rain. It felt like sending little adventures off.

✓ When I was a kid, I loved folding paper boats and floating them in the small puddles after rain. It felt like sending little adventures off.

原句中“the floating dam”语义不通，可能想表达“把纸船放在小水洼里让它们漂浮”，应改为“floating them”。这是句子结构和词语选择错误（属于句子结构错误）。建议把动作和宾语明确连接，保证动词与宾语一致。

× It makes receivers really happy and it's such a nice ritual thing to do.

✓ It makes the recipients really happy, and it's such a nice ritual to do.

“receivers”用法生硬，通常用“recipients”或“people who receive them”。“ritual thing”冗余且不自然，改为“ritual”。这些属于代词/名词选择和形容词短语使用问题。建议使用更自然的名词并避免冗余表达。

× Yes they do especially from good friends Handwriter letters carry personal meaning and the battery wishes so people keep them to remember special moments

✓ Yes, they do, especially when they are from good friends. Handwritten letters carry personal meaning and better preserve wishes, so people keep them to remember special moments.

原句缺少标点且句子连接混乱，存在拼写错误“Handwriter”和“battery wishes”。应为“Handwritten letters”和“better preserve wishes”或更自然的表达。这是句子结构与词汇拼写错误。建议分句并使用正确的形容词和动词，保证连贯性。

× Yeah, I always think then when I get an idea certainly, I need to write it down to clear my mind.

✓ Yeah, I always think that when I get an idea, I need to write it down to clear my mind.

原句中“think then”和“certainly”位置不当，造成语序混乱。正确结构为“think that when ...”。这是代词/从句连接的句子结构问题。建议使用从句连接词“that”并把副词放在合适位置。

× It can't be can't be replaced.

✓ It can't be replaced.

原句重复“It can't be can't be”，属于书写/句子结构错误。删除重复部分即可。建议写完后检查是否有重复词组。

× Touching paper while writing makes my thoughts more organized.

✓ Touching paper while writing makes my thoughts more organized.

该句语法正确，无需改动。保持原句。