纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct noun forms and tense consistency, and avoid redundancy. Add one specific detail with a linking word to enrich the answer.

範例: Yes. I made many paper crafts at primary school, such as paper airplanes, origami animals and folded stars. For example, I remember folding a detailed crane during arts class, and because we practiced it a lot, my classmates and I could make them quickly and decorate the classroom.

建議: Use accurate vocabulary and clearer sentence structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, especially) and specific details. Correct small errors (paper clothes→paper crafts; photograph that can actually jump→a frog that could actually jump captured on camera).

範例: As a child, I liked making paper crafts and drawing on paper. For example, I often folded origami frogs and once managed to make one that could actually jump, so I took a photo of it and showed it proudly to my friends.

建議: Remove hesitations and fix vocabulary mistakes (special kittens→special occasions; families→family). Keep answers concise and use a linking phrase to give a reason. Aim for two to three clear sentences.

範例: Yes, I still write handwritten letters to my family and friends for birthdays and other special occasions because they feel more personal and heartfelt than emails or texts.

建議: Avoid repetition and combine short sentences for fluency. Provide a brief contrast or exception to show nuance (linking word: however). Use precise phrasing.

範例: I don't think many people keep handwritten letters nowadays because texting is faster and more convenient; however, some people still save special letters as keepsakes.

建議: Reduce repetition and fix collocations (drop them down→write them down). Start with a topic sentence, then add a concise reason with a linking word. Use varied vocabulary for habits and convenience.

範例: Yes, I always carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out because it's a habit and very convenient; therefore, I can quickly write down ideas or inspiration when they come to me.

× Yes, I've made some craft with paper when I was at primary school and I remembered that we folded lots of paper airplanes, origami, and other patterns like stars, and we had a lot of fun.

✓ Yes, I've made some crafts with paper when I was at primary school, and I remember that we folded lots of paper airplanes, origami, and other patterns like stars, and we had a lot of fun.

Mismatch between 'some craft' (singular/uncountable) and intended plural countable meaning; use 'some crafts' for multiple items. Also changed 'I remembered' to 'I remember' to match present perfect 'I've made' and to keep the recollection simple present; this improves tense consistency.

× I especially remember the frog because I managed to photograph that can actually jump, which made me feel quite happy.

✓ I especially remember the frog because I managed to make a video of it actually jumping, which made me feel quite happy.

The phrase 'managed to photograph that can actually jump' is ungrammatical: 'photograph' typically takes an object, and 'that can actually jump' mismatches structure. Use 'managed to make a video of it actually jumping' or 'managed to photograph it while it jumped' to use correct verb forms and clear object reference.

× I really love umm, the writing handwritten letters to my families and friends on on their birthdays or at some special kittens.

✓ I really love writing handwritten letters to my family and friends on their birthdays or on special occasions.

Multiple issues: 'the writing handwritten' is redundant and article usage is incorrect; 'families' should be 'family' when referring to one's family as a collective; 'on on' is repeated; 'special kittens' is incorrect word choice—likely meant 'occasions'. Removed redundant article 'the' and corrected nouns and phrase choice.

× I feel that they are more personal and heartfelt than emails or text messages.

✓ I feel that they are more personal and heartfelt than emails or text messages.

No correction needed; pronoun 'they' correctly refers to 'handwritten letters'. Included here to show it meets the list and requires no change.

× I don't think so. I think most people get used to sending text messages on their phones. It's it's definitely faster and more convenient. So it's it's not that common for people to write handwritten letters.

✓ I don't think so. I think most people are used to sending text messages on their phones. It's definitely faster and more convenient, so it's not that common for people to write handwritten letters.

'Get used to' is present-tense progressive idiom but the correct stative expression here is 'are used to' meaning habitual state. Also removed repeated 'it's' duplicates and combined sentences for fluency.

× Yes I do. I normally carry a small notebook and a pen with me when I go out. It's become my habit. It's quite convenient. Whenever I get some ideas or some inspiration I just drop them down immediately.

✓ Yes, I do. I normally carry a small notebook and a pen with me when I go out. It has become a habit. It's quite convenient. Whenever I get an idea or some inspiration, I write it down immediately.

'It's become' is incorrect; use present perfect 'It has become' for change over time. 'Drop them down' is incorrect verb choice and plural reference—use 'write it down' or 'note them down'. Changed 'some ideas or some inspiration' to 'an idea or some inspiration' for natural collocation and clarity.